Comments on: 4 Ways to Write Deeper with Personification

By: AloraMills

AloraMills — Thu, 25 Mar 2021 15:19:31 +0000

Lisa, I hadn’t replied on this before, but wanted to tell you how much I appreciate your posts. I have the habit of keeping a few open tabs with information that I find inspirational, and worth a re-read from time to time... especially when I feel I’m slipping into a rut. This is definitely one of those articles. It makes me step back, and look at things with a new perspective... taking time to consider the character’s surroundings, and how that could breathe new life into my writing.
Thanks for all the awesome advice you share. You’re such a blessing!

By: Amorina Rose

Amorina Rose — Thu, 04 Feb 2021 10:32:14 +0000

I enjoyed this so much I signed up to follow your blog.

By: johnrsermon

johnrsermon — Tue, 02 Feb 2021 20:40:25 +0000

In reply to Lisa Hall-Wilson. It really does. I just don't want to copy it even though I want to. It will help a lot though.

By: Karen DeBonis

Karen DeBonis — Fri, 29 Jan 2021 12:10:49 +0000

This is so good, Lisa, it spoon-feeds me inspiration. (See how good it is?) I'm sharing everywhere!

By: Lisa Wilson

Lisa Wilson — Thu, 28 Jan 2021 23:25:34 +0000

In reply to Alicia Butcher Ehrhardt. How the character feels - not the writer or the reader - is the point of deep POV. There is NO author voice, no narration - at all - in deep POV.

By: Alicia Butcher Ehrhardt

Alicia Butcher Ehrhardt — Thu, 28 Jan 2021 18:11:38 +0000

Your description made me wonder if I use it; I'll have to check. But I had another thought: narrator intrusion. Which I avoid at all cost. The difference has to be in how the character is reacting to the setting, etc. I don't want to hear myself, so everything has to be from the character's pov. I would never think of an 'angry rain' - it takes ME out of the story. I write close multiple third person pov for the mainstream trilogy in progress, and have written close first - but only for a story with a single character. I aim to elicit whatever will make the READER experience the rain as the character, not to tell the reader how the character feels about it. Huh. Thought provoking.

By: dholcomb1

dholcomb1 — Thu, 28 Jan 2021 02:55:38 +0000

I use it occasionally.

denise

By: anyongsaywhat

anyongsaywhat — Wed, 27 Jan 2021 23:11:53 +0000

Great reminder regarding personification. I've always struggled with relating weather to emotion, this provides another tool to improve on that. Thank you!

By: Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson — Wed, 27 Jan 2021 19:06:49 +0000

In reply to christopherlentzauthor.

Deep POV should work FOR you, not be a template or a prison. If the entire story is in deep pov, then why wouldn't the first few pages be too? I think our tendency is to deliver a lot of info up front and the reader doesn't need to know all of it right now to be pulled into the action.
I'm working on a blog post about the TV series Yellowstone and how the writing feels a lot like deep POV. You're just thrown into the story. Took me three episodes before I knew the names of all the main characters - but that didn't matter. I was hooked well before that.

I did write a post a while ago with those high-level kind of tips. THinking I should update it, but here it is: https://lisahallwilson.com/5-pro-tips-to-write-deep-pov-effectively/

...slip in some telling... Telling should be used strategically, where it's most efficient for the sake of the story. Backstory is another one of those things where our tendency is to give everything all at once, but the reader only needs a portion of it to understand what's going on right now. Backstory should answer one question for the reader and leave them with two more - ideally.

Hope that helps!

By: Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson — Wed, 27 Jan 2021 19:01:11 +0000

In reply to tiffanyyatesmartin. Glad it was helpful and thanks so much for the shares! Very appreciated.