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Your Plot Moves Too Slowly ~ 5 Tips To Help Improve Your Story's Pacing

Writers In The Storm welcomes back Kara Lennox, a.k.a. Karen Leabo for some more plot-fixing magic. Look for Kara’s writing tips the first Friday of every month. 

This is the sixth in an ongoing series of Plot Fixer blogs by double RITA finalist Kara Lennox.  Here are the links for Parts 1-5:

Part 1 - Your Premise Isn't Compelling
Part 2 - How To Fix a Weak Opening
Part 3 - A Lack of Goals
Part 4 - Is Your Conflict Strong Enough?
Part 5 - Raising The Stakes

by Kara Lennox

Plot Problem #8: Your plot moves too slowly.

This is the complaint you're likely to get from an editor when you simply don't have enough happening. There aren't enough twists and turns. Sometimes you might hear that your plot is too "linear." Just another way of saying, not enough twists and turns, or not enough layers or threads

You can gauge your pacing (and that's what we're talking about, pacing) in a variety of ways.

First, how long are your scenes?

Short scenes make for faster pacing. Long scenes slow down the pace. If you find one scene lasting through several chapters, chances are good your pacing is too slow.

How gray are your pages?

In other words, how much dialogue and action do you have, versus introspection and description? Long, gray paragraphs slow things down.

This is a trick Margie Lawson teaches in her workshop, but I've been doing it for a long time.

  • Buy yourself some highlighters--four different colors, at least.
  • Take a book from your keeper shelf.
  • Highlight backstory, narrative and introspection with one color, description with another color, action with a third color, dialogue with a fourth color. (You don't have to do the whole book, a chapter or two will do.)
  • Ideally, there should be a nice representation of all the colors on every page.
  • Now, perform the same exercise on your own manuscript.

This can be a real eye-opener. The first time you see that you have three straight pages of pink, you'll wonder why you didn't see this before and get straight to editing or cutting.

Another way to analyze your pacing is to make a list of plot points.

Any "event" that propels the story forward. If I were doing this for Janet Evanovich's ONE FOR THE MONEY, it might look like this:

  • Stephanie loses her job
  • Stephanie has dinner with crazy family
  • Stephanie gets job with bail bondsman cousin
  • Stephanie meets Lula
  • Stephanie accepts assignment to bring in Joe Morelli
  • Stephanie goes to boxing place, gets threatened by crazy boxer

How many of this kind of plot point do you have? I think the above list represents only about the first quarter of the book.

Yet another way to jazz up your pacing is to add subplots.

This is particularly important for longer, single-title books. A romance doesn't occur in a vacuum. If the main plot is about a heroine battling evil vampires while falling in love with one of them, maybe she is also dealing with her widowed mother's decision to adopt a child.

The trick, then, is to tie the subplot to the plot, so it doesn't feel stuck on.

In the above example, perhaps the child can provide the heroine some clue, some piece of insight, that will allow her to vanquish her enemy while still keeping hold of the man she loves. People in their twenties and thirties--the age of most of our heroes and heroines--very often have issues with their parents still to work out. They have ex-lovers, siblings, bosses, etc. etc. Mine these relationships for subplots and complexities.

Make a list of your plot points and analyze it. Are there twists and reversals? Is the main character driving the story forward with his/her decisions?

If you haven't yet written the book, this is a good time to brainstorm the twists and turns you might include. This exercise is a tough one, but persevere. You will gain a lot of insight into your story.

What is the most difficult part of plotting for you? Where do you get stuck? Do you have any Plot Fixer tips and tricks of your own?


Kara Lennox
, author of Project Justice series for Harlequin SuperRomance. Kara is an award-winning, bestselling author of more than sixty novels of romance and romantic suspense, for both Harlequin and Random House.

Six titles now available in e-book or print!

Hidden Agenda now available.

Sweet Romance Hard to Resist now available from Harlequin Heartwarming. Also, Callie’s Cowboy is an August release by Karen Leabo from Bantam Loveswept e-books.

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5 Quick Fixes to Make Readers Love Your Villains

Writers In The Storm welcomes back award-winning author and RWA RITA-nominee, Shannon Donnelly.

Today she’s talking to us about villains we love to hate and how to keep them from becoming a cardboard stereotype whose every action is predictable and boring.

By Shannon Donnelly

Nothing marks a writer as a beginner as clearly as the cliché bad guy.

This is the bad guy who is ugly inside and out with no redeeming qualities—this is the “boo-hiss” melodrama mustache twirling villain. And this is an easy fix in any story.

What’s that easy fix? Lots of things can help, but here are five quick fixes:

1. What does this character’s mother love about him or her?

Give every character a mother. In the animated movie Despicable Me, it was funny that the main character (a villain) was largely motivated to please his mother. His opponent—another bad guy—was motivated to please his father. This gave both characters additional dimension and something we all can relate to since we all have parents.

Now the character’s mother may not be someone who bakes apple pie—maybe she’s a bank robber, or she murdered her husband, or she’s otherwise no dang good. But figure out what does she love—and how does she hope her son or daughter turns out better? Maybe she’s proud her daughter is a hit-man? Maybe she thinks her son is just misunderstood? Maybe she thinks tough love will give him a better backbone? Maybe she thinks if she just harps enough at her daughter the girl will marry well?

Parents matter—even to a villain.

2. What does this character love?

We all have our favorites—even if it’s just a kind of ice cream. Alan Ladd in This Gun for Hire earned his way into fame portraying a cold blooded killer—but the killer had a soft spot. He loved cats. He’d look after stray kittens, was kind to them—and he was a sociopath. Because of that one soft spot—that love—he was more than just another guy with a gun.

That’s what you want for your bad guys—find out what they love and show it in the story. Make it important.

3. Why does this character do bad things?

Motivations matter—they really matter for your villains.

It’s not enough that the bad guy wants the heroine for his wife (no matter that she hates him). Why does he want this? Does he really want her money? Is he obsessed with earning her love for another reason? What are the deep, deep roots for what the villain wants?

A villain who just wants to take over the world is dull—it’s been overdone. So give him better reasons. Look at real people—Alexander the Great wanted to take over the world. And his basic reason was to show up his father who’d been good at conquering, too. (See how you get back to parents so easily.)

No one is born bad, so what twisted your villain into someone who does bad things?

4. What would make this character a hero?

Turn the story around and look at it from the villain’s point of view. What actions would make this character a hero?

We’re all heroes in our own story—we do things that may be wrong but at the time we think we have good reasons and they are right actions. Even Hitler thought he was saving Germany and building an empire that would last a thousand years—in his mind, he was restoring his people to greatness (the problem being it was his ideas of “his” people).

Maybe your villain has great reasons for doing what he or she must do—maybe she or he even regrets the need for bad actions. Or maybe your villain has no regrets—what must be done for the good of all must be done. Righteous villains can be really scary people.

5. Give your villain a trait you’d love to have.

Make your villains easy for you to love (makes ‘em easier to write, too). Give them, a trait or traits, you’d love to have.

Maybe your villain is a decisive person, able to make up her mind at once. Maybe your villain is like Cruella de Ville and is a style-monster. Maybe your villain sings opera and keeps songbirds.

Make this trait also matter to the story—Cruella’s obsession with black and white fashion drives the story in 101 Dalmatians.

It’s that kind of love/hate that keeps readers intrigued with any bad guy—and you’ll have a lot more fun writing a villain you’d also love to be.

What kind of villains do YOU love to hate? Who are your favorite villains of all time?

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About Shannon:

Shannon's writing has repeatedly earned 4½ Star Top Pick reviews from Romantic Times Magazine, as well as praise from Booklist and other reviewers, who note: "simply superb"..."wonderfully uplifting"....and "beautifully written." Her book, Under The Kissing Bough was nominated for a Rita.

Her latest Regency Historical Romance, Paths of Desire, can be found as an ebook, along with her Regency romances, out from Cool Gus Publishing.

Blurb:

NO MAN’S MISTRESS…
She wants a rich lord for a husband—she won’t end like her mother, abandoned and broken.

NO WOMAN’S FOOL…
He wants to prove to his friend she’s the wrong woman—he knows too well the pain of a bad marriage.

WHEN AN ACTRESS CROSSES PATHS WITH AN ADVENTURER IN 1813 LONDON…
The last thing either wants is to fall in love, but when desire leads to a passion that won’t be denied, how can the heart do anything but follow?

Find at Amazon.com
Find at BN.com

DON'T FORGET: Shannon also gives online workshops and is the author of Story Telling; Story Showing, an ebook that compliments her popular online class Show and Tell: An Interactive Workshop.

Find Shannon online at:
Website: www.sd-writer.com
Twitter:
twitter.com/sdwriter
Facebook:  
facebook.com/sdwriter

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Author Charlotte Carter Is Jamming On Labor Day

Today Writers In The Storm welcomes Charlotte Carter! Since it's Labor Day weekend she's keeping things relaxed, easy and ever so sweet by sharing her wonderful spiced nectarine recipe.

Charlotte is a multi-published author of more than fifty romance, cozy mystery and
inspirational titles. Her books have made Waldenbooks Best Selling lists and have been translated into a half dozen different languages. Her awards include winning the National Readers’ Choice, Orange Rose and Romantic Times Career Achievement contests.

By Charlotte Carter

Everyone I know is going to get a jar of Spiced Nectarine Jam for Christmas this year. Again. They have for past four years.

We have a dwarf white nectarine tree in our backyard. About four years ago it started going crazy producing fruit. One year my husband, who prepares and freezes the fruit for my jam making (bless him!) saved all the pits. He had harvested FOUR HUNDRED nectarines!

Even total strangers have received the gift of Spiced Nectarine Jam. Last year I filled 25 jars; I’ll do that and more this year. Three more batches to go!

The nectarines are positively, absolutely Organic. No spray. No fertilizer. Hardly any extra water. (My husband isn’t exactly fond of gardening.)

Since it’s hard to send jam via the internet, I thought you might like the recipe. The jam’s really yummy.

Spiced Nectarine Jam

4 Cups prepared fruit
7 ½ Cups sugar
1/4 Cup lemon juice
1 tsp each of cinnamon, cloves & allspice
1 packet of Certo

Combine fruit, sugar, lemon juice, cinnamon, cloves and allspice in a large pan. Bring to a rolling boil for 1 minute, stirring constantly. Remove from heat. Add packet of Certo. Stir to cool and skim foam for 5 minutes. Pour into jars. Use either self-sealing jars or cover with melted household wax. (This recipe can be used for Spiced Peach Jam.)

Happy jam making....

Do you garden? What do you preserve from your garden? Do you have any easy recipes to share?

Don't miss Charlotte's upcoming books

Montana Love Letter, Love Inspired, 10/2012
Home to Montana, Love Inspired, 3/2013

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