by Ellen Buikema
Capturing the senses lures us into the story, allowing us to experience what the characters hear, see, smell, taste, and touch.
Sounds conjure strong memories. Deep vibrations from a bass guitar floating through the air from a neighbor’s garage band practice might bring a smile of great memories or bring out your inner cranky person. How the sound makes you feel is dependent upon the emotions behind past experiences.
“When I’m writing, I’m more conscious of the sound, actually, than the meaning. I know what the rhythm of the sentence is going to be before I know what the words are going to be in it.” Phillip Pullman
When reading a piece of fiction that feels effortless, it has good flow, or cadence. This comes down to sentence length, number of of syllables in each chosen word, and the placement of punctuation. All of this will lead you to read at the desired rhythm of the writer. Rhythm can be regular, like a lullaby, or varied to keep a reader turning the pages.
The following scene from Conqueror by Conn Iggulden is a good example of this type of scene and great has great descriptions of sound.
“The Khan’s palace was lit with lamps that spat and crackled on the outer walls and gates. Inside, the sound of rain was a low roar that rose and fell in intensity, pouring as solid sheets over the cloisters. Servants gazed out into the yards and gardens, lost in the mute fascination that rain can hold. They stood in groups, reeking of wet wool and silk, their duties abandoned for a time while the storm passed.”
“She staggered forward, screaming and sobbing, bearing the torch aloft and certain that death was there for her, breathing softly, black wings rustling like those of the crows that waited, waited somewhere in the predawn darkness to sweep down on the eyes of the dead.”
" And the harpsichord; that was lovely. My sister used to play it. On summer evenings, she would sit at the keys with her back to the open French windows. And I can still remember that thin, rapid music and the vision of the swamp rising beyond her, the moss-hung cypresses floating against the sky. And there were the sounds of the swamp, a
chorus of creatures, the cry of the birds. I think we loved it. It made the rosewood furniture all the more precious, the music more delicate and desirable. Even when the wisteria tore the shutters oft the attic windows and worked its tendrils right into the whitewashed brick in less than a year . . . . Yes, we loved it. All except my brother.”
“Her voice was as rough as sandpaper. As long as Blomkvist lived, he would never forget her face as she went on the attack.”
“The idea of being taught consideration by a man who had just blasted away half his living-room wall seemed to be causing him intense suffering.”
Whether it’s the tone of your mother’s voice, a bee buzzing nearby, or nails on a chalkboard, sounds evoke memories wonderful and terrible. Use them to engage your readers.
What writers do well with sensory writing, particularly for sounds? Do you have any examples of writing using the sense of hearing you’d like to share?
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Author, speaker, and former teacher, Ellen L. Buikema has written non-fiction for parents and a series of chapter books for children with stories encouraging the development of empathy—sprinkling humor wherever possible. Her Works In Progress are, The Hobo Code, YA historical fiction and Crystal Memories, YA fantasy.
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