Comments on: One Quick Fix For “Telling” In Deep Point Of View

By: Judith Cranswick

Judith Cranswick — Sun, 26 Jan 2020 16:07:22 +0000

Great post. I'm in the process of rewriting the latest novel so this is very timely.

By: Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson — Sat, 25 Jan 2020 21:06:35 +0000

In reply to Christine Dillon. Be sure to check out the 5 day deep pov challenge on Facebook. It's so much fun and the group has grown to about 500 -- and nearly everyone participates in the challenge.

By: Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson — Sat, 25 Jan 2020 21:05:35 +0000

In reply to Rick George. It's so easy to do. I really wish there were a set of hard and fast rules you could just do a search and find function to help dig them out. The search adds to the fun for me.

By: Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson — Sat, 25 Jan 2020 21:04:35 +0000

In reply to Kris Maze. Yes, a good visual/mental picture has always helped me understand things better. It seems so rude described this way, doesn't it. lol

By: Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson — Sat, 25 Jan 2020 21:03:36 +0000

In reply to Carol Michell Storey. Awesome! Glad you found it helpful. I love to ask questions and break things down into small steps.

By: Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson — Sat, 25 Jan 2020 21:02:26 +0000

In reply to Ann G.. You're very welcome. I love to get all geeky about deep pov. :D

By: Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson — Sat, 25 Jan 2020 21:01:48 +0000

In reply to jeannenicholas. It's all about context. Those words aren't bad, they add distance in certain contexts. :D Happy editing.

By: Christine Dillon

Christine Dillon — Sat, 25 Jan 2020 05:41:01 +0000

Wonderful post. So clear with helpful illustrations. I have found the red flag words of realised, noticed, remembered ... and now have some more to check - then , when ...

By: Rick George

Rick George — Sat, 25 Jan 2020 00:19:33 +0000

This is quite helpful, and thanks for the examples. I'm bookmarking this and using it as a tool to examine my drafts as a check to find places where I slip into narrator mode.

By: Kris Maze

Kris Maze — Fri, 24 Jan 2020 03:59:56 +0000

Thanks for the clear examples for the mysterious Deep POV. It is one thing to be wrapped up in reading it than to write it. I appreciate the description of being a shush and nod to the character - carry on!