Writers in the Storm

A blog about writing

storm moving across a field
White Space in Writing

Ellen Buikema

Do you remember a time when you suffered from sensory overload?

This happened to me at a SIGGRAPH Conference in Detroit, Michigan, my first and last computer graphics conference. I remember sitting in a large room in front of an enormous screen with no idea of what to expect.

What followed was a blur of fast-paced images that left me breathless and in need to flee for visual quiet which I was unable to do. Trapped in a room full of people, I wondered how many others felt as I did. I needed the world to stop. Many, many people are feeling that way right now, as they hunker down in their homes.

White space helps keep sensory overload at bay. Being bombarded with too much sound can cause some to become irritated, so can too many visuals.

I think about my days as a Resource Specialist Program teacher and how upset my students with learning disabilities became when there were too many words or math problems on a page. Sometimes they felt so overwhelmed that they panicked and froze, unable to complete more than a small percentage of their work. Adding white space changed everything. It gave breathing space. Calm.

Like a pause in a song, white space can help create drama, emotion, a bit of quiet before a storm of words.

White space is the canvas where we paint our words.

Writers can affect readers with the use of white space in several ways.

1. White space draws the reader’s attention to the words on the page, makes the print easier to read, and improves comprehension.

2. Space on the page makes finding where the reader left off reading quick and easy.

3. Kerning, the space between letters, can change the look of the print and add meaning. Just as using all capitals can be interpreted as yelling, extra space between letters may emphasize speaking words slowly. “You need to  s  l  o  w  down.”

4. The use of white space at the beginning and ending of chapters gives the reader a visual break. Some writers and formatters choose to begin a new chapter halfway down the page. Others like to start all chapters on the right hand side of the book for physical copies. A new chapter beginning on the same page as the previous chapter looks like a formatting error.

5. Line spacing may be adjusted to fit next to or around a photo or illustration, or from left to right margin across the page. Avoiding a line with the final word of a sentence dangling all by its lonesome self on the following page is a good thing and can be done using line spacing as well as kerning.

6. Blank pages are helpful in the case of an anthology of short stories, particularly if the spacing and word count send the ending of one story onto the right-hand page. A blank side gives the reader emotional space to regroup for the next tale.

Ways to create white space:

1. The use of images surrounded by a margin of space: illustrations, icons, graphs, photos, all give the reader a brief rest and let the mind focus on something different.

2. Bullet points and numbered lists make reading quicker, scannable.

3. Variable sentence lengths make for more pleasurable reading. Too many long sentences in a row create blocky text. If you pause and go back to a big block of text, it is really difficult to find one’s place.

4. Use shorter paragraphs. Big chunks of information are frustratingly hard to read.

White space doesn’t have to be the color white.

Anything not drawing one’s attention on the print on a physical book, eBook, or webpage is considered white space. A patterned or colored background is also considered white space.

Book covers:

The first thing your potential reader sees while perusing what to read next is the book cover. Whether shopping in a bookstore or online, your future customers will make a visual first-pass. If the cover is appealing, then they’ll read the back cover information and read some reviews prior to purchase.

Much of the time, we don’t pay too much attention to white space. It should go unnoticed. However, when there is too much information in too little space, we clearly miss it as we stumble into cluttered chaos.

Busy covers do not work. When pouring over the many thumbnail images of book covers online, too much informative print will be difficult to read. If there is a plethora of elements on your book’s cover, there’s a good chance the reader will avoid your book.

White space on the book’s cover allows the creation of a focal point to make that cover pop!

How do you use elements of white space in your work?

About Ellen

Author, speaker, and former teacher, Ellen L. Buikema has written non-fiction for parents and a series of chapter books for children with stories encouraging the development of empathy—sprinkling humor wherever possible. Her Work In Progress, The Hobo Code, is YA historical fiction.

Find her at http://ellenbuikema.com or on Amazon.

Photo credits: ©Tirachard, ©Rosinka79

Read More
How to Write Compelling Emotional Triggers

Lisa Hall-Wilson

Writing emotional triggers, while optional, will take your writing to all-new levels of emotional connection for readers. This is a shortened sample lesson from my 5-week masterclass on writing in deep point of view.

In my book Method Acting For Writers, I talk about writing emotions in four layers: primary emotions (instinctive, knee-jerk, unthinking emotional responses), emotional triggers (optional), secondary emotions (thinking emotional responses to primary emotions), and behavior (what those emotions force the character to DO).

Don’t Google primary and secondary emotions—the clinical definitions are too nebulous to be a helpful template. In the context of fiction writing, whether an emotion is a primary or secondary emotion has more to do with what’s fueling the emotion.

Anger is almost always a secondary emotion—we’re angry because of/or in response to something.

But take attraction for instance; this can an instinctive response the character has no control over (a primary emotion), but it can also be a feeling that develops over time with familiarity (a secondary emotion). Thinking of emotions this way ensures the WHY is built-in for readers.

What Is An Emotional Trigger?

An emotional trigger, then, is a rehearsed or learned response to a known emotional scenario. Triggers skip the primary emotion phase and jump right to an over-the-top secondary emotion.

For example, your character spills mustard on their shirt. They may recall their dad berating them for having a stain on their shirt and shouting that they’re lazy. Instead of feeling frustrated or annoyed initially (which might be the case without an emotional trigger at play), they’re instantly over-the-top angry. The character’s response then may be to lash out at the hot-dog vendor, their secretary, or a passerby who startled them.

It isn’t that the primary emotions aren’t there; it’s that your character may not even be aware of WHY they’re reacting so strongly. The key to writing compelling emotional triggers is tiny bits of backstory dripped in. Over time, when a pattern is established in addition to the bits of backstory, the reader will be able to piece together what the trigger is. The reader will lean in, engage, participate in the story to figure out what’s going on with this character they care about.

Triggers Are Often Tied to Your Character’s Perceived Source of Identity

What does your character pride themselves on having, being, doing, possessing, needing, controlling, etc.? Do they rest their identity in any of these things? What does your character value most and fears having taken away?

Some common ones are: acceptance, respect, being liked, being needed, freedom, attention, being in control, autonomy, safety, etc.

How to Show and Not Tell an Emotional Trigger

Primary emotions are usually felt, and secondary emotions are usually seen. How does that work with emotional triggers when the character might not know what primary emotion is at play?

Eliza has shipped the kids off to Grandma’s for the night and gotten dressed up—as a surprise. But hubs is two hours later coming home than normal, without answering texts, emails, or phone calls to explain the delay.

By 7PM, Eliza has changed out of the sexy outfit she’d been wearing into a terry bathrobe. Without an emotional trigger, you might show primary emotions like frustration (feeling taken for granted), concern (did something happen at work), fear (was he in an accident), and/or jealousy (was there another woman). 

But if Eliza had an emotional trigger of say … feeling taken for granted, once he arrived home and admitted he’d forgotten to text her and then forgotten his phone at his desk—she wouldn’t be aware of any of those primary emotions and instead be instantly angry (feeling taken for granted acts as the primary emotion in this case, though she might not be aware of it).

The secondary emotion triggered will be very strong; these emotions can’t simply be shaken off or soothed. She might rail or shout at him that he doesn’t love her. No one loves her. She might think that her marriage is over. She might level irrational or left-field accusations at him—"You think I’m ugly. "

Ahhhh—do you see what I did there? Either she says these things or thinks these things, but do you see the hints there at what the primary emotions involved are, what the threatened identity or fears involved might be? This is how you make triggers work in deep POV.

What Do Other Characters Observe?

These night-and-day emotional hairpin turns are observable. They seem to come out of nowhere. One workaround, if the character wouldn’t organically THINK of what the trigger is, is to have another character point out the irrational behavior or inconsistent response.

The husband could put up his hands. “Hang on! What’s the big deal? I’m sorry I ruined your surprise, but it’s only seven o’clock. We can still have your romantic evening.”

Another character can observe that this behavior isn’t normal, it is over-the-top for that character, or their reaction isn’t fair or is irrational. The character themselves might be aware of those things, so you could use internal dialogue, even if they feel unable to stop or temper their emotional reaction.

Have you used emotional triggers in your fiction or has this post made you want to use them?

Make sure to visit Lisa’s free Facebook group Going Deeper Writing Emotions for tips, free content, and other goodies.

About Lisa

Lisa Hall-Wilson

Lisa Hall-Wilson is a national award-winning freelance journalist and author who loves mentoring writers. Fascinated by history, fantasy, romance, and faith, Lisa blends those passions into historical and historical-fantasy novels. Find Lisa’s blog, Beyond Basics for intermediate writers,  at www.lisahallwilson.com

Read More
Indie Publishing 101– Part III

Piper Bayard of Bayard & Holmes

In Indie Publishing 101 – Part I, we discussed the shifting paradigm of the publishing world, what it takes to be an independent publisher, and how we produce quality, publish-ready manuscripts. In Part II of the series, we looked at what is involved in the actual production of a quality indie book—layout, artwork, ISBNs, and copyright registration.

In both of those posts, we noted that the publishing world is shifting sands, as in a sandstorm. As if queued up to give us an example, the day after Indie Publishing 101 – Part II was published, the US Copyright Office sent me an email saying it is increasing its rates from $55 to $65 to register a manuscript.

Today, we review those final steps of independent publishing—actually publishing our books and sending them out into the world.

1. Publishing

We have our edited manuscript, our beautiful layout, our amazing cover, our required ISBNs, and our secured copyrights. Now, we’re ready to publish.

Holmes and I use both Amazon KDP and Draft2Digital for this. There are numerous other programs out there, and I encourage you to ask your author network about them. Entire books are written for that, but my purpose here today is to give you the lowdown on the things that are common to the platforms. I encourage all indie publishers to explore and do what works for them.

  • Descriptions, Categories, and Keywords

Descriptions: All publishers require a description of your book. That is what would be on that back cover of the book—the short teaser that makes people want more.

Categories: Categories are the sections of websites where people can locate your books.

For example, our categories at KDP for Spycraft: Essentials are “Nonfiction>Political Science>Intelligence & Espionage” and “Education & Reference>Reference>Writing Skills.” Someone going to any of those sections on a distribution website can find our book listed there. Some publishing venues allow only two categories, and others allow more.

Keywords: Keywords are words and phrases that people can type into the search bar of a website that pertain to your book.

For example, some keywords for Spycraft: Essentials are “CIA Books Nonfiction,” “Writing Craft Books,” and “Intelligence Agencies.” These are general words someone might use in a search bar to locate a book like ours.

Penny Sansevieri has some great articles here at Writers in the Storm on keywords:

Amazon Keywords: The Secret to Doubling Your Sales and Pulling in New Readers!

Update Your Keywords to Sell More Books Over the Holidays

  • Content

The publishing venue will ask you to upload your book content and book cover. The program should then give a chance to review these.

If you hire someone to do the layout, they will often be willing to upload these things for you.


ProTip: If you are publishing in print, order a print copy and look through every page. You will spot things that you will not see on your computer.


  • Print options

If publishing in print, you will be asked if you prefer cream or white colored paper and whether you want your cover to be matte or glossy. You will also be asked what size you prefer your finished copy to be.

  • Rights & Pricing

You will be asked to verify that you own the rights to the book, and what price you would like to charge for your book. The program will supply a calculation of royalties on each sale.

To set pricing, look at other books in your genre, as well as reports on what price points are successful. Keep in mind that if your book isn’t selling at a certain price, you can always change that price.


ProTip: Pictures make books expensive. The more pictures a book has in it, the more it is going to cost to produce. Even digital formats can have so many pictures that production costs are increased. Use internal pictures sparingly.


  • Publish your work

If you are satisfied with everything you have done, hit publish.

  • Edit your work

One of the beauties of independent publishing is that if you are like me, and you always see a mistake just after you hit send, you can go in and change and it at will. You can also update your cover or your content at any time.

2. Marketing

There are books out there written by far better marketers than myself. I would recommend some, but marketing is another sandstorm. What works now might not work in six months, and vice versa. What works for one genre might not work for another. It’s best to research how various ads and marketing strategies are working at the time you are ready to publish.

However, a few things are standard support for any approach to marketing books:

  • Reviews

Honest reviews sell good books. We need them. Lots of them. One way to get them is to send out advance review copies (“ARCs”) in advance of publication. However, ARCs have some inherent issues.

  • Not everyone who agrees to leave a review will do so. That means you are out whatever the cost it is to send them.
  • If algorithms detect too close of a link between the reviewer and the author, the site won’t publish the review. That leaves the author caught in the paradox of needing to know someone to send them a review copy and having the review disallowed because it’s by a person they know. Amazon is particularly bad about this. One way to work around the problem is to put the book on sale for $0.99 as soon as it is published and purchase gift copies for reviewers. State in the comment section for the gift that it is a review copy. Then the reviewer can download the book and review it as a verified purchase. Another Amazon obstacle to a review is that it requires people to spend $50 on Amazon within the previous year to leave a review.
  • Website

Authors, as well as everyone else who has a business, is expected these days to keep up a website. If you don’t have one, you can either hire someone to build a website for you, or, if you have any aptitude for it, you can take a few days to learn to build your own. Study bestselling author websites in your genre and think about colors and themes that reflect your own image as an author. Even if you hire someone, they will want to know what you have in mind.

The Bayard & Holmes website is a WordPress.org site, and we used the Divi builder from ElegantThemes to create the site. Beyond saying those programs have done well for us, I can only recommend researching articles and reviews and consulting the authors in your author network about their experiences.

  • Alumni and Organization Magazines

Most colleges, universities, and social organizations have publications with sections reporting activities and accomplishments of their alums or members. Notifying them of book releases is a free and easy way to get publicity.

  • Local Newspapers, Magazines, and TV Channels

Most local newspapers and magazines and some TV news channels love to support local authors. Again, it’s free publicity that often takes no more than an email to an editor.

  • Social Media

A social media platform is a great way to communicate with fans, cultivate superfans, and connect with other authors to support our marketing. If we have been good friends and network supporters, many among our social media contacts will support our marketing efforts with blog posts, retweets, Facebook mentions, and other promotional efforts.

However, social media has its pitfalls. To begin with, it can be a dangerous place to hang out—sort of like the cyberverse equivalent of the Tenderloin District of San Francisco after dark. With swarms of trolls preying on every post or tweet, one misstep, and a career is over. To quote Kristen Lamb, “It takes years to build a social media platform. It takes seconds to destroy one.”

Another difficulty of the social media platform is the bubble effect. Algorithms at the major sites such as Facebook are calculated to push us into tiny social bubbles and force us to pay cash to reach even our own friends and followers.

That being said, social media is still a useful tool for cultivating support for our marketing efforts as long as we all remember two cardinal rules:

  • Don’t run down rabbit holes, or we will never have time to write our books.
  • Never forget why we are there. As in, if we are not political writers, we are not there to expound on politics! That’s the fastest way to lose readers, destroy a brand, and attract trolls.

I recommend developing an author brand and choosing no more than three platforms to maintain. Devote a few minutes of effort to building them every day. I also recommend Kristen Lamb’s book, Rise of the Machines: Human Authors in a Digital World, for learning to brand and build an author platform on social media platform.

Finally, social media is a great way to meet and befriend authors we might otherwise never get to meet. For elaboration on this, see Making Friends and Allies on Twitter—The Lone Wolf Watering Hole.

  • Author Network

Throughout this series, I have referred to the “author network.” Although writers are largely introverts, none of us can succeed in a vacuum. That’s where our author network comes in. Our network helps us find the tools and education we need for our craft, and it supports us in getting out the word about our books. We can build that network in several ways:

  • Conferences

Virtual reality may be cool and convenient, especially now, but nothing replaces face time. One of the best ways to meet other authors and develop an author network is to attend writers conferences. If you find that prospect daunting, see Socializing at Conferences—How to Come Out of the Box.

Actual Photo of Author
Hiding at a Writers Conference
  • Writers Organizations

Another great way to build an author network is to join an active writers organization. I recommend finding one local to you or one specific to your genre.

  • Write Good Books

Ultimately, the best sales tool for our books is another one of our books. In other words, the more good books we publish, the more books we will sell.


This three-part series is by no means comprehensive. My purpose has been to inform about the basics of indie publishing and to get people thinking and sharing ideas so that each author can find what is right for them. We are all constantly learning in this sandstorm world of publishing, and with the exchange of experience and ideas, we can find our path.

I wish you all the best for successful publishing ventures. May your muse be generous.

What publishing platforms do you use? How do you find your keywords? What are your most successful marketing methods?


Bayard & Holmes Toilet Paper
Giveaway and Social Distance Sale!

To help people endure the hoarding phenomenon and the boredom of social distancing, we are giving away a roll of toilet paper and the Bayard & Holmes book of choice to one of our Covert Briefing Newsletter subscribers. Click Here to subscribe and enter.

We also have the digital versions of our writing craft reference book for thrillers, Spycraft: Essentials, as well as two of our fiction books, The Spy Bride and Firelands, on sale for only $0.99. Paperbacks are also on deep discount. Let's pull together and get through this!

Piper Bayard and Jay Holmes of Bayard & Holmes are the authors of espionage tomes and international spy thrillers. SPYCRAFT: Essentials, is designed for writers. It addresses the functions and jurisdictions of the main US intelligence organizations, the spook personality and character, tradecraft techniques, surveillance, the most common foibles of spy fiction, and much more. It is available in digital format and print. See Bayard & Holmes Nonfiction.

Please visit Piper and Jay at their site, BayardandHolmes.com. For notices of their upcoming releases, subscribe to the Bayard & Holmes Covert Briefing. You can also contact Bayard & Holmes at their Contact page, on Twitter at @piperbayard, on Facebook at Piper Bayard or Bayard & Holmes, or at their email, BH@BayardandHolmes.com.

Read More

Subscribe to WITS

Recent Posts

Search

WITS Team

Categories

Archives

Copyright © 2026 Writers In The Storm - All Rights Reserved