From my novel, WATCHER: "I watch my daughter, the sunlight dancing across her long dark hair, cradle her swollen belly as she kneels to place the flowers on my empty grave."

I enjoyed this post and have been playing with the first line of my supernatural mystery. Here's one option: it was the middle of September in a small village in northern Germany when the first crop circle appeared. Another option is: A black bird crashed into Eleanor's kitchen window and it was not a good start to her day. Or, the one I have : Another strong gust of wind rattled the windowpanes. The laden, charcoal sky added to the ominous feeling. (Yes, I know... Storms and dreams but they're a big part of the story and I'm the quarters through the novel Appreciate your suggestions.

Thank you. The first tweak wouldn't be true. Other people also know there is a plan for him. Technically, in the belief system portrayed there is a plan for everyone, but not everyone shares the belief and most people don't feel the plan at work within them the way Jon'than does.

I will change to "he."

Thank you, Jenn. I appreciate your feedback. I'm relieved to hear that it works as a hook.

It's great that you already have first lines. What a great springboard for your writing! 🙂

MG or YA??

They're both illusion-workers who rarely use their own faces. For Nick to come across Valerie undisguised was almost as surprising as realizing she wasn't dead.

Rewritten more than 3 drafts...

The first line of my work in progress:

Wasabi on the nipples burns.