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The Developmental Edit: Are you (emotionally) ready?

Kathryn Craft

 

A developmental edit can feel a lot like sending your child to school for the first time. You’ve had several years to exert your influence on his upbringing and must now allow others into his journey. You may be ready to push the little bugger through the school door! Or you may be standing outside, your arms wrapped tightly around this child of your heart, wanting to run home for a few more years of one-on-one.

You may worry: What if my child performs poorly? What if my parenting inadequacies are discovered—or worse, what if the teacher doesn’t think I’m any good at parenting?

These relatable concerns can be countered with more exciting questions: What if he matures while we’re parted? What if his performance issues result in new parenting tools? What if new aspects of his personality are stimulated? What if it really does take a village to raise a child?

A story you submit for publication will be seen, much like the child going to school, as a freestanding work—and as such may be lauded, bullied, quoted, misinterpreted, picked apart, and psychoanalyzed by a public who will bring to it their own sensibilities, prejudices, insights, ideas, and experiences. You will no longer be able to come to your story’s defense. Whether or not you can handle that will be foreshadowed by how you handle a developmental edit.

Are you ready?

Signs of readiness for a developmental edit

  1. You are asking the right question.

You don’t send your child to school expecting a grade on your parenting, do you? No—you want the teacher to appreciate your child for his special qualities and help him acquire the skills necessary to maximize his potential in the world. Instead of, Am I any good? ask, How can I maximize my story’s potential?

  1. You are ready to let the manuscript speak for itself.

Your story will be entering a conversation, and it has one chance to speak: through the words you’ve put on the page. Rest assured that you have submitted your best possible work and sit quietly while the editor reflects upon what she heard. If it seems she didn’t “get it,” use her guidance to identify the disconnect between what you intended and what she heard.

  1. You are willing to allow—and then dismiss—your emotional reaction.

If hiring an editor, you must have thought your manuscript could be improved, or at the very least, you realized you were no longer the best judge of this. Still, it can sting when you hear you aren’t as far along on the novel’s journey as you thought. Allow this disappointment to remind you of how much you want to reach readers. Let it wash through and revivify you—then roll up your sleeves to make it happen.

  1. 4.  You trust that the editor has your best interests at heart.

Both writer and editor want to play on a winning team. Trust that by capitalizing on your story’s strengths and bolstering your weaknesses, your editor is trying to help you bring your project to its fullest fruition.

  1. You are open to receiving frank reader feedback.

Try to open yourself to your reader’s perspective—she may provide you with feedback that is not at all what you expected. If she doesn’t seem to “get” it, you may have led her astray through unintentionally accumulating detail. Allow that even misinterpretation is useful feedback.

  1. You own the decisions you’ve already made but are ready to revisit them.

Someday, this conversation about your work may happen in a reader’s living room with her book club, and those readers might not agree with every choice you made. You need the quiet, non-combative confidence that comes from having a reason for what you’ve done—and allowing for difference of opinion anyway. At this point, you need to see it from the editor’s perspective, too, and make your best decision as to how to move forward.

  1. You are in this for the long haul and want to build your skill set.

Like schooling, publishing success demands diligence applied over the long haul. You may need another round of edits, since once you’ve made changes, you may have unwittingly introduced new issues. This is the nature of education.

  1. You are clear about your goal.

Publication is not your end goal—it is simply a means to an end. The goal is to connect with readers—whether that be an agent, an acquisition editor, or a bookstore browser—in a way that results in repeat sales. That's how any entrepreneur stays in business.

Even with this emotional intelligence profile, it still may not feel good to read your developmental editor’s evaluation. But you’ll be better able to negotiate the collaboration, and the work it inspires will enhance your story’s meaning. You’ll feel that rush that always comes when your writing grows in both confidence and nuance. Your love for your characters will grow as their characterization deepens.

In my experience, it is those who treasure these benefits from a developmental edit who have what it takes to go the distance throughout the publishing process.

 

Have you hired an independent developmental editor? Did any aspect of the process hijack you, emotionally? Do you have anything to add to this checklist?

About Kathryn:

Kathryn Craft  is the award-winning author of two novels from Sourcebooks, The Art of Falling and The Far End of Happy, and a developmental editor at Writing-Partner.com, specializing in storytelling structure and writing craft. Her chapter “A Drop of Imitation: Learn from the Masters” was included in the writing guide Author in Progress, from Writers Digest Books. Janice Gable Bashman’s interview with her, “How Structure Supports Meaning,” originally published in the 2017 Novel & Short Story Writer’s Market, has been reprinted in The Complete Handbook of Novel Writingboth from Writer’s Digest Books.

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You’re Driving Me Crazy!

Laurie Schnebly Campbell

You’ve heard of the Myers-Briggs test, right? Maybe even taken it for school or work? Maybe even had one or two or 28 of your characters take it?

No worries if you haven’t done any of that -- it’s a pretty simple concept, which goes all the way back to Aristotle. (Actually even before him, but he’s the first famous person who believed in these four core personality types.)

Characters who drive each other crazy fit those types.

Of course each character is more, a LOT more, than just a personality core. But noticing what’s way deep down at their most fundamental layers is a handy way to know not only what’s making them tick...but also what’s creating problems for them in their relationships with other characters.

It’s what gets them sparking conflict with one another -- and sometimes even within themselves.

Why does driving each other crazy matter?

Because problems like North vs. South, or Dog vs. Cat, or Traditional vs. Modern, don’t always provide the kind of conflict you need to keep readers glued to the story. 

For that, you need conflict that might not be evident from the first paragraph a character appears on the scene. That’s the kind of problem which goes beyond just Dog Versus Cat.

 

So let’s say you (or your characters) have already determined -- or will determine during the class in May -- whether each person is:

* More energized by being in a group or more energized by being on their own

* More inclined to notice what’s worked in the past, or to come up with ideas out of the blue  

* More apt to base their actions on how they feel or on what they think

 * More excited about embarking on the new quest or about successfully completing it

 

For each of those four choices, neither side is better. The greatest heroes and the worst villains are pretty evenly scattered among every possibility on the list.

Depending on what kind of story you’re writing, you could choose characters based on all 16 potential combinations -- and feel confident that they’re going to run into SOME kind of conflict along the way.

But what if you want to improve the chances for something important? Like:

A really compelling conflict

That’s where you get into the personality types which combine different aspects of those choices. And what’s amazing is that even though these four types are the same ones observed by Aristotle, they’re equally valid today.

When it comes to driving each other (not to mention themselves) crazy, people haven’t really changed that much in the last 2,400 years.

Sure, someone who’s a corporate raider today might have been a Viking raider in the eighth century. And someone who took bread to the leper colony a thousand years ago...

 ...might send checks to a charity today. But the deep-down personality which makes them behave that way? It’s still the same thing.

So, since people throughout the millennia have clung to the essentials of what makes them who they are, it’s no surprise that the types which combine various aspects of each core value are naturally gonna have some problems with one another.

Even more convenient, they’re ALSO going to have something else:

Problems with their own type

Take the Viking raider and corporate raider, for instance. Let’s say the Viking time-traveled to present-day Manhattan and is working with the executive who wants to use him in her new ad campaign. (Can you tell my day job is in advertising?)

Each one is going to have traits they admire in themselves and in the other person: strength of character, the ability to move quickly, skill at spotting potential problems, and so on.

But of course, they’ll also have traits they might like just fine in themselves and object to in the other person...like the assumption that “I’m going to be in charge.”

They might even have traits they dislike in themselves AND in each other, like the inability to stop planning for half a moment to appreciate the beauty of the sunset. And while all of those are very surface-level examples, you can see the opportunities for trouble between (and within) these characters who share the same type.

So, given that these reasonably similar people already have their share of problems, you can easily imagine the potential for...

 

Trouble between different types

We’ll talk more about that in next month’s class on Relationships by Aristotle, to which some commenter will win free registration (or a refund if you’ve already signed up for the class), but meanwhile here’s a question for you:

In a book you’ve written or read recently, what personality trait created the most trouble WITHIN one character or BETWEEN two characters?

If you’re pressed for time, it’s fine to say something as simple as “pride.” It’s also fine to go into more detail, which’ll give everyone else a reason to read that same book.

And while I’m taking off around 7pm Eastern time today for a workshop in New Orleans tomorrow, I can’t wait to check back before & after the flight to see what you have to say!

 

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About Laurie

After winning Romantic Times‘ “Best Special Edition of the Year” over Nora Roberts, Laurie Schnebly Campbell discovered she loved teaching every bit as much as writing...if not more. Since then she’s taught online and live workshops for so many writers that she keeps a special section of her bookshelves for people who’ve developed that particular novel (a total of 43 so far) in her classes – like the upcoming one on using Myers-Briggs for conflict.

Steps of the hero's journeyhttps://writersinthestormblog.com/2017/08/no-road-she-cant-travel/

(Note from Fae Rowen: If you've never seen the questions, six years ago I wrote a post that you might find interesting, with links to an online version of the Myers-Briggs test for you to take.)

 

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Not Your Mama’s Character Descriptions

Margie Lawson

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Does your real or imaginary writing checklist include: Make Character Descriptions Fresh, Unpredictable, Multi-Powerful?

If not, it could.

Character descriptions can add power on multiple levels. You can treat the reader to something fresh, something they haven’t read before. You can slip in details that deepen characterization too.

Character descriptions provide an opportunity to:

  • write fresh
  • boost cadence
  • add a humor hit
  • strengthen emotion
  • slip in backstory or other story dynamics
  • share physical and psychological descriptions
  • deepen characterization for one or more characters, including relationships

The more important a character, the more attention and power they deserve in the description.

Attention: Consider the number of lines.

Power: Be strategic regarding style and structure.

The Promise Between Us, Barbara Claypole White

  1. "They made a good team in the classroom, despite their different styles—and physiques. Thanks to all the lifting and hauling of steel, Ben was a Viking built for battle; Trent was a mix of scrappy street fighter and Dudley Moore in Santa Claus: The Movie."

 Deep Edit Analysis:

      Linked Ben’s description to his job.

      Rhetorical Devices:

  1. Alliteration: scrappy, street, Santa
  2. Allusion: character in movie
  3. "Ben raked his hands through his dirty-blonde hair. He kept trying to sculpt it up, but the front continued to flop forward into a cowlick that made him look younger than thirty-five."

Deep Edit Analysis:

 Fresh Description

Age Slip-In – Smart!

Some authors like to share several physical traits. Others may share a physical trait or two, leaving most of the description for the reader to fill in. This plan works well in these examples from Dana Summers.

 Drawn & Buried, Dana J. Summers, Immersion Grad

  1. "Luke Skywalker had Darth Vader. The Hatfields had the McCoys. Me? I had Brawley, the editor with the sense of humor of an IRS auditor. He had the look of a man who sent his suits out once a week to be rumpled."

Deep Edit Analysis:

            Humor Hits!

          Shares POV character’s attitude about Brawley in an unpredictable way.

  1. "Between breaths, Stanfield worked his gum. His eyelids hung like broken window shades."

Deep Edit Analysis:

            Fresh writing.

            Implies Stanfield is overweight.

            Humor Hits.

            Fabulous imagery.

 Say Goodbye for Now, Catherine Ryan Hyde, NYT Bestseller

You may know Catherine Ryan Hyde is the author of Pay It Forward. If you didn’t, now you do. 

 Fifth Paragraph of Chapter One:

  1. "Below her on the front porch stood two young men, dressed in matching uniforms of white T-shirts and jeans. Even their flattop haircuts looked identical. The only obvious difference, at least at this distance and in the dark: one was a good six inches taller than, and had forty pounds on, his companion. That and the fact that the little man’s T-shirt was soaked through with a jagged map of bright blood."

Deep Edit Analysis:

The POV character is a physician, seems right she’d note height and weight.

Backloaded with blood.

  1. "He was a compact man, not very big. But strong looking. In many ways, he was a dead ringer for his son. Small stature. Dark skinned. Hair cropped close. Glasses.

         Taking him in with her eyes made her feel better. There was something…for a  second she couldn’t quite find the word. Civilized. There was something civil about him. Compared to most of the men she had met."

Deep Edit Analysis of the Two-Paragraph Description:

            Varied sentence structure, including frags.

            Shared a quality she respected.

            Implied she didn’t respect most men.

The Forgotten Ones, Steena Holmes, Immersion Grad, NYT Bestseller           

  1. "My grandfather is an old man. He’s thin, frail-looking, and with only a little bit of hair on his head. His face creases with wrinkles when he smiles, and the skin on his hands—even on his arms—is translucent."

Deep Edit Analysis:

            Clear description. I like that she didn’t share the color of that little bit of hair.

           The reader knows he’s dying. Translucent skin, backloaded.

  1. "His gray-blue eyes stare at me with a steadiness, measuring me, judging me while I stand there.

Do I pass?

What does he think when he looks at me? Does he see a thin and mangy girl trying to find her way in the world, or a confident woman willing to take the world by storm—what I hope to portray?"

Deep Edit Analysis of the Three-Paragraph Description:

            First Paragraph: Lots of power words, triggers her emotional reaction.

          Second Paragraph: Strong stand-alone.

          Third Paragraph: Slips in two physical descriptors for the POV character, and hints at her struggle with her self-concept. Smart!

Long Shot, Kennedy Ryan, Immersion Grad

"She must be a good seven inches over five feet. A guy my height gets used to towering over everyone else, but I like a woman with a little height. Her hair, dark and dense as midnight, is an adventure, roaming wild and untamed around her face in every direction, drifting past her shoulders. She looks pissed, her wide, full mouth tight, and the sleek line of her jaw bunched."

Deep Edit Analysis:

            Shares her height and hints at his.

           Alliteration: dark, dense, drifting

          Shares her emotional set, angry, but does it with descriptors that are suggestive—wide, full mouth, sleek like of jaw. 

My Hope Next Door, Tammy L. Gray, Immersion Grad, RITA Winner

"He hadn’t changed much. His hair was still in need of a good cut, and his mouth still wore that infuriating smirk that attempted to be both condescending and charming. But he’d aged. Lines cut around his eyes, and his skin had a weathered look from working outside in the hot Georgia sun.

She eyed the distance between his massive body and the edge of the narrow aisle he blocked.

As if he could read her mind, he broadened his stance and cut off the little space that remained. 'A while? It’s been years, Katie. I almost didn’t recognize you.'

Of course he didn’t. She’d stopped dyeing her hair jet black and had cut at least five inches off the length. She also wasn’t wearing frayed booty shorts and a ticked-off expression. Well, she hadn’t been scowling, not until Cooper cornered her.

He reached out to touch her natural, more traditional locks of hair, and she flinched. Physically, he’d never hurt her, but the man knew how to throw an emotional right hook that could knock a person down for days."

Deep Edit Analysis of Five-Paragraph Description:

            First Paragraph: Shared some negatively-connoted descriptors

          Shared two factoids too. We’re in Georgia, and he works outside.

          Second Paragraph: Shared another physical descriptor, and intimidation.

          Third Paragraph: More intimidation, and sets up her description.

          Fourth Paragraph: Points to Tammy Gray for slipping in description for the POV character and contrasting with how she had been years before.

          Fifth Paragraph: Deepens relationship and strengthens emotion.

Hints at their history and added emotion in fresh way. 

The Darkest Lie, Pintip Dunn, Immersion Grad, RITA Winner, NYT Bestseller

  1. "I rip my eyes away, and my gaze collides with a guy I’ve never seen before.

Which is saying a lot, since Lakewood, Kansas, only has a population of 10,000. He’s tall, totally built, and wears a pair of wire-rimmed glasses.

I can’t figure out whether he’s a hottie or a nerd. Maybe both. On the one hand, he has the kind of pecs Mackenzie would be all over like buzzards on a carcass. On the other, his jeans are an inch too short, the color unfashionably faded from too many washings."

Deep Edit Analysis of Two-Paragraph Description:

                  First Paragraph: Shares factoids and physical descriptors.

                Uses teen-speak. It’s a YA.

                  Second Paragraph: Fun and unpredictable.

                Simile with negative connotations (Mackenzie)

  1. "Mackenzie’s waiting by my locker after school. She sticks out her designer-jeans-clad butt, taking up half the hallway, so that the foot traffic has to diverge around her.

As I approach, her eyes flicker over my gray hoodie and black canvas high-tops, clothes designed to make me disappear. I think about walking past her and out the double-glass doors, but I need to face her sometime. And if I look like the coward I really am? She’ll find some way to use it against me."

Deep Edit Analysis of Two-Paragraph Description: 

                 First Paragraph:  Clear visual, negative connotations, shares attitude

               Second Paragraph:  Shares POV character’s clothing and why she chooses to wear those clothes.

               Deepens characterization for POV character.

               Shares powerful internalizations that speak to their antagonistic relationship. 

Now you have a few ideas regarding how to make your character descriptions carry more interest and power. You could have lots more ideas after July.

I’m developing a course on writing character descriptions, which will be available in July. It includes my Top Twelve Techniques for Writing Multi-Level Character Descriptions. And you can count on tons of teaching points, amazing examples, and deep edit analyses too.

Kudos to all the authors I referenced in this blog. Love their writing! 

And -- THANK YOU to the WITS gals for hosting me. Can’t wait to see you at RWA National! 

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Margie Lawson —editor and international presenter – teaches writers how to use her psychologically-based editing systems and deep editing techniques to create page turners.

She’s presented over 120 full day master classes in the U.S., Canada, Australia, New Zealand, and France, as well as taught multi-day intensives on cruises in the Caribbean.

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