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Stop Wasting Your Marketing Money, Time, and Energy

By Lisa Norman

Do you hate marketing?

Great! I have good news for you: everything we know about marketing is changing, except for one thing: the core best practices. Things that have always been true are still true. All the hacks and elaborate technological hoops are moving and shifting, but I’d like to suggest that this is the best thing that could happen for writers.

I’ve watched too many writers spending valuable time and energy trying to do the things they feel they “should” do for marketing, while at the same time they tell me that they wish they could just write.

What if writing was the best marketing you could do?

What is successful marketing?

Successful marketing is giving your fans what they want from you. Writers and fans make connections that transcend technology. You need to understand what your true fans want. Create a memorable and engaging experience for your fans, one that makes them feel valued and appreciated, and they will love you and tell others about you.

But how do you do that? How do you know what your fans want?

If a shoe company discovered that their fans wanted jackets, they would have a choice: provide jackets or get new fans.

This sounds overly simplistic, but we need to remember: You want fans who love what you write.

Not everyone will be your true fan. You want to get your writing in front of those who will love it. For this to work, you’re going to need to showcase your writing.

Advertising, search, and email marketing are tools that we’ve used in the past to get eyes on our work. These tools are undergoing huge technological changes that we need to stay on top of, and that may change the way you decide to spend your marketing resources.

The Changing Landscape of Advertising, Search, and Email Marketing

Paid ads (Facebook, Amazon, etc.), search engine optimization (blogging!), and email marketing (newsletters!) are some of the most effective and widely used tools we have. They help us reach readers, bring them to our website, introduce them to our books, and turn them into loyal fans.

But it is important not to forget that your most powerful tool is writing brilliant books.

Other marketing tools change based on how people are interacting with technology, but readers’ connection to story and their desire to connect with storytellers is only growing stronger. People value connections with authors and stories they love.

Major changes to watch:

Changes in Advertising

Each new privacy law impacts the ability of advertisers to target specific people to sell products to. Have you noticed the shake-ups in social media channels lately? Most of them make their money through advertising. As people shift their behaviors and cut back on advertising, these platforms are struggling to survive.

Meta is testing an ad-free subscription model in the EU after the changes in privacy laws. Social media platforms make money from advertising. If they can't advertise effectively, they need to find a new way to make money.

Have you noticed the death of magazines and other spaces that were supported by advertising? People are cutting back on their advertising spending and many venues don’t have the subscriber base to survive without advertising revenue.

Review the Effectiveness of Your Ads

Is your paid advertising profitable? If not, maybe the problem isn’t you. Maybe you don’t need to learn the latest tricks in order to make money. Maybe you need to explore other marketing options!

I want to be clear here: some genres are still doing very well with paid advertising. If you’ve cracked the code and you’re making money with ads, just keep one eye on your profitability and continue to explore other marketing options. Don’t base your entire career on paid ads.

But if advertising isn’t working for you, I want to suggest that it is okay to not put your energy there. You have a guilt-free pass to stop.

As a writer, the takeaway here is that your paid advertising may be decreasing in power as privacy laws and ad-free subscriptions change the algorithms. Remember that the content you share on social media is only as effective as your connection with your audience. This means that focusing on connecting is not only more important, but it may also become more effective!

Everyone’s mileage with paid advertising will vary, but if you aren’t making money at it, this may be a great time to stop doing it entirely.

Changes in Email

Both Google and Yahoo have also introduced “new” requirements for bulk senders, those who send more than 5,000 emails per day. These requirements include:

  • Using your own custom domain name
  • Authenticating your domain with SPF, DKIM, or DMARC (link to my article)
  • Making it so people only have to click one button to unsubscribe
  • Keeping your spam complaints below 0.3% (meaning that the people on your list don’t complain)

These changes turn long-standing best practices into mandatory standards. The goal is to reduce spam.

I’d like you to consider this: if you are sending out something that people don’t want to receive, you may actually be sending spam.

Let that sink in.

If your only reason for contacting your fans is to sell them something, stop and think before pushing send: Would you like to receive that email? This applies whether you are sending 5 emails or 5,000 emails.

Now, think about the kinds of email you do like to receive, and apply it to the emails you send out.

  • Only send messages when you have something to say.
  • Only send your emails to people who want them.
  • Only send emails your fans want to read.

Changes in Google’s Accounts

Google has begun phasing out inactive email accounts, those that have not been logged into or used for over two years.

What does this mean? You may find that you have old addresses on your subscriber list that need to be removed, but be careful because, due to changing privacy practices, your system may not accurately be tracking who opens and reads your newsletters.

Changes in Privacy Protection

New privacy protection options from Apple and others are affecting the statistics from our websites and our newsletters.

If someone has privacy enabled on their email—and many people don’t even realize that they have turned these features on—you may not know that a reader has opened and read your email. I’ve had authors send emails to people saying, “I’m going to remove you because you haven’t been reading…” only to get angry emails back saying that they’ve been reading every one.

You can't accurately track how many of your subscribers open your emails. You also can't use email open rates as a guide for other actions, but they are still effective as general trends. Instead, you need to actively engage your readers, encouraging them to reply, comment, or click on something to send you a signal that they are there.

Sure, you can encourage your subscribers to add your emails to their VIP list, to ensure that they receive and see your emails, but that's asking your readers to take a technical action. Better to create emails they want. Emails they will read and respond to. (Spoiler: the trick is the superpower of your writing.)

Yes, I just told you that it is okay to not worry about those statistics and to focus on interacting with your readers!

Changes in Search Engines

Another trend that is shaping the future of search and email marketing is the rise of voice search and artificial intelligence like Bing’s Copilot, Google’s Bard, and many others. How people search is changing from keyword-focused to topic- and content-focused.

What does this mean for you? It means you have an advantage!

Writers write words. That may sound overly simplistic, but work with me here. Natural language is not just your native language, but your superpower. As a writer, you can write engagingly about topics that will interest your readers. This gives you a tremendous advantage over non-writers who own websites.

Keywords vs Stories

Search engines have never just looked for keywords, but that has been an easy way to study the results. Search engines are only as useful as their ability to provide people with the search information they’re looking for. If a search engine can’t do that, people will go elsewhere. Here's just one article about this change.

For years, businesses have focused on writing with a goal of being the best for specific words, specific topics they want to rank for. This is a highly competitive and technical skill.

Now, with “generative search experience” (GSE—the AI approach that is predicted to replace conventional search engines) those articles focused on words are losing ground fast. Hang out in the search engine optimization space for long and you see people freaking out over lost traffic. Writers do not need to panic, but they do need to notice that the world is changing.

Writers write words that tell stories.

Did you know business people are trying to learn how to write stories so they can score better in search engines? (Seriously—look at how many businesses are trying to hire writers these days.)

Don’t get distracted by all of the marketing aimed at helping businesses write keyword-focused stories. Writing stories is what you do naturally.

However, this only works if you are writing what your fans want to read. So, if you are filling your blog with random posts because you feel you should, here is your free pass to stop.

Yep, I just said that. If you aren’t going to blog about stuff your readers want to read and share about, don’t waste your time or energy. It won’t work. More about blogging next month.

How to Give Your Fans What They Want

The key to successful marketing is to understand and cater to your readers’ needs, preferences, and expectations. You need to create a memorable and engaging experience for them, one that makes them feel valued, appreciated, and entertained.

Here are some tips and best practices:

Know Your Audience

The first step to giving your fans what they want is to know who they are, what they want, and why they want it.

There are many tools out there to help, but most of them don’t work well for creative writers. Again, I’d like to suggest that your writing is and has always been one of the best ways to connect to your fans!

Create Valuable Content

How many times have I heard writers say that they just want to write? They don’t want to spend so much time marketing; they want to write! Guess what? Your readers want the same thing! They want you to stop trying to sell them stuff and just give them more stories!

Blog posts can include cut scenes, backstories, even flash fiction. Blog posts can become newsletters so that your true fans don’t miss out on any of the juicy story bits. And all this content can even feed into new stories, books, and other products!

You can figure out what connects with your readers in blog posts or in books. I think it is easier to experiment with a blog post! But there are authors who prefer to experiment by writing books. That’s an option. For authors who wish they could “just write,” a blog can be a powerful tool, if they are willing to keep at it for a long time.

I’d like to suggest that if you don’t have valuable content to put in your blog, you may want to consider not blogging. Look at the different types of websites. A business card website may be more appropriate for you if you don’t want to share engaging content!

Engage and Interact with Your Audience

The final step to giving your fans what they want is to engage and interact with them regularly and consistently. Foster a sense of community and belonging. You need to listen and respond to their feedback, questions, and comments. You want to acknowledge and appreciate their support.

You also need to encourage your fans to tell others about your stories.

There is a marketing principle that people won’t do what you don’t ask them to. So ask them! Ask your fans to communicate with you. Ask them to leave a review or tell a friend about your story.

Create experiences based around your stories that people can’t wait to share. Examples: backstory, surprise alternate endings, a chance to name a character, even maps of the fictional places you write about. The key here is that both you and your readers should have fun. Then ask them to invite their friends to the party.

What if the most effective thing you can do as an author is to step back from a lot of the marketing techniques and tricks, and instead focus on writing stories and getting them into the hands of your fans?

The Good, the Bad, and the Obvious

  • Your readers love you for a reason.
  • Your fans want to be entertained.
  • You’re in the entertainment industry. (If this comes as a surprise, embrace this truth right now.)
  • If your emails aren’t entertaining, then you are failing.
  • It is better not to send out any email than it is to send out one that isn’t wanted. Stop sending boring newsletters!

Need inspiration? Check out my 2-part series from last year on shareable newsletters!

How does this hit you? Have you seen some marketing techniques becoming more or less effective? Does this give you any ideas for how to find and interact with your true fans?

About Lisa

head shot of smiling Lisa Norman

Lisa Norman's passion has been writing since she could hold a pencil. While that is a cliché, she is unique in that her first novel was written on gum wrappers. As a young woman, she learned to program and discovered she has a talent for helping people and computers learn to work together and play nice. When she's not playing with her daughter, writing, or designing for the web, she can be found wandering the local beaches.

Lisa writes as Deleyna Marr and is the owner of Deleyna's Dynamic Designs, a web development company focused on helping writers, and Heart Ally Books, LLC, an indie publishing firm.

Interested in learning more from Lisa? Sign up for her newsletter or check out her classroom where she teaches social media, organization, technical skills, and marketing for authors!

Top image by Deleyna via Midjourney.

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Resources for Writing Great Emotional Conflict

by Jenny Hansen

The universe has been pushing me to think about emotions this month. First, it was the comments section of Sandy Vaile's post (One Amazing Perspective Shift to Make Scene Writing Easier). Then, I watched an ad with a marital counselor who claimed he could cure all marital conflicts by helping couples communicate using Hard or Soft emotions. I didn't believe him, but it sounded intriguing.

I'm a sucker for emotions. I love to read about them because they make me feel closer to the characters. And I love to write about them because I'm all about the emotional journey. I was a psychology major, then a teacher and coach, and now a writer. Emotions are a comfortable area for me.

But what about the people who haven't had to dig into the emotional minefield?

Maybe they don't know about hard and soft emotions, or even all the emotional states at their disposal for fiction. So, I searched out resources to get some lists and definitions for y'all. I'm not gonna lie -- I argued with several of those resources.

(I can't wait to see which ones YOU like down in the comments.)

How many emotions are there?

Most people would answer, "Thousands!" But according to scientists at Berkeley, there are twenty-seven categories of emotions, or emotional states. I've listed them below.

AdmirationEntrancement
AdorationExcitement
Aesthetic AppreciationFear
AmusementHorror
AngerInterest
AnxietyJoy
AweNostalgia
AwkwardnessRelief
BoredomRomance
CalmnessSadness
ConfusionSatisfaction
CravingSexual Desire
DisgustSurprise
Empathic Pain
I completely disagreed with the results of this study.

Maybe it's the romance writer inside me. But the first thing that came to my mind when I read that Berkeley article was, "What about LOVE?" What about pride, disappointment, hate, guilt, shame, triumph, sympathy, disappointment? (You know, all the stuff we writers really dig in and use for our characters' emotional wounds.)

Where's all that stuff?

Twenty-seven emotional states. Pfffffft! Then I found a list from Hoffman Group that was a bit more realistic to me. They listed 200+ feelings, which feels much more believable.

What are Hard and Soft Emotions?

As I mentioned above, hard vs. soft emotions was a new concept for me. This view presents some emotions as polarizing, and others as keys to building intimacy and bringing people together. The easiest way for me to conceptualize it was to think of hard emotions as a finger pointing outward, and soft emotions as a finger pointing inward.

Soft Emotions

Examples of soft emotions are vulnerability, sadness, fear, doubt, uncertainty, danger, and disappointment. These are more easily expressed as "I feel" statements, and they keep the focus on self (finger pointing inward).

When expressed, these emotions might:

  • Lead to reassurance or closeness
  • Generate empathy from the listening partner
  • Repair hurt feelings
  • Enhance the strength of the attachment between two people

Hard Emotions

Examples of hard emotions could include anger, hostility, power or the need for control, and resentment. These are the outward-pointing emotions. When people hear a sentence that starts with "I'm so angry," they most often hear "with you" tacked onto the end. Whether it's stated or not, they hear it.

When expressed, these emotions might:

  • Imply blame
  • Assert dominance
  • Escalate conflict

The character conflict possibilities here are endless.

This takes me back to the Dirty Fighting posts where we talked about how to use your characters' emotional baggage to have a down-and-dirty fight between two people on the page.

Hard and soft emotions are indeed a great tool for moving your story along through dialogue. At the end of the day, the marital guy was correct - knowledge of hard and soft emotions can absolutely change the trajectory of a relationship...as long as both people (or characters) know how to access those emotions and express them well.

Other Resources for Character Emotion

One of my go-to resources is OneStop for Writers, the brainchild of Angela Ackerman and Becca Puglisi. They are the authors of the nine-book Thesaurus series, which includes The Emotion Thesaurus. I love that all the thesaurus information is included with their OneStop subscription!

I also loved this emotion collection from TherapyIdeas. They included valuable resources like:

  • The purpose of the 19 most common emotions
  • A TED Talk on Handling Feelings and Emotions
  • Some fantastic books on Anger
  • A list of Polarities in Emotions (my fave for plotting)

Polarities in Emotion Examples

Excerpt: "Feelings travel together with their opposites. If you feel lopsided in an emotion and want more movement, ask yourself what is the other side, the polarity. The easiest duet to relate to is fear and excitement. Doing anything brand new always offers both emotions. You may have trained yourself to only pay attention to one side. It’s time to relearn that both are available."

A few other polarities: Anger/Hurt, Trust/Betrayal, Shame/Belonging

(Seriously, this article rocked. Here's the link again: therapyideas.net/emotions/)

Final Thoughts

Great stories have great characters. Readers relate to characters through emotions. A talented author hooks us into their character's emotional journey in a way that lets us empathize, learn, and see our own struggles through their character.

The better we are at putting believable emotions on the page, the more our readers will love our books. It's just that simple (and complex).

Do you have resources that you love for character emotions? Did any of the ones listed here resonate? Please share your favorites down in the comments!

About Jenny

By day, Jenny Hansen provides brand storytelling, LinkedIn coaching, and copywriting for accountants and financial services firms. By night she writes humor, memoir, women’s fiction, and short stories. After 20 years as a corporate trainer, she’s delighted to sit down while she works.

Find Jenny here at Writers In the Storm, or online on Facebook or Instagram.

All article photos from Depositphotos.

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Creating Wow Power in Your First Paragraph!

by Margie Lawson

You’ve probably rewritten your first sentence and first paragraph more times than any other lines in your WIP. And still, it’s possible they could carry more emotion. It’s possible they could carry more power.

Which is why you’re here!

I’ll share plenty of ideas in this blog, but no way one blog could cover everything about adding power to first paragraphs. Consider this a broad-brush approach with a brush that gets dipped in some incredibly cool colors.

If you’re familiar with anything I teach, you know I’m all about editing. Deep editing. Psychologically-based deep editing.

And you’d know I teach writers how to add emotion and power. Which are definitely needed in your opening paragraphs.

A potential reader, agent, or editor may only read a couple of paragraphs. If they love it, they’ll keep reading. If they’re not intrigued or hooked or wowed, they’ll click over to check out another book on Amazon or put your book back on a shelf.

How do you check to see if what you wrote is strong? Use my Deep Edit Analysis Checklist!

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • Hints about Your Story Promise—What your story is about. Including your story promise in your first paragraph or two can carry amazing emotional power. But if you have a beautifully written opening that doesn’t include your story promise, I may still love it. But you might want to try working it in and see if it brings power.
  • Power Words—Words and phrases that carry a psychological message.
  • Fresh Writing—Avoid overused phrases. Give readers phrases they haven’t read before.
  • Compelling Cadence—Read your work out loud. Check if sentences are cadence-driven.
  • Rhetorical Devices—List them. If you need more info about rhetorical devices, you may want to consider my lecture packet on Deep Editing, Rhetorical Devices, and More!
  • Humor Hits—If you want to be known for writing humor, check to see if you have humor on every page.
  • Clear Visuals—Share visuals and be sure the reader sees what you want them to see.
  • Taps Emotion in the Reader—When you feel emotion, you know.
  • Something Special—Anything else that adds emotion and power.

Use my Deep Edit Analysis Checklist. You’ll see what you’ve got on the page and what may be smart to add.

Now we’ll apply my checklist to some opening paragraphs.

I bolded power words and phrases.

The Patient, Steena Holmes, 4-Time Immersion Grad 

How do I admit this? Disclose that I’ve held this secret out of fear? I think about the words I need to say, unsure that I can voice them. Admit my shame, my failures, my… suspicions.

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • Hints about your Story Promise—Yes.
  • Power Words—Yes! Lots of them.
  • Fresh Writing—Yes
  • Compelling Cadence—Yes
  • Rhetorical Devices—Yes
    • Rhetorical Questions—Two
    • Anaphora—… my shame, my failures, my… suspicions.
  • Humor Hits—NA
  • Clear Visuals—NA
  • Taps Emotion in the Reader—Yes
  • Something Special—
    • The last sentence is a frag and it works well.
    • The whole paragraph is ominous.

For Roger, Laura Drake, 3-Time Immersion Grad

Today, death rides a bicycle. My bicycle.

Leading the Saturday morning peleton, I pump my way up the hill, standing on the pedals, breathing hard. My legs are still working, still strong.

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • Hints about your Story Promise—Yes.
  • Power Words—Yes.
  • Fresh Writing—Yes.
  • Compelling Cadence—Yes.
  • Rhetorical Devices—Yes.
    • Personification
  • Humor Hits—NA
  • Clear Visuals—Yes.
  • Taps Emotion in the Reader—Yes.
  • Something Special—Yes.
    • The first two sentences are fresh. Powerful. Captivating. Memorable.
    • Those first two sentences sell books.

The Last True Cowboy, Laura Drake, 3-Time Immersion Grad

Addiction sucks. I should know. Papaw has his White Lightning. Nana has her Bingo-jones. My addiction has sad green eyes and my name tattooed across his left peck.

But my wedding dress dreams always come in second to his rodeo. There’s even a term for it: Rodeo Widow. Except to earn that title, I’d have to be married.

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • Hints about your Story Promise—Yes.
  • Power Words—Yes.
  • Fresh Writing—Yes.
  • Compelling Cadence—Yes.
  • Rhetorical Devices—Yes.
    • Structural Parallelism—Papaw has his White Lightning. Nana has her Bingo-jones.
  • Humor Hits—Yes. Sarcastic humor.
  • Clear Visuals—NA
  • Taps Emotion in the Reader—Yes.
  • Something Special—Yes.
    • Laura Drake was strategic with style and structure. She added power by varying the length of sentences.
    • Laura’s voice shines through!
    • She used what I call a Switchback Line. There’s a surprise at the end of the last sentence.

A Hard Day for a Hangover, Darynda Jones, NYT Bestseller, 3-Time Immersion Grad

Normally, Sheriff Sunshine Vicram would’ve been alarmed at the sight of a knitting needle sticking out of a guy’s neck. At the very least, she would’ve been concerned for the horrified man’s well-being. Yet, there she stood. Unmoved. Unshaken. Unstirred. Much like the forgotten bottle of dirty martini mix in the back of her cabinet. At the tender age of early-thirty-something, Sun realized she had seen it all. The world held no more surprises. No more magic. It just was.

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • Hints about your Story Promise—Yes. She’s a sheriff who’s seen it all, nothing surprises her.
  • Power Words—Yes.
  • Fresh Writing—Yes—Unmoved. Unshaken. Unstirred.
  • Compelling Cadence—Yes.
  • Rhetorical Devices
    • Alliteration — Unmoved. Unshaken. Unstirred.
  • Humor Hits—Yes.
  • Clear Visuals—Yes.
  • Taps Emotion in Reader—Yes.
  • Something Special—Yes. 
    • Age Slip-in, always smart!
    • Stylistic Boost with alliterative standalones: Unmoved. Unshaken. Unstirred.

Evil’s Avenging Angel, Jenn Windrow, 7-Time Immersion Grad 

Vampires used to require the three Ps: planning, patience, and pointy weapons. But ever since Xavier, my dead-by-my-stake sire, tried to use an ancient vampire law to force me into unwanted wedded bliss, planning and impatience have been replaced with chaos and confusion. Like someone taped a “Kill Me” sign to my back and every supernatural creature wanted to take a whack at the Alexis-shaped piñata.

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • Hints about your Story Promise—Yes.
  • Power Words—Yes.
  • Fresh Writing—Yes.
  • Compelling Cadence—Yes.
  • Rhetorical Devices—Yes.
    • Alliteration—planning, patience, pointy weapons, chaos, confusion
  • Humor Hits—Yes.
  • Clear Visuals—NA
  • Taps Emotion in Readers—Yes.
  • Something Special—Yes.
    • Jenn Windrow’s voice shines through!

Denim, Diamonds, and Deep Six, Janet Leigh, 2-Time Immersion Grad

Being dead isn’t always easy, but it doesn’t give anyone the right to eat all the cheesy snacks. Not even my boyfriend, Caiyan McGregor, a sexy, rakish Scot, who’s presumed dead.

I’m Jennifer Cloud, a transporter for the World Travel Federation, WTF for short. I travel back in time to thwart bad guys from screwing up the past. OK, I don’t actually do the thwarting, but I bring them back to the present to serve time for their bad behavior.

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • A Hint about your Story Promise—Yes. So clear.
  • Power Words—Yes.
  • Fresh Writing— Yes.
  • Compelling Cadence—Yes.
  • Rhetorical Devices—No.
  • Humor Hits—Several!
  • Clear Visuals—NA
  • Taps Emotion in the Reader—Probably not. But it draws the reader in and makes them laugh!
  • Something Special—Yes.
    • Janet Leigh’s fun voice comes through every line.

The Gossip Truth, Sandy Rhodes, 4-Time Immersion Grad

I wanted to cry, not had-a-bad-day cry, but my-life-was-a-freaking-mess cry. I sat on the third-floor balcony of The Grand, a timeshare nestled in the Rocky Mountains that was far far away from my home in the oil fields of Texas. Away from my four adulting kids. Away from my night shift charge nurse position in the Neonatal Intensive Care Unit. Away from Luke, my husband of thirty-five years. I needed this writing retreat getaway I’d saved and planned for the last five years. But what I hadn’t planned on was my husband all but admitting last night that he was having an affair with his best friend’s wife.

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • Hints about your Story Promise—Yes.
  • Power Words—Yes.
  • Fresh Writing—Yes.
  • Compelling Cadence—Yes.
  • Rhetorical Devices—Yes.
    • Epistrophe—Triple Endings, in the first sentence.
    • Anaphora—Away from… Four times.
  • Humor Hits—NA
  • Clear Visuals—NA
  • Taps Emotion in the Reader—Yes.
  • Something Special— Yes.
    • Anaphora shares four hits of backstory. Brilliant writing.
    • Used fresh hyphenated-run-ons to give the reader a treat!
    • Gives readers an Emotional Boom!

My Soul to Keep, Kennedy Ryan, Immersion Grad  

Mama has been dying all day.

ALS is a stealthy thief. It stole Mama’s wide, crooked-tooth smile, and left her face a plane of twitches and jerks. That funny snap, snap she’d do with her fingers before she started making a fresh batch of biscuits? That saucy little pop and sway of her hips when she raced around the house on Sunday mornings, late for church? ALS snatched those long ago. Now Mama’s fingers lie limp at her sides on the bed sheets, the complete stillness startling and sad.

Deep Edit Analysis Checklist

  • Hints about your Story Promise—Yes.
  • Power Words—Yes.
  • Fresh Writing— Yes.
  • Compelling Cadence—Yes.
  • Rhetorical Devices—Yes.
    • Alliteration—batch, biscuits, lie limp, stillness, startling, sad
    • Onomatopoeia—snap, snap
  • Humor Hits—Yes.
  • Clear Visuals—Yes.
  • Taps Emotion in the Reader—Yes.
  • Something Special—Yes.
    • The whole paragraph is fresh and compelling and powerful.
    • Backstory slip-ins
    • So much love is implied.
    • Gives readers an Emotional Boom!

Wrapping Up

I’m wowed by those openings and proud of my Immersion class grads.

I hope you use my deep edit analysis checklist. Circle your power words. Look for rhetorical devices. Boost your cadence. Figure out ways to be strategic with style and structure.

You know you need to hook your reader in those first couple of paragraphs. Make sure they carry wow power!

Please chime in. Give me your best first paragraphs. I’d love to read them!
I’ll have a drawing Thursday night, and someone will win a FIVE PAGE DEEP EDIT from me!
You want to win that goodie, right? Just post a comment and you’re in the drawing!

Interested in learning lots more ways to add emotional power to your openings?

Want me to deep edit the opening of your book as well as several chapter openings?

I’m teaching an online course this month on openings: A Deep Editing Guide to Make Your Openings Pop! Check it out!

About Margie

Margie Lawson

Margie Lawson left a career in psychology to focus on another passion—helping writers make their writing bestseller strong. Using a psychologically based deep-editing approach, she teaches writers how to bring emotion to the page. Emotion equals power. Power grabs readers and holds onto them until the end. Hundreds of Margie grads have gone on to win awards, find agents, sign with publishers, and hit bestseller lists. 

A popular international presenter, Margie’s taught over 180 full day master classes in the U.S., Canada, Australia, New Zealand, and France. She’s also taught over 200

5-day intensive Immersion Master Classes across the U.S. and Canada, and in seven cities in Australia too. 

She founded Lawson Writer's Academy where you’ll find over 30 instructors teaching online courses through her website. And you’ll find lots of webinars on her website too. She developed 34 webinars that share her deep editing techniques and more! To sign up for Margie’s newsletter, visit www.margielawson.com.

Want to invite Margie to present for your writing group? She presents full day master classes and webinars too.

Margie's next: Get Happy Virtual Open House!
Tuesday, Feb. 20, 5:00—7:00 p.m. Mountain Time
Drop by the link on MargieLawson.com anytime in that 2-hour block.
We’ll be there chatting and laughing!

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