Comments on: First Page Critique

By: Fae Rowen

Fae Rowen — Sun, 04 Nov 2018 05:18:34 +0000

In reply to LauraDrake. I'm with Denise! Even if I get something very different from the author of this first page, I still get valuable takeaway. Thanks, Laura!

By: Luther

Luther — Tue, 30 Oct 2018 19:59:41 +0000

The Department of Vagrancy Police is what DVP stands for. I am still analyzing your comments. I believe that they are helpful overall, and I also appreciate the feedback from other writers. Thanks for all the help. Luther

By: Christopher Lentz

Christopher Lentz — Tue, 30 Oct 2018 17:18:44 +0000

Laura, you catapulted it out of the park...again. I will be your eternal student at The Drake Academy for Storytelling.

By: Jenny Hansen

Jenny Hansen — Mon, 29 Oct 2018 02:43:27 +0000

In reply to LauraDrake. Interesting. I bought it for my daughter because I loved it so much and I wanted it on her shelf for a few years to get her interested. (I have The Phantom Tollbooth and the Chronicles of Narnia ready for her too.) We're just finishing up the Harry Potter series right now and it has been a huge hit.

By: LauraDrake

LauraDrake — Sun, 28 Oct 2018 10:01:34 +0000

In reply to littlemissw. Thank you, littlemissw, for nailing WHY I couldn't finish Little Women when I picked it up a few months ago. When I read for pleasure, I try to turn off the editor in my head, so I didn't even notice why it wasn't engaging, just that it wasn't. Duh, huh?

By: littlemissw

littlemissw — Sun, 28 Oct 2018 02:55:36 +0000

Well done to the brave author - it's so hard to put your work out there for critique. As usual though, Laura, you do it in such a helpful and constructive way. It's interesting, I'm re-reading Louisa May Alcott's work (because I love it) and omniscient just the way books were written in her time but now it's so distancing. I still love Little Women and all the sequels but I definitely feel that there's more to the story.

By: LauraDrake

LauraDrake — Sat, 27 Oct 2018 21:55:40 +0000

In reply to barbdelong. Thanks Barb! The check is in the mail...

By: barbdelong

barbdelong — Sat, 27 Oct 2018 21:54:02 +0000

Ditto what Jeanne Kern said!

By: Laura Drake

Laura Drake — Sat, 27 Oct 2018 13:02:41 +0000

In reply to Jeanne Kern. Awww, thanks, Jeanne. But it's not hard when you have no life! ;) And thanks for reading my books!

By: Jeanne Kern

Jeanne Kern — Sat, 27 Oct 2018 10:23:20 +0000

Laura, I am awed by you. I don't know how you find time to breathe with all you do. Your blog, your website, the speaking engagements, the conferences, the organizations you run and /or participate in, to say nothing of your writing and your actual life--whew! And then to take on this challenge: the reading of the tons of first pages, deciding which one(s) will make the most universal of lessons. You are a heroine for sure. Thanks again for insightful teaching. And I can't wait for your December release.