You know I’m the cheerleader of the WITS bunch, right? I’m the old lady jumping up and down on the sidelines in a too-short skirt so tight that the zipper won’t go up all the way, yelling my head off, telling writers they can DO this!
Anyone who follows me on Twitter knows that every morning I post two quotes. The first is a cowboy quote. Cute, clever, common-sense, down-home advice, like:
“Remember to load your brain before you shoot your mouth off.”
Or, “Worry is like a rocking horse. It's something to do that doesn't get you anywhere.”
The second quote is about writing. I began a file years ago, to give me inspiration when I needed it, and then decided to share – after all, all those who toil alone, wrangling thoughts into words need inspiration.
Lately, as my deadline draws near, and the end of my WIP does not, I’ve been reaching for inspiration (along with coffee, wine and therapy). The below quotes are for you.
GOOOoooooo Writers!
“The road to hell is paved with works-in-progress.”
—Philip Roth
“Writing a book is a horrible, exhausting struggle, like a long bout of some painful illness. One would never undertake such a thing if one were not driven on by some demon whom one can neither resist nor understand.”
—George Orwell
“We are all apprentices in a craft where no one ever becomes a master.”
—Ernest Hemingway
“Making people believe the unbelievable is no trick; it’s work. … Belief and reader absorption come in the details: An overturned tricycle in the gutter of an abandoned neighborhood can stand for everything.”
—Stephen King
“I don’t need an alarm clock. My ideas wake me.”
—Ray Bradbury
“Let the world burn through you. Throw the prism light, white hot, on paper.”
—Ray Bradbury
“There is only one plot—things are not what they seem.”
—Jim Thompson
“The difference between the almost right word and the right word is … the difference between the lightning bug and the lightning.”
—Mark Twain
A professional writer is an amateur who didn’t quit. ~Richard Bach
I write when I’m inspired, and I see to it that I’m inspired at nine o’clock every morning. ~P eter De Vries
Don’t tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass. ~ Anton Chekhov
Fill your paper with the breathings of your heart. ~William Wordsworth
I often joke that I keep going until I get a yes or a restraining order. Steven Pressfield
Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia. ~E.L. Doctorow
What I like in a good author is not what he says, but what he whispers. ~Logan Pearsall Smith
If my doctor told me I had only six minutes to live, I wouldn't brood. I'd type a little faster. ~Isaac Asimov
I love being a writer. What I can't stand is the paperwork. ~Peter De Vries
A critic can only review the book he has read, not the one which the writer wrote. ~Mignon McLaughlin
Writing is easy: All you do is sit staring at a blank sheet of paper until drops of blood form on your forehead. ~Gene Fowler
A synonym is a word you use when you can't spell the other one. ~Baltasar Gracián
Writing is a struggle against silence. ~Carlos Fuentes
Most editors are failed writers - but so are most writers. ~T.S. Eliot
My language is the common prostitute that I turn into a virgin. ~Karl Kraus
How vain it is to sit down to write when you have not stood up to live. ~Henry David Thoreau,
Being an author is being in charge of your own personal insane asylum. ~Terri Guillemets
If I fall asleep with a pen in my hand, don't remove it — I might be writing in my dreams. ~Terri Guillemets
I write because I'm afraid to say some things out loud. ~Gordon Atkinson
A writer is somebody for whom writing is more difficult than it is for other people. ~Thomas Mann
A person who publishes a book wilfully appears before the populace with his pants down. ~Edna St. Vincent Millay
I hate writing, I love having written. ~Dorothy Parker
The first draft of anything is shit. Ernest Hemingway
I have found the most valuable thing in my wallet is my library card. Laura Bush
Writing is the only thing that, when I do it, I don’t feel I should be doing something else.
Gloria Steinem
Writing is easy: All you do is sit staring at a blank sheet of paper until drops of blood form on your forehead. ~Gene Fowler
You can't wait for inspiration, you have to go after it with a club.” - Jack London
Try to think of others’ good luck as encouragement to yourself. Richard Ford
“The question isn’t who’s going to let me; it’s who’s going to stop me.” Ayn Rand
"I'm writing a first draft and reminding myself that I'm simply shovelling sand into the sandbox so that later I can build castles." - Rachel Stirling
“I write to give myself strength. I write to be the characters I am not. I write to explore all the things I’m afraid of.” Joss Whedon
"Don't turn away. Keep looking at the bandaged place. That's where the light enters you." -Rumi
Okay, I’m going to stop now – just know that I could go on a LOT longer. I’ll leave you with by very favorite quote of all time:
The brick walls are there for a reason. The brick walls are not there to keep us out. The brick walls are there to give us a chance to show how badly we want something. Because the brick walls are there to stop the people who don’t want it badly enough. They’re there to stop the other people.” ― Randy Pausch, The Last Lecture
Your turn. Do you have an inspiring quote stuck to your computer screen?
Dish it!
The winner of The Four Agreements from Kathryn Craft's post on Monday (thank you Kathryn!) is Jennifer Jensen!
Laura's Sweet on a Cowboy Series will conclude with Sweet On You. It releases August 26th.
Ex-army medic Katya Smith has always healed other people's pain. Now she has to deal with her own. Taking a job as an athletic trainer on the Pro Bull Riding circuit seems like the perfect escape from her grief-except Katya doesn't know anything about bulls, and even less about the tough men who ride them. She doesn't expect to fall for the sport, or for one tantalizing cowboy who tumbles her defenses.
For rodeo champion Cam Cahill, fifteen years of bucking bulls have taken their toll on his body. Before he retires, he wants a final chance at the world title-and he doesn't need some New Age gypsy telling him how to do his job. But when the stunning trainer with the magical hands repairs more than his worn muscles, everything changes. Soon Cam finds himself trying to persuade Katya to forgive her past so she can build a future . . . with him.
If you are an NCIS fan, you know about Jethro Gibbs’ fifty-plus rules. I want to be as cool as Jethro Gibbs. This blog features my third Margie-Rule for writers.
Margie’s Rule # 3: Lock in the Emotional Set
My term, Emotional Set, refers to the mood of the scene. Writers know the emotional set of their POV character in each scene, but they need to be sure they slip it in each scene a variety of times, in different ways, for the reader. Everything should support the emotional set of that scene.
Themed Words – especially in description, setting, thoughts, and dialogue
We’ll look at the first three: body language, dialogue cues, and visceral responses.
Body Language:
Most writers use body language, and more, to share their characters’ emotional sets. They may rely on overused (clichéd) facial expressions, gestures, movements, and postures. Aack! Those read-it-before, said-it-before phrases invite the reader to skim, skim, skim.
This example includes a visceral response, body language, and a power internalization with a fun hyphenated-run-on.
His gaze sweeps down my body. Those twin dimples of danger match eyes that I swear can see through my clothes.
And I almost melt into a pool of girly goo. Jerk. Totally gorgeous-beyond-words jerk.
What did Brinda Berry do to make that piece work?
She started by giving a stomach-based visceral response two fresh twists. Moth, not butterfly. And this moth is caught in a jar.
In the second paragraph she added three hits of body language (gaze, dimples, eyes). And she amplified with an internalization we’ve seen before, but she makes it work because she amplified even more with a third paragraph. A big time amplified reaction, a fun teenage-girl themed piece with an approach-avoidance twist.
If you’re getting the idea that amplifying with fresh writing is a good thing, you’re thinking right.
Here are two smile-based sentences from Chasing Luck:
JT takes a sip of red wine and relaxes into his you're-being-unreasonable smile.
Hyphenated-run-ons make that smile unique. Easy to know his emotional set.
He hesitates and his sad smile reaches across the table to trap my breath.
Brinda Berry made that sad smile a stimulus that impacts the POV character. Smart!
Dialogue Cues:
If you’re not a Margie-grad, you may be wondering about the term Dialogue Cues. It’s a subset I carved out of dialogue tags. Dialogue Cues share the subtext of the dialogue. They cue the reader regarding the psychological message shared in how the character says the dialogue.
The words flew out like desperate birds, and Aria clamped her lips shut to keep any more from escaping.
His voice had grown thick, a deep caress that sent tingles up her arms. He remembered, too.
When You Are Mine, Kennedy Ryan-- Her debut novel was just released June 17, 2014, Multi-Margie-grad, Immersion-grad.
“Oh, no. You just missed the last bus.” The girl’s voice was husky-hot and sweet. Honey burned to a crisp.
Jo used her don’t-play-a-player voice on him. “He’s going to propose again.”
The next example has a character whisper, but Kennedy Ryan amplified that basic dialogue cue with a power internalization featuring a cliché twist. Powerful and fresh.
“You’re in love with Cam,” Walsh whispered, awestruck that he had been so close for so long and never seen it. It was skywritten all over his cousin’s face
What if Kennedy Ryan hadn’t amplified? What if she hadn’t worked harder? What if she hadn’t given the reader anything fresh?
Here’s what she could have written:
“You’re in love with Cam,” Walsh whispered.
Umm. Yep. Kennedy Ryan’s fresh writing deepened characterization for the non-POV character and for the POV character too. And it gave the reader a boost.
The Last Breath, Kimberly Belle -- Her debut novel will be released Sept. 30, 2014, Multi-Margie-grad, 4 time Immersion-grad
“Lexi.” My tone is weighed down with enough warning to sink a ship. “Don’t even think about bailing.”
Cal’s tone has cooled by a thousand degrees, and I hear a new note in it, one that sounds strangely like relief.
Fresh dialogue cues!
See how those dialogue cues inform the reader about that character’s emotional set?
Visceral Responses:
Visceral responses are emotionally triggered, involuntary, physical responses experienced by the POV character. Responses like hearts pounding, stomachs clenching, vision narrowing.
If the writer slips a few visceral responses in emotionally charged scenes, they take the scene from the POV character’s head, and the reader’s head, to the reader’s heart. In a well written scene, the visceral responses on the page may give the reader a visceral response.
The Last Breath, Kimberly Belle -- Her debut novel will be released Sept. 30, 2014, Multi-Margie-grad, 4 time Immersion-grad
No. My heart races, and every tiny hair soldiers to attention on the back of my neck, commanding me to run. Never again. No.
Her words zap me like a Taser, temporarily paralyzing my heart, my lungs, my conviction Lexi would do the right thing.
The last example used the rhetorical device anaphora. Powerful content, powerful cadence.
“Well screw you both and your puffed-up male egos. I am so sick of caveman attitudes.” Her jaw locked so tight, the roots of her teeth ached. She was pissed that she had to fight tears. And even more pissed because she couldn’t stop them. Bolts of emotions cracked like lightning in her mind: anger, guilt, failure. Disappointment. Another lost opportunity.
Sweet On You, Laura Drake, Multi-Margie-grad, Immersion-grad, to be released August, 2014
The next example looks so easy to write. But writers know the sentence below required some brain cells. It carries cadence and impact.
Her heart stumbled, then double-timed, a hammer against her ribs.
Right? That sentence is simple, and stellar.
Here’s another simple-looking sentence.
A knife of homesickness slid between his ribs, hitting near his heart.
Wow. Laura Drake got me.
Katya jerked, and before she could control her body, she was crouched under the table, sweat popping in her armpits and her heart hammering like the piston of a redlined engine.
Katya is having a PTSD reaction, and Laura gives us a clear visual and a strong visceral reaction.
She played off a hammering heart, but she empowered the reaction and amplified that visceral response which made it carry power.
Deep Edit Analysis:
Katya jerked – Physical reaction
and before she could control her body -- Power Internalization
she was crouched under the table – Strong visual
sweat popping in her armpits -- Visceral Reaction
and her heart hammering –Visceral Reaction
like the piston of a redlined engine – Amplified simile. It’s amplified with the power word, redlined.
Laura could have written: Katya started sweating and her heart hammered like a piston.
Kudos to Laura Drake for working harder. She definitely locked in the emotional set!
I stare up at him, confused, unable to move or breathe. My heart picks up speed in way that usually occurs on the second mile of a run.
There’s a moment of panic that rises in my stomach like a bad meal, but I look at Ace and he smiles. The panic settles and disappears.
He's staring at me like he can actually hear the blood rushing in firehose-volume to my heart.
The bass ba-bum-ba-bum-ba-bum of my heartbeat booms in my head.
Each of those examples carries power. She added a fresh element. A fresh image. A fresh sound.
Enjoy this empowered example from When You Are Mine, by Kennedy Ryan.
She fumbled through rebuttoning her jacket, fingers shaking. She closed her eyes for a few erratic heartbeats, struggling to rein in her body’s response. She was a running engine slowly cooling down.
Stellar writing! The imagery, content, cadence, and simile help lock in the emotional set for the reader.
The Last Breath, Kimberly Belle --Her debut novel will be released Sept. 30, 2014, Multi-Margie-grad, 4 time Immersion-grad.
No. My heart races, and every tiny hair soldiers to attention on the back of my neck, commanding me to run. Never again. No.
The same caution about using overused phrases applies to dialogue cues and visceral responses. Same-old, same-old doesn’t Velcro the reader to the read. Smart to push harder and write fresh.
Kimberly Belle deepened the emotional set with two visceral responses. Both visceral responses are common, but she paired them, and she freshened the hair-on-back-of-neck visceral in two ways. She gave it a boost of freshness with ‘soldiers to attention’ and she used that visceral as a stimulus for the command to run. She added two short frags that empowered content and cadence.
Check out another example from Kimberly Belle.
Her words zap me like a Taser, temporarily paralyzing my heart, my lungs, my conviction Lexi would do the right thing.
The last example used the rhetorical device anaphora. Again -- powerful content, powerful cadence.
And then I remember something else. Something that shoots a shiver up my spine and slams my heart to a standstill.
This example from Kimberly Belle has two paragraphs, for fun.
“Gia, I…I have something I need to tell you before you make that promise.”
My stomach does a slow flip-flop that’s not entirely pleasant. “Is this the part where you tell me you’re married, or that you used to be a woman?”
Ah! Love that humor hit!
Some emotional story triggers are huge, and the writer needs to provide an empowered response. The following paragraph from Kimberly Belle is loaded with visceral responses. Trust me. This amplified response is needed. It has a big trigger.
My adrenaline suddenly spikes, smashing my anger instinct out of its paralysis. A cold ball of fury forms in my belly, pushing at my throat, putting down roots in my organs, snaking through my veins, growing and pulsing with life. I feel it swirl inside me, and somewhere in the very back closet of my mind, I acknowledge relief that it’s rage, rather than grief, gripping me by the guts. At least my anger, even as sharp as it is, feels like it’s holding me together rather than ripping me apart.
Look at all that power! The reader feels this character’s emotions. The emotional set is locked in and powered up.
Visceral Responses:
My adrenaline suddenly spikes
A cold ball of fury forms in my belly, pushing at my throat, putting down roots in my organs, snaking through my veins, growing and pulsing with life.
I feel it swirl inside me
gripping me by the guts.
The rest of the phrases and sentences in that paragraph are Power Internalizations.
I’ll share one more example from When You Are Mine, byKennedy Ryan. Enjoy this power internalization featuring a cliché twist.
“You’re in love with Cam,” Walsh whispered, awestruck that he had been so close for so long and never seen it. It was skywritten all over his cousin’s face
Wow! All those examples from Margie-grads make me proud!
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One more point about clichés.Reviewers notice clichés too.
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Continuing to mine Don Miguel Ruiz’s The Four Agreements for wisdom applicable to writers, we come to number two—and it’s a doozy.
Don’t take anything personally.
Nothing others do is because of you. What others say and do is a projection of their own reality, their own dream. When you are immune to the opinions and actions of others, you won’t be the victim of needless suffering.
This second agreement allows both writer and critic such incredible freedom. Let me count the ways.
1. Following your dream.
As an aspiring writer you may be criticized from the get-go. Cynics disguised as family members, best friends, bosses, and even writing partners might say you are wasting your time. The odds are against you. You will pour more money into this endeavor than you will ever make back. It takes years to hone that kind of craft and what if you never make it? You are a fool.
It’s hard to hear such invalidating comments from the people you love. But listen again, through the filter of the second agreement. What are your loved ones saying about themselves? They are saying that they are afraid for you. That they fear the loss of your time and attention. That if you turn away from your dream, they can be released from their own striving.
By adopting the second agreement you can allow them to deal with their fears on their own. They cannot stop you, because you are untouchable.
2. Receiving critiques.
I was once in a critique group with a man who said he was “correcting” my manuscript. One man in an esteemed and expensive workshop wrote off my first manuscript as a “chick book” (yes, it was women’s fiction). One reader said I should rewrite my story because they didn’t like first person. These opinions were not helpful; it is not why I sought critique.
The second agreement suggests these advance readers were simply telling me things about them—that one thought of himself as a teacher, another as a manly man, another as a reader who prefers third person. Does this mean we have cart blanche to ignore our critiquers? Absolutely not.
But adopting the second agreement does help you translate usable critique. When a beta reader recently told me that seven pages of backstory weren’t needed, I heard her say, “For me, you have not yet made these pages relevant.” Rather than delete pages I knew were crucial, I instead honored her feedback and rewrote, deepening their connection to the overall story. When my agent read the revised section, it was one of her favorite parts.
By adopting the second agreement you can act on the feedback that you deem useful. Discard the rest, because you are untouchable.
3. Seeking an agent.
Some of you may know by now that I have rejected the word “rejection.” It is such a harsh, judgmental term—how does it help you to go through life feeling multiply rejected?
I prefer “misalignment,” a choice empowered by the second agreement. When 112 agents said “no thanks” to my manuscript, they were not judging my work as unworthy; they were telling me that at this time they were not the right agent for my work. Now I am not emotionless. The eight-year length of the search was at times discouraging, even though I continued to improve the manuscript. But why would I want to hire an agent to sell my work if they didn’t know how to develop or champion it? Each “no thanks” indicated a misalignment between my project and that agent.
By adopting the second agreement you can continue on until you find the agent with whom you are perfectly aligned. The others cannot hurt you, because you are untouchable.
4. Surviving reviews.
We humans love the arts because we get to know each other, and ourselves, through discussing them—whether that’s on a date, during book club, or by writing reviews. Indisputably, we writers will all receive both good and bad reviews of our work. We want this debate—it’s so much worse if your work is roundly ignored. But if you are going to discount the bad reviews as personal opinion, you must discount the good reviews as the same. You haven’t changed just because your work was reviewed—you are still a working writer doing the best job that you can.
By adopting the second agreement you allow your readers to decide whether or not they connect with your work without disparaging you. If an attack sounds personal, it is because that reviewer is the type of person who can only gain personal power by trying to steal yours.
Let them try. They cannot hurt you, because you are untouchable.
In what other areas of a writer’s life might the second agreement come in handy? Have you struggled with damage caused by the opinions of others? Let’s talk in the comments.
*To celebrate the new WITS website, Kathryn will be giving one lucky commenter a copy of The Four Agreements!
About Kathryn
Kathryn Craft
Kathryn Craft is the author of two novels from Sourcebooks: The Art of Falling, and The Far End of Happy, due May 2015. Her work as a developmental editor at Writing-Partner.com, specializing in storytelling structure and writing craft, follows a nineteen-year career as a dance critic. Long a leader in the southeastern Pennsylvania writing scene, she now serves as book club liaison for the Women’s Fiction Writers Association. She hosts lakeside writing retreats for women in northern New York State, leads workshops, and speaks often about writing. She lives with her husband in Bucks County, PA. Although a member of The Liars Club, she swears that everything in this bio is true.
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