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Pitch Your Novel Perfectly
Susan Spann

Susan Spann

In the publishing world, an "elevator pitch" is a one-sentence (under one minute) pitch an author gives an agent, editor, or reader in order to prompt interest in a manuscript or book.

I've heard a lot of these over the years, and I help authors write (or revise) them in conference settings. In fact, this coming weekend I’ll be taking pitch appointments and helping authors prepare to pitch agents at the Rocky Mountain Fiction Writers’ Colorado Gold Conference in Denver.

While the content of every author’s pitch will vary, depending on the setting, genre, and nature of the author's work, there are some constants common to effective elevator pitches. Since I’ve got pitching on my mind, I thought I’d use today’s guest post to offer a few pro tips for crafting the perfect elevator pitch for your novel or nonfiction book:

1. Effective pitches last under one minute. (No Exceptions.)

Many times, authors try to cram too much information into an elevator pitch.

(This is the #1 mistake I see, and the #1 error agents mention to me.)

Authors often think an agent or editor (or a reader) needs to know everything about the novel in order to understand its premise. That’s not true. Long pitches lose your listener, and can persuade an editor or agent that you're not ready for publication. Telling too much actually tells the listener that you can’t describe your work effectively.

Instead, craft a pitch that you can deliver in a single breath . . . without gasping and flopping around on the floor like a fish at the end.

2. Effective pitches favor “high concept” over telling the entire story.

The purpose of a pitch is to make the listener excited about reading your book or manuscript, not to tell the entire story.

Consider movie trailers and the jacket copy on published novels: neither tells the entire story. In fact, the most attractive pitches entice without revealing more than absolutely necessary. They tell you about you the protagonist, the conflict and stakes (s)he faces, and leave you wanting to read and find out what happens.

3. No backstory dumps.

For purposes of the pitch, your character's backstory almost never matters. I say “almost” because if your hero is a ninja detective (like mine), you’ll obviously want to mention that fact, even though his ninja training happened in the past. However, the details of his backstory—the woman who scarred him, the brother who died, and the fact that he’s really, really fond of udon—don’t belong in the pitch.

Authors find backstory compelling because MOTIVATION and FEELINGS and THIS IS IMPORTANT . . . except, in the context of the pitch, it usually isn’t. All the agent, editor, or readers really needs is "A middle grade novel about a three-legged chihuahua raised by a clan of ninja cats, who must employ his ninja skills to stop an evil platypus mage from killing all the ninja cats and taking over the world."

No matter how much you want to tell the listener all about the chihuahua's abandonment issues, and how his cousin is also a platypus, and how he also has asthma and a really bad case of gout ... please don't.

Backstory turns a winning pitch into a loser faster than a platypus mage can vaporise a clan of ninja cats.

4. Memorize your pitch. Don't read it.

Authors often want to read the pitch, because it's too long or complicated to memorize or because the author is afraid of forgetting it due to nerves. Don't do this.

You've spent thousands of hours writing and revising this story. You can memorize one sentence--and if you can't memorize it, that means your pitch is too long.

Edit, shorten, and tighten it until you can commit it to memory. Editors and agents understand nerves, but they also need to know you understand your work and that you can talk about it without a cheat sheet.

5. Practice your pitch with other people, and listen to their feedback. 

The first time pitching your book is always the scariest (and least comfortable), so practice it with friends and fellow writers before you try it out on editors and agents.

Practice until you're comfortable, and ask the listeners for feedback. Pay attention to what they say. If the pitch is too long, or confusing, be willing to fix it.

6. Relax.

Many authors are terrified of face-to-face meetings with editors and agents, but industry pros are only people--and generally, quite nice ones. The pitch is not your "one and only chance" for success. It’s a chance to talk about your book with some someone who might actually want to read it.

Obviously, this isn't an exhaustive list of ways to improve your elevator pitch, but hopefully it gives you a good head start. Do you have other suggestions that have worked for you?

About Susan

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Susan Spann writes the Hiro Hattori Novels, featuring ninja detective Hiro Hattori and his Portuguese Jesuit sidekick, Father Mateo. The fourth book in the series, THE NINJA’S DAUGHTER, will release from Seventh Street Books in August 2016. Susan is the Rocky Mountain Fiction Writers’ 2015 Writer of the Year, and a transactional attorney whose practice focuses on publishing and business law. When not writing or practicing law, she raises seahorses and rare corals in her marine aquarium. Find her online at http://www.SusanSpann.com, on Twitter (@SusanSpann), and on Facebook (SusanSpannAuthor).

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Fortune Cookies and Seven Ways to Use Them in Your Writing

I love fortune cookies. From cracking them open, to pulling out the slip of paper, to reading the fortune, to eating the sweet crunchy thing—I love everything about them. I always smile when I find saved fortunes (a recent "found" cache led to this post) whenever I go through an old purse or drawers in my house. They're great for starting conversation at a party, especially when one of my friends yells, "In bed!" after every reading. They make an easy dessert.

But what good are fortune cookies to writers? Ah, let me count the ways...

  1. Fortune cookies are succinct in their predictions or advice. They don't tell you everything. No backstory. No names. Just "Beware a stranger." or "A surprise tonight." What if you plant a foreshadowing idea or information like a fortune cookie for your reader? You can heighten the suspense, tension or anticipation with a hint of danger or excitement, but keep it a mystery so your readers continue to turn the pages.
  2. Fortune cookies are fun. Who hasn't scoffed at a fortune cookie, then later had a friend remind them about dinner at Wong Fu's and the crazy fortunes? Have you ever gotten a fortune that you so wanted to be  true? What would that fortune be for your protagonist? For your villain?
  3. Have you ever gotten a fortune that you abso-posi-lutely didn't want to happen? Were you hyper-vigilant, worried, in denial, laughing? What if an off-handed comment produced the same response in your hero? Think about how that comment was heard. From a neighboring table in a fancy restaurant by a beautiful stranger? Overheard outside his partner's office? Whispered in his ear after passionate lovemaking? The message is important, but so is the delivery.
  4. What do you do when the bag, or box, is empty? Do you rush out for more? Are you happy those cookies are finally gone? What does your character do when there seems to be no help, no insight, no where to turn? Do they rush to be in the company of others or are they content with solitude? Do they seek advice from reliable, or not so reliable, sources? How do they get through that black moment?
  5. If your muse is on vacation, grab a bag of fortune cookies and crack them open. You'll find something to spark a story idea, whether it's for your work in progress or for starting a brand new project. Expect some fun, even if you don't eat the cookies.
  6. Everybody orders take-out. Think goal-motivation-conflict. The hero's goal is bad news for your
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    heroine. Her goal is equally bad for him. What if they ordered take-out, alone or together, and the fortunes are just what they want, but for the other person? You could spin that into a humorous, awkward, or dramatic response, depending on where the scene takes place in your book.
  7. And, of course, you know, there never has to be a mention of a fortune cookie in your manuscript. This can be a covert strategy. Transparency isn't necessary for authors.

 Share one of your saved fortunes with us. Other than "You're going to sell a book soon"-because that's a given, what would your ideal fortune say right now?

ABOUT FAE

Fae Rowen

Fae Rowen discovered the romance genre after years as a science fiction freak. Writing futuristics and medieval paranormals, she jokes  that she can live anywhere but the present.  As a mathematician, she knows life’s a lot more fun when you get to define your world and its rules.

Punished, oh-no, that’s published as a co-author of a math textbook, she yearns to hear personal stories about finding love from those who read her books, rather than the horrors of calculus lessons gone wrong. She is grateful for friends who remind her to do the practical things in life like grocery shop, show up at the airport for a flight and pay bills.

A “hard” scientist who avoided writing classes like the plague, she now shares her brain with characters who demand their stories be told. Amazing, gifted critique partners keep her on the straight and narrow. Feedback from readers keeps her fingers on the keyboard.

When she’s not hanging out at Writers in the Storm, you can visit Fae at http://faerowen.com  or www.facebook.com/fae.rowen.

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10 Things I Know About You and Your Books

From our earliest moments, most writers are avid readers. We devour books – for story, for Craft, for new worlds and new ideas.

We have To Be Read piles (TBR for short) that are taller than small children. Our favorite authors and characters become our friends.

I don’t know if we become students of the written word because we love to read or if we read because we were born to love the written word. All that chicken and egg Zen is well beyond me.

I just flat out love books and every writer I know does too. You might even describe us as “obsessed with the printed word.” It takes a lot of love to go through what we must do to yank our stories from our hearts onto the page.

If you are a writer, there are things that I know about you and your books:

1. I know you get uncomfortable when you are "bookless."
If you are stuck somewhere without a book, you will begin reading any words available – shampoo bottles, food labels, billboard signs. Whatever. Books and magazines are preferred, but in a pinch, any words will smooth your soul. (Do you keep a bag of books in your car trunk like I do?)

2. You read by flashlight in bed at night when you were a child.
When your person-in-charge confiscated it, you waited 5 minutes before pulling the back-up light from its crafty hidey-hole. If they were on to you and confiscated the back-up, you tilted the pages to try to read by the light from the hall.

3. When a book touches you, it is a safe bet that you will not only remember the details of that story, characters, etc…you will also remember where you were the first time you read it and what you were doing that day.

4. I am certain that if you named 10 best friends from the various periods of your life (and were being honest), at least half of them would be book characters or authors.

5. You have different books for different moods. These are your go-to books when you’re in the grip of overwhelming emotion. You keep reading through that stash of books until the feeling gets a little more manageable.

6. Piles of free books by your most cherished authors gives you that same zing of attraction that you felt the first time you saw your true love.

7. When you go to a conference or a book events attended by your favorite author(s), your tongue gets tied in knots and the idea of speaking to them gives you an extreme physical reaction. (I blush, nearly every time, which is a surprise to everyone who knows me.)

8. You have rituals associated with your books.
Whether it’s the way you clean them, sort them, store them or lend them, there is something particular you do with your books. And it makes you feel happy and peaceful when you look at your books after you’ve done it.

(For me, it’s the way I order them and which shelf or room they’re in. My husband knows: don’t be moving my books without telling me, or I will turn into Devil Wife.)

9. On the touchy subject of lending…writers are quite particular about loaning their books.

I know that when someone borrows a treasured book from you and doesn’t return it – or worse, passes it on to someone else without asking you first – your friendship with them changes. You’re probably  still their friend, but you’ll either “forget” to loan them books in the future or you buy a copy from the used bookstore as a back-up and loan them that.

There is an A-List of book-borrowers in your life and you love to have coffee with these people.

10. When a book touches your spirit and transports you to a place you’ve never been, it’s not uncommon for you to read the last page, turn the book over and start at Page 1 to figure out how the author did that.

There are more things that I know about writers and their reading habits but I want to hear from all of you. What are your book rituals? Do you non-writers have book rituals too? Which of the ten “habits” made you laugh?

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About Jenny Hansen

By day, Jenny provides training and social media marketing for an accounting firm. By night she writes humor, memoir, women’s fiction and short stories. After 18 years as a corporate software trainer, she’s delighted to sit down while she works.

When she’s not at her personal blog, More Cowbell, Jenny can be found on Twitter at JennyHansenCA or at Writers In The Storm.

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