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5 Conflict-making Choices Characters Can Make (Part Three)

The final post in this series will explore the ways your characters can be derailed by consumption and comfort. If you missed Part 1, which explored the need for control,  you can read it here. If you missed Part 2, about conceit and coveting, you can find it here. As a reminder, while reading The Five Thieves of Happiness by John Izzo, I wanted to share how his ideas could be applied to my characters to create more conflict in my WIP, hence this series. 

Consumption is about acquiring material things. Consumption powers our economy, makes us want to buy in order to be happy. Consumption puts a price on happiness, setting up an elusive out there. Consumption is at odds with contentment, which is a decision to be at peace, according to Izzo.

How can this affect your characters? 

We throw all kinds of obstacles and twists between the first page and the last. If my main character all of a sudden realized that happiness is a choice, my story would be over. However, the journey to that satisfying point of self-discovery is why readers read our books. If we let them feel our character's pain, angst, and indecision along the way, they can glimpse how those ideas may work in their own lives. For someone who is not plagued by consumption, they can still enjoy seeing a character work through solving the problems created by believing happiness is just around the next acquisition, whether it is a new car, a new estate, or a new love.

But possessions require a trade—of money, time, relationships, routine. How your characters handle these transactions can bring conflict—or contentment—into their lives. 

In my first book, my male lead character wanted nothing more than to acquire a shipping contract for Earth's best energy source. He left Earth to travel three months to pitch his proposal. He won the proposal, but then wondered why he wasn't happy.

In my WIP, he's back on the planet. His entire life has changed because of his initial desire for that contract. Now he's going to have to fight for his life, literally, after giving up every credit he's earned. He's going to be broke. Flat broke, after living a life of privilege and luxury. And guess what? He's happy. Because he's doing what he wants to do. He's made the choice to pursue his own life.

How did he get there? Over and over, in small ways at first, he chose contentment over consumption. He stopped thinking I will be happy if I get whatever he wanted at the time. He realized that enslavement to things wasn't making him happy, and that it wasn't the things that were the problem, it was his relationship to those material things. 

Comfort keeps us stuck in the same routine. It's like watching TV but not changing the channel to another program because we'd have to get up to retrieve the remote. It's like we're on autopilot. That doesn't move us ahead in life. It doesn't help us make order of our world. And, as humans, we need to make order from chaos. This snippet from Izzo says it all: Our minds are hardwired for routine but excited by change. 

What a great quote to remember to create conflict for our characters. No wonder females are attracted to the "bad boy." No wonder we want to leave what happens on vacation, well, there. We crave our daily habits, but we love to shake things up every once in a while. New situations excite us. Historically, new information was important for our survival. "Don't go into that cave. A bear lives there," could save our life.

When we're excited by change, our happiness revolves around those new experiences, resolving new challenges, learning new skills. And that's exciting. Stories from veterans returning from war support the research that shows many relationships forged in danger deepen faster, are stronger, and last longer than others. 

No wonder bonds are formed quickly in suspense thrillers. We recognize real life and believe people connect more quickly. In romance, real and fiction, extended routine and comfort can damage or kill that romantic spark. But something new, a surprise, an unexpected gift, or a special message breaks the routine and strengthens the romance. 

(An aside from this brain research geek: The more you move out of your routine, say drive your car a different way home from work, the more we engage our brains, we stimulate brain cell growth and activity. Your brain actually grows from new experiences.) 

Can you see the potential for this in a novel? If you want to, spend a few minutes and see how breaking out of your comfort zone has spurred you on to new adventures. Maybe at the time they didn't seem so exciting or successful. Use your own experience to inform your writing. Infuse your characters with your hard-earned wisdom.

A character's tendency to keep everything the same, to remain on cruise control, can force her to hang on to old patterns. Patterns that may be unhelpful for her current situation. At this time your character wants to protect her routine, whatever the cost. It's hard, and scary, to take back the wheel and drive on her own. But that, too, can make for a compelling story.

Show your character struggling with the effort of changing his life, waffling back and forth between the familiar routine and reaching out for the change that will stimulate growth and the happiness to follow.

We all go through periods of comfort and routine, when we consolidate what we've learned from new experience and challenges. That's normal. But at some point, we, like our characters, must break through that comfort and routine for new experiences and new challenges. 

Not all routines are helpful. If your character is mired in a pattern based from childhood neglect or abuse, or a recent relationship issue, those patterns must be broken to establish healthy relationships. Fear of a new way of thinking is normal. There is much possibility for showing emotion and taking your reader on the ride in this scenario.

Comfort can make us feel safe, but surprise brings excitement to our lives. Changing old habits offers the opportunity to to find a way of life that works for us. The same is true for our characters. This is the basis of a character arc.

Your character might decide to try one new thing a week. (Lots of comedy possible in this!) Your character could resist all change that would pull her out of her comfort zone. Your characters can challenge every pattern that no longer works in their current situation. Lots of drama and conflict possibilities with that. 

Between all five thieves of your characters' happiness, you should be able to inject enough real conflict into your stories to provide your readers with a thrilling experience, no matter your genre.

What thief have you used successfully in your writing?

Which one would you like to add to your WIP or build a new story around?

ABOUT FAE

Fae Rowen discovered the romance genre after years as a science fiction freak. Writing futuristics and medieval paranormals, she jokes  that she can live anywhere but the present. As a mathematician, she knows life’s a lot more fun when you get to define your world and its rules.

Punished, oh-no, that’s published as a co-author of a math textbook, she yearns to hear personal stories about finding love from those who read her books, rather than the horrors of calculus lessons gone wrong.  She is grateful for good friends who remind her to do the practical things in life like grocery shop, show up at the airport for a flight and pay bills.

A “hard” scientist who avoided writing classes like the plague, she now shares her brain with characters who demand that their stories be told.  Amazing, gifted critique partners keep her on the straight and narrow. Feedback from readers keeps her fingers on the keyboard, putting the finishing touches on P.R.I.S.M. Book Two.

P.R.I.S.M., a young adult science fiction romance story of survival, betrayal, resolve, deceit, lies, and love.

When she’s not hanging out at Writers in the Storm, you can visit Fae at http://faerowen.com  or www.facebook.com/fae.rowen

 

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Building Suspense: Meet Your Readers in the Middle and They Will Come

Donna Galanti

I’ve learned so much about suspense since writing my first book. One thing I’ve learned in fiction, and movies, is that surprise can be overrated.

Surprise is two seconds of “Boo!” Suspense is ten minutes of “Oh, No! Will she die or not?” We’ve all heard go for suspense when you can--and for a reason. It keeps the reader turning pages. This means the reader needs to know a few things (without giving it all away) so they can predict what will come--and feel smart about it. Readers love feeling smart. Don’t we all? ?

I’ve discovered that if we meet the reader in the middle and let them feel smart, they will stick with us.

 

But how can we, as writers, meet the reader in the middle to create suspense? Here are 7 ways:

  1. Tease them with only a few descriptive details.

In J.K. Rowling’s Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone, we all know what Hogwarts Castle looks like, don’t we? But if you go through the book, there are very few descriptions about it. It’s introduced only as a vast castle with lots of turrets and towers. When Harry enters it, we’re teased with brief images of flaming torches and a magnificent staircase. That’s it. The reader must fill in the rest with imagination.

By giving the reader flashes of the setting here and there, we involve the reader, take them along for the ride, and … build suspense.

  1. Introduce questions early on.

Not just one, but many. Drop them here and there. Don’t make it tidy. Make it mayhem with meaning. But make sure those drops do have meaning.

If a knife appears hanging on the wall in the beginning, the reader will question why it’s there and believe that the knife has importance down the road. (So, make sure you show its reason later.)

Make the reader ask: What happens next? In Watchers by Dean Koontz, we witness a depressed man who goes off to commit suicide at a canyon. Will he or won’t he go through with it? Then he meets a highly intelligent dog and fears for his life from an unknown stalker. Through the dog he meets a timid woman who intrigues him.

Now we have more questions. Who is this dog? Who is this stalker? How are they connected? Who is this woman? Why is she so shy?

  1. Provide readers with knowledge.

New novelists can often be afraid of revealing their best stuff early on. Fear can make a writer hoard their best stuff for a surprise later. But the reader can get bored with waiting, and surprises are overestimated.

Hitchcock, the Master of Film Suspense, used this to build his tension in his movies. He gave the audience information the characters knew and also didn’t know, such as the bomb located under their desk.

Tick tock. Tick tock.

Yikes! We’re given all the information we need to suspect death is looming. Now we wonder, will the character die? So, what makes this suspenseful? Because we spend ten minutes hoping beyond hope the character we love doesn’t die! In the movies or on the page.

  1. Look at the big picture.

Movies can provide great visuals for how writers can create suspense. Multiple setups can lead to one big suspense payoff. It’s the knowing what’s about to happen, and then it happens.

In The Godfather, Michael Corleone plans to kill two mob leaders he meets for dinner. We see the murder planning. The discussion of where to meet. The finding of the gun in the bathroom as a weapon. The wondering of whether Michael will or won’t do it. The knowing that his life will be forever changed if he does.

Creating suspense with a big picture buildup can also create surprise. Here is where surprise can work if everything that led up to the surprise is exposed in a new way.

The big moment at the end in The Sixth Sense isn’t just a surprise--it rearranges everything we know about the events we’ve seen beforehand in a new way. Did you guess it coming or were you totally surprised?

  1. Set the mood.

Provide a suspense setting that creates feelings of heightened anxiety. Give the reader the portent of doom. The setting of a scene can have a significant impact on its mood. Use sensory details to build on those feelings–a sudden wind, a stormy sky, a rising stench, a jarring noise. Use world building to create suspense.

Here’s a scene example of how I aimed for this in my suspense novel, A Human Element:

The sky darkened suddenly. She looked up. Black clouds, thick and angry rolled overhead. Her heart raced faster. The bad feeling screamed again inside her.

“Let’s go inside for now.” Laura tugged on her mother’s sleeve. They would be safer in the house. She just knew it.

“But we can’t let our chores go.” Fanny’s fingers flew across the peas.

Slit. Pop. Slit. Pop.

Wind whipped around the corner of the house. It knocked over Laura’s basket.

So … do you think something bad is coming?

  1. Go slow.

I know, you’re saying whaaat? But, yes. Slow down real time to show the full 360 degrees of the scene. In real life action happens fast. But it’s our job as writers to not show real life. That would be boring and over with in a flash. Show all the angles of the scene to build suspense. Use all the senses. Add complications.

In Robert Goolrick’s, A Reliable Wife, he moves achingly slow to build suspense. In the beginning scene, a man waits at a train station. Nothing is happening. But so much is happening. And so much is to come.

His first paragraph tells us:

It was bitter cold, the air electric with all that had not happened yet. The world stood stock still, four o’clock dead on. Nothing moved anywhere, not a body, not a bird; for a split second there was only silence, there was only stillness. Figures stood frozen in the frozen land, men, women, and children.

Oooh, right? Look at his words. Bitter. Electric. Dead. Still. Frozen. Besides going slow he’s also setting the mood with his word choices. These are not soft words. We have a sense of doom. For eleven pages at the train station, Goolrick goes slow to build suspense and tension all by focusing on one man’s thoughts and the people who flow around him.

Think that’s going slow? The master of suspense, Dean Koontz, builds suspense over seventeen pages in Whispers with an attempted rape scene.

  1. And don’t forget to create characters to care about.

This doesn’t mean they shouldn’t be flawless. Giving them flaws makes them more appealingly human, but you won’t create suspense if nobody gives a hoot about your characters.

Suspense is emotional. It’s about revealing some, but not all.

And if the reader cares they’ll go out on that limb and meet you in the middle. Build it halfway to create suspense, and they will come.

What techniques have you used to build suspense in your writing? What memorable examples have you read in a book or seen in a movie that represented great suspense building to you?

About Donna

Donna Galanti is the author of the bestselling paranormal suspense Element Trilogy and the children’s fantasy adventure, Joshua and The Lightning Road series. She is represented by Bill Contardi of Brandt & Hochman Literary Agents, Inc. Donna is a contributing editor for International Thriller Writers The Big Thrill magazine and regularly presents as a guest author at schools. She’s lived from England as a child, to Hawaii as a U.S. Navy photographer.

Donna has long been a leader in the Mid-Atlantic writing scene as a workshop presenter and is a writing contest judge at nycmidnight.com. Donna also loves teaching writers about building author brand and platform through her free training series at yourawesomeauthorlife.com. Visit her author website at donnagalanti.com.

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Plot, Character and…WHAT?

Laurie Schnebly Campbell

A quick note from your WITS blog mistress: I'm sorry for so many comments not getting posted as soon as we'd like. All four of us were out of town, and no one had internet access. (Two of us thought we would be able to approve comments, but we were wrong.) Everything is caught up now, though, and if you were waiting for your comment to appear, it's in the comment section below. We'll post the winner of Laurie's giveaway this evening--at the end of the comments section. Thanks for your patience!

We all know a great book needs a great plot and great characters, but those aren’t always enough.

What about the setting?

What about the theme?

What about the voice?

What about the emotion?

What about the action?

What about the dialogue?

 

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Those elements might very well be built into your characters and/or plot, but they can go well beyond that. In fact, when any of those elements is absolutely stellar it can make the difference between simply a “good book” and a keeper that’ll be:

       * Read again and again

       * Loved just as much every time

       * Recommended enthusiastically to fellow readers

       * An inspiration for the reader to seek out other books by this same author

So while plot and character are essential factors in building a book that’ll be considered at least a reasonably good read, it takes more than those two factors for a book to be remembered and treasured. It takes three powerful strands, braided together.

What’s the third strand? Genre.

Some readers might protest, “I never read genre fiction; it’s mindless.” Or “it’s trashy.” Or “it’s formulaic.” Or “it’s a waste of time.”

 

 

 

 

 

 

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For people who’d rather die than read a novel which didn’t make The New York Times Book Review, it usually comes as a surprise that genre fiction ISN’T mindless, formulaic trash.

Instead, it’s a guarantee of avid readership.

Whether the genre is mystery, romance, fantasy, or even literary fiction, the readers who love it are likely to always:

       * Have another book waiting on their bedside table

       * Pre-order every series title by their favorite author

       * Keep buying book after book after book because this particular kind of reading satisfies a deep need within them

What IS it those readers need?

Well, of course, that depends on the genre. In the classics like mystery, romance, fantasy and mainstream / literary, it’s pretty easy to define what readers expect when they plunk down their money for a new title.

 

 

 

 

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Mystery readers, for instance, want to see the puzzle solved and justice done (unless the bad guy gets away with murder and will need to be thwarted by the good guy in some future book).

Romance readers want to see a couple falling in love and embarking on a happily-ever after (or at least a life which shows these two people were meant for one another).

Fantasy readers want to explore a new but highly plausible realm (in which, win or lose) the challenges are far more enthralling than those of the everyday world.

Literary fiction readers want to feel like they’ve been encouraged to think deep thoughts about the meaning of life (whether or not the characters triumph at the end).

Sure, there are variations according to which TYPE of fantasy orromance or mystery or literary fiction they're reading, but you know that as long as you deliver the fundamentals of what people want from such a story, you're gonna leave ‘em happy and waiting for your next book.

 

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What do YOUR readers want?

You might know that already.

Or you might have never thought about it in those terms.

But the answers matter, because they affect how you handle a multitude of things within your book. The setting (time & place, yes, but also how you describe the society and the everyday details). The relationship/s (if there are any). The moments of nail-biting tension or emotional drama or staggering horror or uplifting inspiration or good vs evil or intriguing discovery or comic relief...to name just a few.

By way of illustration, what do readers love most about a cozy mystery?

* The multiple clues.

* The decision of whether or when to involve the local police.

* The descriptions of the people who might be suspects.

* The red herrings along the way.

* The protagonist's interesting hobby. 

 

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 prevailed.

Continuing the illustration, what do readers love most about a romance?

* The excitement of a growing relationship.

* The first meeting of these two people we know will fall in love.

* The moment when one of 'em recognizes the other person is someone special.

* The first touch and/or kiss and/or love scene. (Or the fourteenth.)

* The realization that "here's the one I love.”

* The resolution proving that once again, love has led to a happy ending.

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                                                      * The resolution proving that once again, truth and justice prevailed.

Different romance authors and cozy-mystery authors will place more emphasis on various aspects within their story, but all of 'em are there to keep the readers engaged.

Readers will certainly enjoy seeing surprises as they journey through the book. Yet at the same time they appreciate knowing that once they’ve reached The End, they will have gotten the kind of experience they wanted from this particular title.

Which leads to the trickiest question of writing a such a title:

How do you blend your plot, character and genre?

That’s not always as easy as it might sound. All three elements are crucial to a well-balanced story, but not every book gives equal weight to each strand of the braid.

The braid is where your artistry comes in.

Think about a literal braid. If you picture a fat strand and two skinny ones, it won’t look so good. Same if there’s two fat strands and a skinny one. Balance is crucial.

That’s what we’ll cover in next month’s class on Your Plot-Character-Story Braid at WriterUniv.com, and someone who posts about their favorite strand will win free registration. (Or a refund PLUS the class if you’ve already registered.)

I’d love to hear from you!

Which do you find easiest or most enjoyable: creating characters, devising a plot, or knowing the expectations for your genre?

One lucky commenter will win Laurie's Braiding Your Book class at WriterUniv.com. Read the comments for the announcement of the winner on September 1st.

Laurie, who’ll notifyLaurieSchneblythe winner privately tonight (if your post offers any clue on how to reach you) so nobody will have to stay in suspense through Labor Day weekend :)

 Bio: Laurie Schnebly Campbell always loves analyzing what makes a book work, so she's looking forward to starting a four-week class on Braiding Your Book at WriterUniv.com's http://bit.ly/BraidClass on September 3. Although she enjoyed braiding her own romances, including one that beat out Nora Roberts for "Best Special Edition of the Year," she enjoys teaching even more. That's why she now has more than 40 novels on her bookshelf from authors inspired by her classes.

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