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WriterStrong: Writing Historical Romance, Not History Lessons

By Lyn Horner

I write western historical romances, and I love researching the Old West. However, while my readers want to be swept away to another era, they’re not after a history lesson.

It’s my job to subtly weave in historical details. Today, I’ll give you some tips on how to do that, including examples from my books.

1. Let readers experience history through your characters’ five senses.

In real life we can describe our surroundings through what we see, hear, smell, touch and sometimes taste. Your characters should do the same.

When writing Darlin’ Druid (Texas Druids, Vol. I) I researched Omaha, Nebraska, and the city’s Union Pacific Station, ca. 1872. I collected train schedules and information about the station and its setting, along with descriptions of passengers and the town itself. My two main characters reveal these historical details from different points of view.

Example: Chapter one of Darlin’ Druid opens with the exterior setting and a few historic tidbits in the hero’s POV:

Outside Omaha’s Union Pacific Station, Captain David Taylor awaited the westbound train. Tired of the wait, he paced to a corner of the building, crossed his arms and leaned back against the yellow frame wall. This new depot was a far cry from the rickety old Riverside Station he’d passed through some years ago, he mused. Built on landfill, the new structure stood near the Missouri River Bridge, which had recently replaced the slow ferry service David recalled with distaste.

Admiring the bridge, he did his best to ignore the passengers and baggage crowding the station platform.

 Later, after David meets the heroine, Jessie Devlin, we see how she views the setting:

 With a sigh, she eyed the crowd on the platform. It was a mixed group. There were settlers with children in tow and all their worldly goods heaped around them. Others, well-dressed easterners, might be journeying west for business purposes, Jessie supposed, or simply to see the land in all its glory. She also saw buckskinned westerners, going home perhaps.

 And . . .

She made a face, recalling what her tourists’ guide had to say about Omaha. Since the completion of the Union Pacific Railroad three years ago, the river port had grown into a frontier city, which the guide touted as the “Gateway to the West.” Well, as far as Jessie could see, the gateway city consisted mainly of saloons, gambling dens and brothels. After three days here, spent in a cheap, vermin infested hotel, waiting for seats on the westbound train, she could hardly wait to see the last of the place.

 From these few paragraphs, readers get a picture of the raucous frontier city, the crowded train station, and travelers who rode the country’s first transcontinental railroad.

2. Use historical settings to provoke emotions.

Often, something we see, hear, smell, etc., touches off strong emotions within us. This can also happen to your characters. It’s a great way to present a unique historical setting, and it offers an opportunity for conflict between characters.

Example: During their journey west, David, Jessie and her brother Tye cross Wyoming’s DaleCreek bridge. This bridge wasn’t terribly high by today’s standards, but in its time it was taller than most buildings. And Jessie is afraid of heights:

Beside her, Tye was on his feet, craning his neck to see. “Bejaysus! It has to be over a hundred feet down! What a job it must have been building the thing!”

Jessie heard a rushing noise, spots danced before her eyes, and the world began to spin around her. Then someone was shaking her, hard. With an effort, she managed to focus her eyes and saw David leaning forward, gripping her arm. He wore an oddly concerned frown, she noticed absently as the rushing noise in her ears began to recede.

“Don’t look down!” he barked.

“Let go,” she mumbled, resenting his high-handedness even in her feeble state. She made a weak attempt to pull free, but he only shook her harder.

“Lean back and close your eyes,” he ordered sternly.

Not strong enough to argue, she obeyed his directive, and he released her. Tye said no more about the bridge, thank heaven.

3. Deliver history in dialogue.

Example: Dashing Druid (Texas Druids, Vol. II -- Tye Devlin’s story) includes a cattle drive up the Chisholm Trail. Here, the trail boss debates crossing the flooded Red River. His scout’s report reminds him of an actual tragic event:

Del nodded grimly. “How many other herds did you see?”

“Two wait to cross,” Jack replied as Chic handed him a plate of beans. “Another will get there a day before us.”

“Damn. And a bunch behind us. Sure hope it don’t end up like back in ’71. I trailed west that spring, sold to an outfit over on the Pecos, but I heard tell Big Red was a mile wide.” Del glanced at his segundo. “Weren’t you in that godawful stampede, Neil?”

“Aye, and a horror it was. Sixty thousand steers all runnin’ like the devil was after them. That’s how many were bedded near the Station at the time. Shanghai Pierce warned the other bosses ta move their herds back, but they wouldna listen. They feared losin’ their turn at the crossing.”

Del grunted derisively. “Durn fools.”

“Exactly. A few nights later, one herd stampeded and before ye knew it, they were all up and on the run. Took ten days ta sort them out, and I canna tell ye how many were killed or crippled.”

 4. Use historical settings to expand your plot.

Example: I read about a place along the Chisholm Trail called Panther Creek. Later, an elderly gentleman, whose father lived during the trail drive era, showed me the real Panther Creek. Excited to think big cats once roamed there, threatening cowboys and cattle alike, I decided to build a sequence of scenes around that setting:

“Listen up,” Del barked a moment later. “Most of you know this place. For those that don’t . . .” His steely eyes pinned Tye briefly. “. . . it’s called Panther Creek. And there’s a good reason for that. The cats have caused stampedes here before.”

He looked at each of them in turn. “I don’t want that happening to us, ’specially with other outfits nearby. So we’re gonna ride double shifts tonight and every night ’til we move on.”

 Three nights later, as Tye rides night guard . . .

 The panther had screamed a couple times earlier, but he’d sounded farther away. He was getting too close for comfort now. Along with the other night guards, Tye attempted to calm the cattle, not an easy task when he was on edge himself.

Glancing at the stars, he judged it nearly time to head for his bedroll. Three nights of double guard duty had left him dog tired, but the panther’s presence overrode his need for sleep.

He stiffened in his saddle when another blood-curdling cry rang out, sounding dangerously close. Dozens of cattle scrambled to their feet, almost ready to run.

“Stop your racket, ye devil,” Tye muttered. Figuring he was closer to the troublemaker than anyone else, he made a quick decision. Not giving himself time to reconsider, he swung the grulla toward where he thought the shriek had come from, certain the panther wouldn’t attack him. He’d seen the creatures down along the Nueces and back in Colorado. They must roam all over the West. Lions, some miners called them. Despite their fearsome cry, they usually ran off when a man approached.

He’d drawn near to a rocky outcrop when a long, shadowy shape detached itself from the rocks and took off running with a snarl. Startled for a second, Tye kneed his horse after the predator to make sure it kept going. Oddly, the cat appeared to limp, but it still outran them for a good ways. Then it stumbled to a halt, whirled around and shrieked.

The grulla stopped so short, Tye nearly catapulted over its head. Before he could regain his balance, the horse neighed in terror and reared. Losing his grip, Tye tumbled from the saddle and hit the ground hard, knocking the breath out of him. He lay there for a few seconds, fighting to breathe while the horse galloped off. Then he started to sit up . . . and froze.

Not ten feet away, he saw the dark form of the panther.

 5. Write historical figure(s) into a scene.

Example: In Dearest Druid (Texas Druids, Vol. III – planned release March, 2013) the main characters meet the man who actually commanded Fort Sill, Indian Territory (OK) in the spring of 1876:

Slim and middling tall, the youngish looking man was far from imposing, but Jack knew him to be a ruthless Indian fighter. He’d defeated the Comanche, Kiowa and Southern Cheyenne in what whites called the Battle of Palo Duro Canyon, burning lodges and winter food supplies and ordering more than a thousand Indian ponies shot. Left afoot and starving, the tribes had been forced onto reservations.

The commander nodded at Jack and gave Rose a smile. “Col. Ranald Mackenzie, ma’am. May I ask your name?”

“Aye. ’Tis Rose, Rose Devlin, sir,” she said, fingering the cross at her throat, a habit Jack had noticed before, whenever she was nervous.

“I’m pleased to meet you, Miss Devlin. I understand you need my assistance.”

“Aye, sir, we must go to Jack’s mother. She’s very ill and perhaps I can help her, but I won’t know until we get there, and –”

“Whoa, slow down,” Mackenzie said, holding up his good hand, keeping the other with its two missing fingers – the reason Indians called him “Bad Hand” – behind his back. He aimed a piercing look at Jack. “What’s this about your mother, LaFarge?”

“I got word a few days ago that she’s near death.”

“Sorry to hear that, but I suspect I’d rather not know how you found out.” When Jack didn’t respond – he wasn’t about to admit Tsoia had jumped the reservation to bring him the bad news – Mackenzie turned to Rose again. “May I ask why you think you can save the woman, Miss Devlin?”

I hope you find some of these techniques helpful.

How do YOU create historical settings without sounding like a history professor?What sorts of historical details do you love to see? Is there a particular era that interests you?

About Lyn Horner:

Find Lyn at: Texas Druids
Texas Druids @ blogspot

Also blogs at: Cowboy Kisses
Sweet hearts of the West

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Do You Write For Love or Money? (Or Both?)

Writers In The Storm welcomes back award-winning author and RWA RITA-nominee, Shannon Donnelly.

Last month she discussed 5 Quick Fixes To Make Readers Love Your Villains.

This month's post is more philosophical. We'll be interested to hear your answer to the title question down in the comments!

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Money ~ by Shannon Donnelly

The old joke is that when bankers get together they talk of literature and books, and when writers get together they talk of money. It's funny because there’s some truth in there. But the talk is usually more complaining—as in there’s never enough money.

Writers are actually touchy about mentioning money; too much and you might be accused of selling out, or being a commercial hack, or you might lose your friends, but too little and, well, you’re hardly a professional writer if you’re not making a living writing, now are you?

Too often we measure success by a bank account, not quality or quantity of work. We envy the big deal, the best seller list, and everything that seems attached to the big bucks. But do we really want to do what it takes to make those big bucks? Do we want to put in the hours—and the analytical work—to figure out how to write a best seller? Not really. Or maybe you do.

The trick here is to know what it is you’re willing to do for cash—and what’s on the ‘never gonna happen’ list.

Would you change genres, spend months in research, spend years in revisions?

Would you be willing to take classes, listen to comments from others, be willing to throw out that book and write another?

What would you do? And what won’t you do?

It’s only important to know your limits—they’re different for everyone.

However, one thing I’ve learned—my bank account goes up as fast as it goes down again. And it doesn't really seem to have anything to do with anything else in my life. Bills somehow always get paid—sooner or later. Money comes in and goes out. At the end of the day, for me, I'd rather thumb through a really good book than a stack of greenbacks.

This is not to say that money doesn't matter because a book’s sales can be a good indicator that you've struck a good chord with your readers.

Money is great to have around. It often frees you up to do other things. Awards are also cool, but they’re not the only things that validate the work. The truth is that sometimes good books don’t sell (or don’t sell right away). Sometimes weak books win the awards. It’s just the way things happen.

There are too many factors beyond any writer’s control. So all you can do is your best—and figure out what it is you’re willing to do. What’s going to make you happy at the end of the day? Once you figure that out, then do it again, and again.

And if money is one of those factors that matters to you, it’s really important to know your guidelines for what you’ll sell to get those bucks.

What about you? Do you write for love or money, or both? Feel free to elaborate in the comments section. :-)

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About Shannon:

Shannon’s writing has repeatedly earned 4½ Star Top Pick reviews from Romantic Times Magazine, as well as praise from Booklist and other reviewers, who note: “simply superb”…”wonderfully uplifting”….and “beautifully written.” Her book, Under The Kissing Bough was nominated for a Rita.

Her latest Regency Historical Romance, Paths of Desire, can be found as an ebook, along with her Regency romances, out from Cool Gus Publishing.

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DON’T FORGET: Shannon also gives online workshops and is the author of Story Telling; Story Showing, an ebook that compliments her popular online class Show and Tell: An Interactive Workshop.

Find Shannon online at:
Website: www.sd-writer.com
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Ax Your Cliches: Why and How

We couldn't talk WriterStrong without our Yoda of Edits and sparkling prose, Margie Lawson. Be prepared for great takeaway as Margie not only tells you, but shows you how it's done!  Here she is:

A big THANK YOU to Laura Drake for inviting me to be her guest today.

Everything I teach is all about WriterStrong and Craft Strong!

Most writers know to avoid writing clichés. But they write them anyway.

What makes something clichéd?  Overuse.

At one time every cliché was fresh. Maybe clever. Sometimes funny.

The first time someone wrote or said it, it was fresh. Now, not so much.

If you’ve read a sentence a dozen times, or twenty dozen times, or every which way but Sunday, it is as boring as it is annoying.

Clichés are old hat. Clichés are yesterday’s news. Clichés are been there, done that.

Clichés are scummy water under a broken-down bridge.

They’re predictable. They’re tired. They’re lazy. There are two ways that clichés weaken writing:

  1. Clichés are an invitation to skim. We covered this point above.
  2. Clichés block the power that could have been on the page.

We’ll dig deep into this point.

Again: Clichés block the power that could have been on the page.

Consider this cliché.

When my mother drank, she acted like a mad dog.

Here’s how Lisa Unger played off that cliché in Black Out.

My mother liked to drink. It was a mad dog she kept on a chain. When it got loose, it chewed through our lives.

That’s a perfect example of a cliché blocking the power that could have been on the page.

NYT bestseller Lisa Unger used elements of that cliché to deepen characterization and add power.

Enjoy these examples, and learn from them too.

Stephen White, The Siege:

Poe didn’t dig his heels in often, but when he did he set them in concrete.

With all due respect, you’re dead in the water without me. Miles from shore.

I’ll run over you and I will treasure the tire marks I leave on your neck.

Darynda Jones, First Grave on the Right

Hard as I tried, I couldn’t help but get a little hot under my seven-dollar thrift-store Gucci collar.

I could almost see the wheels spinning in his head. After a few moments more, I began to think those wheels needed a good oiling.

The next cliché rewrites are from Margie-grads in my current Immersion class.

Lori Freeland, Awakening 

Cliché: I’d been on a highway to hell.

Rewrite: I’d taken the ramp to my own highway to hell or merged onto Aunt Julia’s interstate to insanity.

Elizabeth Cockle, In the Bag

Cliché:  The relationship took a nose dive.

Rewrite: Their eighteen month relationship sputtered like a match in a rainstorm.

Melissa  McClone,  Bachelor of the Year

NOTE:  This book is set in the world of show dogs.

Opening of Chapter 1, Playing Off a Cliché:

The incessant barking from the backyard of his family’s palatial estate confirmed Caleb Fairchild’s fear. His grandmother had gone to the dogs.

BEFORE:  The quality of his suit shouted one thing—out of her league.

Story-themed Rewrite:  His top-of-the-line suit shouted one thing—Best in Show.

Multi-clichéd:

She’d tried playing up several rungs on the social ladder with a guy who looked a lot like this man. She’d learned the hard way that rules were different for people like her. Better to stick with her own peeps than fall flat on her face or land her butt in jail.

Rewrite:

They didn’t belong in the same ring. He was a champion with an endless pedigree. She was a mutt without a collar. She’d tried to play with the big dogs once and landed in the dog house, also known as jail.

What did those smart writers do to strengthen their writing?

They nixed or twisted or played off their clichés.

They made them story-themed and character-themed.

They amplified a cliché, like in the example below.

Melissa  McClone,  Bachelor of the Year

With her short, pixie-cut brown hair and no make-up she was pretty in a girl-next-door way kind of way. If he’d ever had a next-door neighbor whose house wasn’t separated by acres of land, high fences, and security cameras.

Writers often use the same predictable body language. Lips narrowing into a thin line. Eyebrows lifting. Hands fisting. Fingernails digging into palms.

Check out this rewrite by Margie-grad Lori Freeland, Awakening.

If I had talons for nails, my palms would be bloody.

Fresh and powerful.

The type of fresh and powerful writing that impresses agents and editors, reviewers and readers.

My online courses are loaded with tips and techniques for how to dig deep. How to write fresh. How to add power to every page, every sentence. Please drop by my web site and check out my courses, and the full line-up of courses offered by Lawson Writer's Academy.

Check out my Immersion Master Class page too!

BLOG GUESTS:  NOW IT’S YOUR TURN!

Are you motivated to nix or fix your clichés, and add more power?

Please post a comment -- or post ‘Hi Margie!’

You’ll be entered in a drawing for an online course from me!

 Lawson Writer’s Academy

1.    Sept. 24 – Oct. 19:  The EDITS System:  Turning Troubled Scenes in to Winners    Instructor: Margie Lawson

2.    October 1 - 26: Getting Serious About Writing a Series   Instructor: Lisa Wells

3. October 1 - 26: I HATE to Write a Synopsis  Instructor: Sharon Mignerey

4.  Oct. 29 - Dec. 7: Fab 30 in 40 Days: Advanced Deep Editing, A Master Class Instructor: Margie Lawson

Please check Lawson Writer's Academy to read course descriptions. Thank you!
Margie Lawson —psychotherapist, editor, and international presenter—developed innovative editing systems and deep editing techniques used by writers, from newbies to NYT Bestsellers. She teaches writers how to edit for psychological power, how to hook the reader viscerally, how to create a page-turner.

Thousands of writers have learned Margie’s psychologically-based deep editing material. In the last seven years, she presented over seventy full day Master Classes for writers in the U.S., Canada, Australia, and New Zealand.

Please contact Margie if you think your group might be interested in having her present a master class for them.

For more information on Lawson Writer’s Academy, lecture packets, full day master classes, and the 4-day Immersion Master Class sessions offered in Margie’s Colorado mountain-top home, visit:  www.MargieLawson.com.

 

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