Comments on: Use Comparison for Power https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/ A Blog On Writing Thu, 02 Jan 2025 21:41:17 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=7.1.4 By: Laura Drake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143641 Mon, 23 Dec 2019 07:53:51 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143641 In reply to jeannenicholas.

Love the oven mitt, JL!

]]> By: Hallie https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143640 Sun, 22 Dec 2019 14:57:23 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143640 In reply to barbaralinnprobst.

I enjoyed this post, and I'm going to revisit a finished work and make sure I have utilized this advice. I don't mind not understanding references in a story; I enjoy looking them up. I learn a lot of new things that way.

]]> By: jeannenicholas https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143639 Sun, 22 Dec 2019 04:26:01 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143639 Great Article. Loved the video of DDiv. I'm still working on my novella. But here is a few.

Amy found her eyes pulled in fascination when Jillian kicked out her boots and stretched her tight jeans out over those muscular thighs. It was like watching a large jaguar cat that might purr if you stroke her the right way.

She pulled her black Gi down, its heavyweight material scratchy and pressing like a thick oven mitt against her skin.

Those guys were groaning like elephants in heat.

The friend zone Jillian had fallen into was brushed away like a prairie fire sweeping over the crops of sun-dried corn stalks.

I'm thinking I need to have a few more metaphors at this point to compensate for the LIKE analogies. But it is WIP.
Thanks for the quick Tutorial.
JLNicky

]]> By: LauraDrake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143638 Sat, 21 Dec 2019 08:52:58 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143638 Love those, Denise!

]]> By: dholcomb1 https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143637 Sat, 21 Dec 2019 06:48:23 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143637 From an MS I recently submitted:

Tony suddenly felt like the insect pinned on a mounting board.

and

Bella looked in the mirror and was horrified at her brunette curls going every which way but tame as her mind raced to try to find a way out of today.

Denise

]]> By: LauraDrake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143635 Sat, 21 Dec 2019 00:06:26 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143635 In reply to Julie Glover.

Wooo hooo! Love it!

]]> By: Julie Glover https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143634 Fri, 20 Dec 2019 22:24:11 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143634 I love comparisons! Some of my favorite things to write. Since you asked, here's a quick simile from Sharing Hunter you might appreciate: "Being with Hunter might be as fun as an eight-second bull ride..." This from the character who would totally get on a bucking bull with a grin and a yeehaw! 😉

LOVE your example! Great stuff, Laura.

]]> By: Terry Odell https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143633 Fri, 20 Dec 2019 22:10:06 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143633 In reply to LauraDrake.

OK - Yes, I have seen My Cousin Vinnie. A bazillion years ago, and had no clue what his last name was. But I try very hard to avoid any comparisons to "famous people" when I'm writing, figuring there are those out there who are my age and might not have been to a movie in 20 years.

]]> By: Laura Drake https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143631 Fri, 20 Dec 2019 21:42:01 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143631 In reply to christopherlentzauthor.

It IS, Chris! Love those - especially the grandmother’s kiss!

]]> By: christopherlentzauthor https://writersinthestormblog.com/2019/12/use-comparison-for-power/#comment-143627 Fri, 20 Dec 2019 18:12:56 +0000 https://writersinthestormblog.com/?p=38734#comment-143627 Thanks for reminding us about these powerful tools, Laura. Here are a few examples of word-wrangling in the first chapter of my most-recent novel, MY FRIEND MARILYN:
-- My eyes stretched open to the size of hub caps ...
-- Marilyn flashed a wedding-dress white grin.
-- I shrugged and squinted like a child who just spilled a glass of milk.
-- Her skin was as soft as a grandmother's kiss.
-- ... Marilyn confided in a girlish whisper with words spoken as if they were floating on pillows.

Keep helping us learn and grow. I'm convinced, it's a never-ending process!

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