July 5th, 2019

How to Write an Opening Scene that Hooks Readers

Janice Hardy

Readers may not judge a book by its cover, but they will judge it by its opening scene.

An opening scene has but one job—to establish the story and convince readers to read the next scene. That’s a lot to ask of a single scene, but it’s not as difficult as it sounds. Readers aren’t expecting the entire book in that opening, just enough to capture their attention and let them know the story is going to worth their time.

Here are three things you can do to ensure those readers stick around.

  1. Pose a Question Readers Want to See Answered

No matter what kind of book it is, there’s a story question that needs to be answered by the end. In a romance, it’s “How will these two people fall in love?”. In a mystery, it’s “Whodunnit?” Thrillers make you wonder “How will the heroes save the day?”

If a reader got as far as reading the opening scene, the general question of the genre or story type already intrigues them, so all you need to do is capitalize on that. Why should a reader want to see your couple fall in love? What makes this mystery a better read than someone else’s? What’s going to thrill in this thriller? Essentially, “Where is this story going?”

Many opening scenes that fail to grab readers don’t offer a question to suggest where the plot is going to go. They explain the situation, describe the characters, dump a lot of backstory, or show them existing in their world without anything really going on.

No questions. Nothing to wonder about. No sense of a plot or story unfolding.

A strong opening scene creates an interesting situation where something is left unanswered. It lets readers know the plot is moving forward and there’s something to pursue. They want to know what comes next, because you’ve clearly shown that there is indeed a “next,” and so far, it looks pretty cool.

A good example here is Jay Asher’s, 13 Reasons Why. A box of cassette tapes is delivered to Clay. On the first tape is Hannah, a girl at school (and Clay’s crush) who just killed herself. She says the reason why is on the tapes, and if you’re listening, you’re one of the reasons.

“Why did Hannah kill herself?” makes readers want to know, same as the boy who received the tapes. You know the story will answer that, and other questions as well.

Show readers the story is going somewhere, and that it’ll be worth their time to find out where.

2. Catch Readers Off Guard with Something Unexpected

I’ve bought books based on an unusual opening line or page alone, so don’t underestimate the power of the unexpected.

Defying expectations from the start lets readers know this won’t be the same old story they’ve read before (even if they love those stories). This one offers something new, a different view or angle, or even a fresh twist to a classic plot.

Things unexpected also suggests that the book will be full of surprises to keep readers guessing, and have a plot that isn’t predictable. They’ll pay more attention to what’s happening in every scene, because they’ll never know what twist or unusual detail might come next.

Even unexpected language or turns of phrase can catch a reader’s attention. Unusual pairings of words, an odd comment made at the right time, a wry way of viewing the world can all create a sense that this story isn’t relying on clichés or tropes, but offers a unique voice and perspective.

A fun example here is Susan Elizabeth Phillip’s Natural Born Charmer. It opens with a woman in a beaver costume on the side of the road, and the man who stops to see if she needs help. “You got a gun?” the woman asks. “Not with me.” “Then I got no use for you.”

It’s quirky, it’s unexpected, and it makes you want to know exactly how this situation came to be. But it also lets you know that this is a romance that won’t be boring.

Predictable is boring, so piquing curiosity right from the start promises readers this novel will surprise them.

3. Give Readers a Reason to Care

Not caring is a major reason for putting down a book, and it’s easy to lose readers in an opening scene. They haven’t read enough of the book yet to know why these characters are wonderful, or why this problem is fascinating, or how this puzzle is a brain bender.

All they know, is they read a bunch of “stuff” they didn’t give a hoot about.

Which is both harsh and hard, I know. This is the aspect most difficult for writers to pull off, because it’s ambiguous what “a reason to care” is. Every reader is different, and what appeals to one won’t to another.

In most cases, showing a character with likable or compelling traits makes them care. We like nice people, or people in situations we know are hard, or those in trouble we can relate to.

Maybe show the protagonist caring about or helping others, or have them display a likable trait, such as a clever wit or self-deprecating manner. Make readers laugh and you can hook them every time.

If the character isn’t likable (and not every protagonist is), show what makes them fascinating, or fearsome, or downright creepy. 

It doesn’t matter what readers care about, as long as something in the opening scene makes them decide this book is worth reading.

In Jennifer Crusie’s Anyone But You, the story opens with the recently divorced Nina at the pound looking for a puppy. What she finds, is Fred, an old, morose basset hound on his final day. He’s the last thing she needs, but she can’t leave him to die, so she adopts and brings him home.

Saving a depressed dog on his last day is enough to make anyone likable, but Nina’s wit and charm and her instant love for Fred make her a character to root for.

Once readers make an emotional investment in the story, they’ll stay to see how it turns out.

How you open that novel determines whether or not your reader keeps reading. Any one of these can hook a reader and pull them into the book, but if you can do all three, you’ll increase your odds of hitting opening scene jackpot.

What are some of your favorite openings? What about them grabbed you?

Janice Hardy is the award-winning author of the teen fantasy trilogy The Healing Wars, including The Shifter, Blue Fire, and Darkfall from Balzer+Bray/Harper Collins. She also writes the Grace Harper urban fantasy series for adults under the name, J.T. Hardy. When she's not writing fiction, she runs the popular writing site Fiction University, and has written multiple books on writing, including Understanding Show, Don't Tell (And Really Getting It), Plotting Your Novel: Ideas and Structure, and the Revising Your Novel: First Draft to Finished Draft series. Sign up for her newsletter and receive 25 Ways to Strengthen Your Writing Right Now free.

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26 responses to “How to Write an Opening Scene that Hooks Readers”

  1. Janice Hardy says:

    Thanks so much for having me!

  2. Terry Odell says:

    Sage advice (as always). Too many writers think "start with action" means a big confrontation scene, but without characters the readers cares about, it doesn't work. Or, they spend too much time on back story so readers will care about a character, but nothing is happening to hook the reader.

  3. LauraDrake says:

    You're so right, Janice. I always spend a ton of time on the beginning - the cover and blurb get it home, but the opening scene is what gets it read.

    One of the openings that stuck with me is Jo-Ann Mapson's Blue Rodeo. It opens with a three legged mutt, having his way with a poodle. The guy who owns the mutt watches the woman with the poodle, crying.

    How could you not want to know more about THAT?!

  4. Great tips (and reminders)!

  5. dholcomb1 says:

    Great insight--thank you!

    denise

  6. Dominique Blessing says:

    I used to be guilty of the backstory info dump, but now when I see it, it irks me. (Funny how that works.) I once started a book while waiting for an oil change, and picked it up maybe once or twice afterwards. It was backstory, info dump, plot, more backstory, info dump, plot... You get the idea. I didn't even make it to 50 pages before I deleted it from my library.

    • I think every writer is at some point, especially when we're starting out. Your experience is a great example of why it's so dangerous, and why so many advise "no backstory in the first fifty pages." (Though personally I think that's a little too rigid, but it's good to make sure any backstory is necessary in those first pages).

  7. Iola says:

    Great tips. I don't know how many novels I've given up on because I didn't know what the characters wanted, and didn't know why I should care.

  8. Kathleen says:

    Great post! Loved your examples. Thank you!

  9. Jeanne Kern says:

    I have to paraphrase, since I long ago forgot the actual wording, but I fell in love with a book by Dan Mannix that began something like "I became the carnival fire-eater the night Flamo the Magnificent blew himself up." Couldn't wait to read more. It's been 50-plus years, and I still remember being drawn into that story.

  10. Julie Glover says:

    What fantastic advice! (And a sharp reminder to me to scoot your novel up on my TBR list. It's on my tablet, so I have it at the ready!)

  11. Awesome advice! I will keep in mind as I write my short fiction. I'm sure it will help keep the readers attention with those as well. I liked the opening line of The Crow Road by Iain Banks - "It was the day my grandmother exploded." You MUST keep reading to find out what that is about!

  12. Ann G. says:

    One opening I remember is from A Tale of Two Cities by Charles Dickens. "It was the best of times, it was the worst of times..." It had me hooked immediately. The book did not disappoint. Another great opening line from a just-published narrative non-fiction by Valentina Gal, called, "Philipovna: Daughter of Sorrow:" "I stayed away from other children. I preferred my own games of picking flowers and long processions that ended with me and the rag doll Mama made sitting on my parents' grave and talking to them." Oooo, who wouldn't want to keep reading?

  13. Fae Rowen says:

    GOLD from Janice:" Once readers make an emotional investment in the story, they’ll stay to see how it turns out." I wish I could write that great first line, but I haven't yet. However, since my characters tend to be in crisis in the opening scene, I think I get the reader emotionally invested. Thank you, Janice. All three of your check points are on post its around my computer screen!

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