We were talking at crit group the other night. Our “throwdown” blogs have grown into more than we’d planned originally. In case you missed them, they were:
Originally, we thought to interject some humor, give some helpful links, and make everyone on either side of the issue feel like they weren’t alone. But we’ve gotten a lot more than that from it. I didn’t expect to, but I stepped out of my own viewpoint to see how the other half lives – and it’s not very often as an adult that you get to do that. It’s been fascinating to hear our reader’s views and we learned from you all.
So we decided to dig deep this time and explore the fear we writers deal with, on the road to publication. There are certainly enough fears to go around, but we thought they fell into two main categories; the fear of not succeeding, and the fear of success.
As usual, I fall on the rat’s tail of the bell curve into the first camp (gee, there seems to be a pattern emerging here, huh?) I can’t understand why you’d embark on a road that you were afraid of getting to the end of. But I’m sure when Fae takes the other side, I’ll understand better.
My fear is that I’ll die before I succeed.
If you follow our blog, you know that I’ve been at this writing gig a long time. Over 13 years. I’m a late-bloomer, and my family is not long lived, so this is not an idle fear. Around 40, I woke up to the reality that I had less time ahead of me than behind. It was time to stop whining and start testing my beliefs about what I could and couldn’t do, to see if they were valid.
The first I belief was, “I can’t ride a motorcycle.” My hubby knows me too well; he bought me a motorcycle. I wasn’t going to let that beautiful thing sit in the garage, taunting me by getting dusty. I was terrified. But I did it anyway, and I learned that you can survive in white-knuckled terror for six months. My theory was that I just had to keep at it and it would get better. And it did.
Well, hell, if I could do that . . .
My desire to write has been at the back of my mind since junior high. It turned out to be much tougher skill to learn than motorcycling. And through all 13 years, I’ve heard a clock, ticking off the seconds, the days, in my brain.
I wrote three novels and sent each of them to 125 agents (yes, I’m the original spammer,) before signing with an agent in July of this year. Yay, success! Well, kind of. I celebrated for a week, until I realized the clock hadn’t stopped. In fact the ticking was getting louder. After all, my goal wasn’t to get an agent; it was to hold a book in my hand with the name on the cover.
So here I sit, terrified that I’ll get hit by a bus before I get an offer. Or worse yet, that I get the opportunity grow old and then die before I have a book published. It sounds stupid to write this but I promised to dig deep, and that’s what keeps me up at night.
Not the bus part – if it’s my time, I’m happy to go. I just want to finish this one thing first!
Okay, I really would like to hear from you – what are you afraid of?
I’ll leave you with some inspiring links, to let you know you’re not alone. And don’t forget to check back on Wednesday, when Fae digs deep into the other side.
I picked up Harlan Coben’s CAUGHT with the express knowledge that I would find a high intensity/high emotion scene to showcase for another Dramatic Dissection.
Why did I think that? Because of his prologue. The beginning of this book is darn delicious. Most of his passages have more power than I’ve seen in entire manuscripts. Wonderful to use for learning purposes!
I used Robert Crais HOSTAGE for my last Dramatic Dissection and I instinctively knew Coben could deliver a scene just as good for this next one.
I found my scene. It has emotion and action and snippets of back story and great use of voice and wonderful pacing. I found a great scene that shows a man wanting something and a woman not giving it up. It’s interesting to see how he needles her, using different tactics the whole way through. Thank you Harlan Coben!
OH, but before we get to reading, in my last Dramatic Dissection I mentioned what the catalyst was in every scene. And here I will say it again.
Need.
There are three basic character needs. And one of them is usually coupled with another.
1. Need to break the hold of someone/something in order to move forward. 2. Need to stop someone/something in order to move forward. 3. Need to win someone/something in order to move forward.
In this scene: Wendy, a recently fired Tabloid TV show journalist that “caught” a supposed pedophile.
Grayson, the father of a boy that was victimized by this supposed pedophile.
These two are in Wendy’s kitchen after he paid her a surprise visit. The last time they saw each other was in court and Mr. Grayson was being a BIG jerk. They have never been alone in the same room before.
Now, let’s see how many needs are being pushed and pulled between these two characters.
Partial scene in CAUGHT, by Harlan Coben:
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Wendy sat at her kitchen table and waited. Grayson paced a few more moments, then suddenly pulled the kitchen chair right up to her, so that he was sitting less than a yard away.
“First,” he said, “I want to apologize again.”
“No need. I get how you feel.”
“Do you?”
She said nothing.
“My son’s name is E.J. Ed Junior, of course. He was a happy kid. Loved sports. His favorite was hockey. Me, I don’t know the first thing about the game. I was a basketball guy growing up. But my wife, Maggie, was born in Quebec. Her whole family plays. It’s in their blood. So I learned to love it too. For my boy. But now—Well, now E.J. has no interest in the sport. If I bring him near a hockey rink, he freaks out. He just wants to stay home.” He stopped, looked off.
Wendy said, “I’m sorry.”
Silence.
Wendy tried to shift gears. “What were you talking to Flair Hickory about?”
“His client hasn’t been seen in over two weeks,” he said.
“So?”
“So I was trying to find out where he might be. But Mr. Hickory wouldn’t tell me.”
“That surprise you?”
“Not really, no.”
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I’m going to pause here because I know you have a question for me.
What? You call this an action scene, Tiffany?
Yes I do. And please forgive the repetition if you got the chance to read my previous Dramatic Dissection, but it has to be said again:
Why do you say action is more than meets the fist? Because I am talking about ANY scene with movement: two characters or more, moving through a setting, showing relationship, and moving the reader through your story.
What is movement?
The cause-effect relationship between EVERYTHING in a scene. Line to line. This enables the reader to feel connected from the beginning to the end of your scene. Remember how it is in real life. The world moves between dialogue and action.
It can’t just be a fight to be a fight. Or a conversation between characters. It isn’t a series of blah blah blahs to get to the next bit of real information. Unmotivated, void of emotion. Where is the intrigue in that? Your readers will be bored.
Getting back to CAUGHT, as you are reading the next part of the scene, think about what is happening between the lines. Harlan does a great job of showing us a lot of white space. White space is very important to use in your novel, no matter what the genre.
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More silence.
“So what can I do for you, Mr. Grayson?”
Grayson started playing with his watch, a Timex with one of those Twist-O-Flex bands. Wendy’s father had one way back when. It always left a red mark when he took it off. Funny, all these years after his death, what you remembered.
“Your TV show,” Grayson said. “You spent a year hunting down pedophiles. Why?”
“Why what?”
“Why pedophiles?”
“What’s the difference?”
He tried to smile, but it didn’t quite hold. “Humor me,” he said.
“Good ratings, I guess.”
“Sure, I can see that. But there’s more, isn’t there?”
“Mr. Grayson--“
“Ed,” he said.
“Let’s stay with ‘Mr. Grayson.’ I would like you to get to the point.”
“I know what happened to your husband.”
Just like that. Wendy felt the slow burn, said nothing.
“She’s out, you know. Arina Nasbro.”
Hearing the name said out loud made her wince. “I know.”
“Think she’s all cured now?”
Wendy thought about the letters, about how they turned her stomach.
“She could be,” Grayson said. “I’ve known people who’ve kicked it at this stage. But that doesn’t really matter much to you, does it, Wendy?”
“This is none of your business.”
“That’s true. But Dan Mercer is. You have a son, don’t you?”
“Also none of your business.”
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We see a lot of movement here, yes? Can you see it? Now for a Naked Editor Dramatic Dissection.
From the very beginning of the scene he is trying to manipulate her. He needs something. He wouldn’t be sitting in a stranger’s kitchen otherwise.
Wendy sat at her kitchen table and waited. Grayson paced a few more moments, then suddenly pulled the kitchen chair right up to her, so that he was sitting less than a yard away.
Breaking her personal line, on her turf, in her kitchen.
“First,” he said, “I want to apologize again.”
A second apology. Usually second apologies are given when the first one doesn’t take, or when the person giving the apology is trying too hard.
“No need. I get how you feel.”
She is hoping he doesn’t push the apology further. Acknowledging his feelings, acknowledging that he is human.
“Do you?”
She said nothing.
Wendy accidentally tripped into her own false statement. And he sees an opening. Get ready for it; he’s going to play a BIG sympathy card here, trying to remind her that he is not the big jerk she saw in the courtroom, that he is a victim too.
“My son’s name is E.J. Ed Junior, of course. He was a happy kid. Loved sports. His favorite was hockey. Me, I don’t know the first thing about the game. I was a basketball guy growing up. But my wife, Maggie, was born in Quebec. Her whole family plays. It’s in their blood. So I learned to love it too. For my boy. But now—Well, now E.J. has no interest in the sport. If I bring him near a hockey rink, he freaks out. He just wants to stay home.” He stopped, looked off.
Is he really feeling something here? Hard to tell with the direction the scene takes next. He is forcing her to sympathize with him again. She complies, but not by much.
Wendy said, “I’m sorry.”
Silence.
Wendy tried to shift gears. “What were you talking to Flair Hickory about?”
Here, Coben tells us she is shifting gears. In case we missed it. Not my favorite tool to use. He is telling and showing in one line. I think it would have held more power if he stuck to showing with his great use of dialogue. Just my opinion, of course.
The fact that Grayson jumps right back at Wendy after she shifts gears makes me think that he might not be as genuine as his rant about his son would make him seem.
“His client hasn’t been seen in over two weeks,” he said.
“So?”
“So I was trying to find out where he might be. But Mr. Hickory wouldn’t tell me.”
“That surprise you?”
“Not really, no.”
More silence.
We don’t need to see them sitting in her kitchen to know that this is an awkward silence.
“So what can I do for you, Mr. Grayson?”
This is Wendy’s way of showing Mr. Grayson that she is on a short fuse with him. But she’s still willing to go on with the charade a little longer.
Grayson started playing with his watch, a Timex with one of those Twist-O-Flex bands.
He is trying to figure out a new approach.
Wendy’s father had one way back when. It always left a red mark when he took it off. Funny, all these years after his death, what you remembered.
Snippet of back story! And he is showing the reader that she has felt death before. She has felt that sadness.
“Your TV show,” Grayson said. “You spent a year hunting down pedophiles. Why?”
She's now abrasive and evades the question.
“Why what?”
Grayson is willing to put up with it and tosses his dice again.
“Why pedophiles?”
And again she shows her snarky side.
“What’s the difference?”
Harlan’s way of saying – Grayson is NOT smiling. This is not a game and he has an agenda.
He tried to smile, but it didn’t quite hold. “Humor me,” he said.
“Good ratings, I guess.”
“Sure, I can see that. But there’s more, isn’t there?”
She doesn’t want to play anymore.
“Mr. Grayson--“
He thinks this next move is going to bring them closer together. Sharing his first name.
“Ed,” he said.
Wendy counters with:
“Let’s stay with ‘Mr. Grayson.’ I would like you to get to the point.”
Grayson gives up on getting closer and shows her he knows how to use information as well as a body slam.
“I know what happened to your husband.”
Wendy isn’t talking back now. Considering she has had something to say after every line until now – this is big. And it is now totally obvious that this man has a serious agenda and he isn’t willing to play nice.
Just like that. Wendy felt the slow burn, said nothing.
“She’s out, you know. Arina Nasbro.”
Hearing the name said out loud made her wince. “I know.”
First time in the scene – Harlan shows us a physical reaction from Wendy.
“Think she’s all cured now?”
She is still churning. Not able to fight back. I’m picturing the referee in the ring raising his hand to start counting down a partial knock-out.
Wendy thought about the letters, about how they turned her stomach.
He doesn’t want her to check out and give up here. If he did, he would turn and leave her house. Leaving her helpless and weak was not his goal. He still needs her to participate in this game and so he needles just a little bit more.
And then to really wake her up, he uses her first name.
“She could be,” Grayson said. “I’ve known people who’ve kicked it at this stage. But that doesn’t really matter much to you, does it, Wendy?”
Wendy is still with us, and now in total defense mode.
“This is none of your business.”
He is reaching here, trying to compare situations with the supposed pedophile, but he still lands a personal attack when he mentions her son.
“That’s true. But Dan Mercer is. You have a son, don’t you?”
I see this next line and I think she is not wasting her energy swinging any punches of her own, but she is still holding her hands up to deflect any of his.
“Also none of your business.”
I’ll let you read the last part of the scene without any interruptions from me. I’m hoping you are starting to think like me by now, yes?
Watch how Harlan uses the dialogue to show their dance. Imagine this is a scene in a movie. Is there tension? Is it at the highest level now? Has their relationship changed from the beginning to the end of the scene? Look at the small amount of body language he uses here. Is it effective? Has Grayson made any headway, or did he ruin his chances of ever bringing her over into his way of thinking?
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“Guys like Dan—“ he went on. “One thing we know for certain: They don’t get cured.” He moved a little closer, tilted his head. “Isn’t that part of it, Wendy?”
“Part of what?”
“Why you liked going after pedophiles. Alcoholics—Well, they can quit. Pedophiles are simpler—there really is no chance for redemption and thus forgiveness.”
“Do me a favor, Mr. Grayson. Don’t psychoanalyze me. You don’t know a damn thing about me.”
He nodded. “Fair point.”
“So get to yours.”
“It’s pretty simple. If Dan Mercer isn’t stopped, he will hurt another child. That’s a fact. We both know it.”
“You should probably be telling this to the judge.”
“She can’t do me any good now.”
“And I can?”
“You’re a reporter. A good one.”
“A fired one.”
“More reason to do this.”
“Do what?
Ed Grayson leaned forward. “Help me find him, Wendy.”
“So you can kill him?”
“He won’t stop.”
“So you said.”
“But?”
“But I don’t want to be part of your plans for revenge.”
“You think that’s what it’s about?”
Wendy shrugged.
“It’ not a question of vengeance,” Grayson said, his voice low. “Just the opposite, in fact.”
“I’m not following.”
“This decision is calculated. It’s practical. It’s about taking no chances. I want to make sure that Dan Mercer never hurts anyone ever again.”
“By killing him?”
“Do you know another way? This isn’t about blood lust or violence either. We are all human beings, but if you do something like this—if your own genetics or pathetic life are so messed up that you need to harm a child—well the most humane thing you can do is put a man down.”
“Must be nice to be judge and jury.”
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Did you think for a second in the beginning of this scene that Grayson wanted her to help him kill someone? It goes pretty far for the first conversation these two have ever had one on one. AND you get to see what each of these characters morals are. Kudos to Mr. Coben!
Notice I didn’t pick the scene with all of the fists pumping and bullets flying and cars swerving off of the road. Sure, those scenes are exciting. But these are the action scenes that show us CHARACTER.
Are you going to use minimal body language, minimal internalizations, minimal physical action in every scene? Gosh I hope not. But as you see here – it is a tool you can use – and it allows for some serious dialogue runs. Dialogue runs that show Character and Stakes and Relationship.
Remember every line in your novel counts. Don’t waist precious white space telling the reader how your character is feeling after every line. That means your dialogue probably isn’t strong enough.
If that isn’t motivation for you to use dialogue as action in your scenes, I don’t know what is!
Remember your characters needs. And remember your needs as a writer. We need our readers to be instinctively turning pages. If you make an effort to connect your reader, moment to moment, they won’t be able to let go of your book until the last page.
What did you think of the scene above? Did you see where the tide turned in the scene? Is there anything you'd change to up the stakes? Do you have questions you like to ask?
Go forth, and write!
With love, NakedEditor
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As we discussed in the last post, for the writer who enjoys history, researching is often the best part of writing a historical novel. The other day, we discussed building the framework. Today we're going to "fill in the rest." Below are a few of my "Lists of 7."
Research Can Swallow Precious Writing Time. Don’t let it.
Here are some of the ways to save time when researching:
1. Start a 3-ring Help Note Book for each new Novel.
Title it with Novel’s title and then Help Note Book. The notebook serves as the author’s quick reference. It is the novel’s book of limitations, or the structure upon which it is built. Use dividers by topic. In the case of the above example, some topic headings might include character description, dialects, ranch glossary, Spanish terms, maps, terms of the law, town history, etc. Below, I discuss ways to save time on research. Specific items that need to be in the help notebook are noted with a star.
2. Don’t take a lot of hand-written or typed notes.
In the library, make use of a copy machine then highlight important facts on your copies. Remember copyright limits the number of pages you can copy, so copy just the facts you need. Be sure to write down the reference titles. Editors do sometimes question references.
In the same manner, information can be printed from the Internet. A word of caution here. Anybody can post almost anything on the Internet. Verify the information with at least two other sources.
If using your own book for a reference, use small post-a-notes like tabs on the pages, writing down one or two words to indicate what important information can be found there. This makes for a quick reference and if you don’t mind marking your books, use a highlighter too.
3. Use historical time lines. They keep you honest.
Historical timelines are often included in the back of history books. Sometimes you may want to combine timelines found in several references. If a time line isn’t available, note prime dates as you research and make your own.
4. Keep a list of terms and definitions that will be useful in your story.
Using the earlier example, if researching Spanish and American ranchers, list ranching terms from both cultures. List names of tools and what they were used for, slang, special clothing items etc.
5. Keep historical area maps handy, lists of important businesses and names of actual people who might have an influence in the novel.
Note: If using an imaginary town, it should resemble other towns of the time and place. It also helps to draw a blueprint of the imaginary town so that you don’t describe a business on A Street one time and then mention that same business on C Street later. The same applies to houses, barns, stores, etc.
6. Keep a list of indigenous plants and animals.
Take into consideration that animals and birds that are now extinct may have inhabited the area at the time of your story.
7. Although not a part of the actual research, put character outlines and descriptions in the Help Note Book.
Giving a character brown hair on one page and red on another is embarrassing.
Valuable Research Resources
Library
Public libraries are the logical place to start researching especially for general history. The Internet works too but often tiny details are deleted for space reasons. Sometimes it’s those minute details that a make huge and wonderful difference in the story. Check out children’s books. Their simplicity makes them great for “basic” facts without the superfluous information found in adult books.
Specialized, nit-picky information
Often, libraries do not carry the specialized information needed. Consequently, historical writers start their own resource libraries.
Museum bookstores are goldmines for specialized information.
Many of their books are authored by local historians and by people who run the museums. Often theses books are not available anywhere else. I have found that curators and museum bookstore owners are usually very willing to help writers.
Since I writestories set in America, most of my personal library pertains to American History.
The following 4 books are personal favorites with basic but important facts:
Domestic Technology, by Nell Duvall (A must have for knowledge pertaining to invention dates of certain foods and canned goods, utensils, furnaces, lighting, plumbing, etc.
Directory of Historical Organizations in the United States And Canada, by The American Association for State and Local History Nashville, Tennessee. (Very expensive but most libraries have them.)It lists most of the historical museums in the US and is extremely useful in finding specialized books dealing with towns, cities, and states. It even lists museums specializing in things like the logging industry, Indian heritage, railroads etc. The biggest plus, is the phone numbers. Most museums have gift shops/bookstores. You can call and tell them what you’re looking for. I’ve found most of these stores allow you to give them your credit card number and order the books over the phone. New additions of this book of historical organizations are published periodically.
The next time you receive a catalog of catalogs in the mail, that is a catalog listing specialty catalogs that can be ordered, glance through it very carefully. Many of the catalogs listed sell historic renovation items or facsimiles. The pictures in these catalogs are often dated, thus making a two or three dollar catalog a cheap and valuable resource.
One catalog I found in a catalog of catalogs was Lark In The Morning Musical Catalog It pictures historical instruments from all over the world, including medieval. In the back there is a listing by country. They now have a website: http://www.larkinam.net/
Another catalog I found is The Antique Hardware Store. It shows Victorian bathtubs, sinks, fixtures, hardware, lighting fixtures, weathervanes and more. Many catalogs have gone digital but sometimes you can still order catalogs from them for just a few dollars.
2. Antique and Collector’s Magazines
Subscribing to this type of magazine often supplies the writer with more information than they’d ever find in any one book.
One of my Favorites is Collector’s Eye. This color magazine always includes lots of history about the items being shown. It shows everything from teapots to toys. There are Internet sites called Collector's Eye but I did not find the magazine. I did find a similar magazine on line called Collector News.
Aother such magazine is Victoriana. It features articles about beautiful historic homes, Victorian holiday celebrations, how to serve a real Victorian tea, Old Victorian fashions for adults and children etc. Note-this magazine went out of business but it is now on the internet. Unfortunately, these types of periodicals often change names or stop publishing.
3. Antique shops
Antique shops often carry free newspaper-like newsletters with pictures and articles of extreme interest. Also, if you need to see first hand how something was constructed and how it worked, many antique shop owners are glad to demonstrate. Take a camera and notebook.
Antique shops are also great sources for antiquarian books at a reasonable price. (Antiquarian bookstores are usually cost prohibitive, but antique shops are not.) The firsthand knowledge in these books is priceless.
4. Living History Farms/Ranches, and Medieval Fairs, Civil War Reenactments
These places are great for viewing firsthand how things were done in the old days. They also have wonderful bookstores with specialty books that can’t be purchased anywhere else.
5. Rock shops
Find books on historical mining sites at rock shops. Sometimes they even have old maps available. Who knew?!
6. The Internet
There are lots of historical research sites. There are also some interesting list serves where a writer can post questions and receive answers. This is especially useful when time is an important factor. One such list that I’ve found extremely helpful is Carmel’s Research Group. Click the link and send an email for instruction in joining this list.
Another impressive yahoo group that deals with weapons and warfare, police tactics etc. is Weapons Info (you can look this up at http://groups.yahoo.com/).
A more recent discovery is a website called HighBeam Research. It’s a subscription service that offers archived periodical articles, newspapers, and more.
Caution:I said this before but it bears repeating. Anybody can post anything on the Internet. Always verify the information. If three sources say the same thing, it’s usually safe to use it.
7. Magazines
State magazines like Arizona Highways and Texas Highways give excellent descriptions of different parts of the state, flora and fauna, and often offer historical information too.
National Geographic Magazine offers descriptions of rain forests, mountains and peoples and places all around the world. It also describes national disasters, animals etc.
There are magazines about foreign countries available for subscription like British Heritage which can be found in large bookstores.
There are also specialty periodicals whose stories offer great historical plot ideas and historical facts. Many offer an interesting history book selection. Examples: Wild West, Old West, True West, American History Illustrated, and Historic Traveler. There are also magazines dedicated to the Civil War.
I hope this series assists you in starting your next research project. HAPPY RESEARCHING!
What sources do you tap when you're getting ready to dive into a book that requires a lot of research? Also, which comes first for you, the research or the story??
