Comments on: First Page Critique https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/ A Blog On Writing Wed, 15 Jan 2025 07:04:34 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=7.0 By: Jenny Hansen https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132435 Wed, 28 Mar 2018 19:08:58 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132435 In reply to Laura Drake.

True. But I'm still amazed. 🙂

]]> By: LIsa Ciarfella https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132418 Tue, 27 Mar 2018 15:28:16 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132418 In reply to Laura Drake.

Awesome!

]]> By: Writing Links…3/26/18 – Where Genres Collide https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132386 Mon, 26 Mar 2018 11:03:43 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132386 […] https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/ “This month I chose an ‘en media res’ beginning. They can be fast-moving and titillating – but they’re not easy! You need to clearly lay out the stakes, and since you don’t have time to flesh out a character, (and make us care about them) at least give us a rough idea of who the characters are, and lay the emotion!” First page critique. […]

]]> By: Laura Drake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132384 Sun, 25 Mar 2018 08:37:47 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132384 In reply to LIsa Ciarfella.

I LOVE first sentences, Lisa...we did a blog on just those! It's here: https://wp.me/p4HOYN-6hy And here: https://wp.me/p4HOYN-27m

]]> By: Laura Drake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132383 Sun, 25 Mar 2018 08:34:03 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132383 In reply to jeanne kern.

Glad it's helpful to you, Jeanne. I can only learn by example...practical lessons are the only way I learn!

]]> By: LIsa Ciarfella https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132381 Sat, 24 Mar 2018 21:49:01 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132381 First sentences always a clincher...if they're done well!

]]> By: jeanne kern https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132380 Sat, 24 Mar 2018 18:21:18 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132380 Love this! We all learn by example, and openings have so many jobs to do; your comments not only show how to clear up the example, they remind us of those jobs and our obligation to approach the word as readers. Thank you.

]]> By: Laura Drake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132379 Sat, 24 Mar 2018 08:54:51 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132379 In reply to johntshea.

Johntshea - I think the critical ones could - most only take a couple words - like ‘I crawled forward from the airmen packed cargo hold’ to show us there are more men on the plane. Or, ...'our pilot, smiled when he saw my reflection.' - in the storm-darkened windshield.

Almost all the suggestions I made are small tweaks only.

]]> By: Laura Drake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132378 Sat, 24 Mar 2018 08:51:33 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132378 In reply to Karen DeBonis.

Thank you, Karen!

]]> By: Laura Drake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2018/03/33490/#comment-132377 Sat, 24 Mar 2018 08:51:08 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=33490#comment-132377 In reply to Jenny Hansen.

I think if you've seen those, they've been edited a BUNCH, Jenny!

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