Thanks so much for stopping by, Ann. I'm thrilled that I've spurred you on to write your synopsis. Good luck with the agents.

Actually, Victoria struggled in school as well, although not to the degree of her daughter. No one believed in Victoria’s desire to attend college when she was signing up for high school classes. She was told by her father that she wasn’t college material, and she believed him. Victoria wanted to make sure her daughter knew she had someone who believed in her college desire no matter what Victoria had to do to make it possible.

Thanks so much for stopping by, Victoria. Thanks for sharing the post, and thanks too for sharing your character and story.

You've done an excellent job letting us in on the story's plot and the conflict your main character is facing. What you could look to add is something more about Victoria. From what you've given us all we really know is she's a mother of five young children and one of them has a disability.

One thing I share in class is in the synopsis be sure you share your character's last name, without one, it's almost like they're only half a character. 🙂

Next, you could share some adjectives that describe Victoria. Is she young? Is she divorced? Happily married? Is she a high school drop out and that's why the inferiority taunts? Maybe she's middle-aged and frumpy?

Remember Becky's science nerd, magic sceptic who sees demons and is going to have to deal with Merlin? Just with those adjectives the reader can tell there's going to be conflict.

So I'll just make some stuff up 🙂 and add to what you have to give you an idea. (my adds in all caps--no yelling 🙂 )

When a high school counselor informs Victoria SMITH, A HIGH SCHOOL DROPOUT, RECENTLY DIVORCED, STRUGGLING-TO-MAKE-ENDS-MEET, mother of five, that her oldest child who is learning-disabled should not take regular classes in high school, and should not go to college, Victoria confronts her own fears and begins college herself. Victoria tries hiding from Inferiority’s taunts throughout college. Most times, it doesn’t work.

By adding in the high school dropout, recently divorced, struggling-to-make-ends-meet the reader can guess some of the "fears" you mention and can imagine why there are inferiority taunts.

Hope this gives you some ideas and thanks again for sharing.

Thanks, Suzanne, for this excellent post. I've shared it online. I'd be interested in what you think of my character above.

Thanks so much for stopping by Jeanne, and for the glowing review of class. Hope to read more of your stories soon.

Thanks so much for reading and commenting. Happy to hear you're not scared anymore about synopsis writing. Yay! And whoo hoo, another reason to come to Oz--visiting you and Writers Tears. 🙂