Thanks for another great Deep POV post. I can't get enough of them!

That's awesome, Lisa! We'll look forward to that link. 🙂

I rather see infodump as trying to include more information than immediately (or even ever) needed, in such a way the reader is pulled out of the narrative. But I don’t find that in your example. Instead, I see a simple, succinct ‘show’ and a flourished, expansive ‘show.’

Either example seems quite fine. All depends upon the mood and purpose of the scene. Perhaps it’s a tribute to how well it was written, that I found your infodump example to be the more sensitive and effective of the two.

I did not really see it as interrupting narrative, though, and therefore not a good example of infodump-at least how I’ve understood the issue.

They're easy to fix - if you know what you're looking for AND how to fix it. Takes practice -- and it's easier to just not include them to begin with eventually.

Glad you found it helpful!

Yes, it’s definitely more work to convey those details through context and dialogue. Using the author voice in those scenes comes more naturally to me - I have to work hard to keep it in deep POV. Worth the effort though.

Some find using deep POV exclusively to be too intense, too intimate, or slow. This technique does favour stories that use introspection a lot. Some feel saving deep POV for key gut-punch moments in limited third or first person better for their story and voice. It’s all good.