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Tips on Pitching Your Book

REMINDER:
Kristen Lamb is guest blogging on Writers In The Storm this Friday! Kristen is the author of best-selling books We Are Not Alone–The Writer’s Guide to Social Media and Are You There, Blog? It’s Me, Writer . Both books are recommended by the hottest agents and biggest authors in th biz. Her methods teach you how to build your author platform and still have time left over to write more great books! Be sure to stop by Kristen Lamb's Blog at any time for a dose of excellence.

With RWA National coming up, it seemed like a great time for this post by our Contributing Blogger, and multi-published author, Charlotte Carter. We've heard her speak on pitching and she is wonderful!

Pitching Your Book
By Charlotte Carter 

If you’re a writer, sooner or later you’re going to have to pitch your book to an agent or editor. If nothing else, you want to be able to tell your spouse/sibling/co-worker what you’re writing.

And you need to keep it short. (All of the above have a very short attention span.)

Naturally, I have some suggestions that should help you.

First, buy Lori Wilde’s Conquering the High Concept, available for about $25.  Her book is designed to help writers when creating a new story, but it works fine after your story is written. Using her techniques, you’ll come up with a 25-word ‘log line’ describing your story. (Even my brother can pay attention that long.)

Or you can use Dwight Swain’s technique, found in Techniques of the Selling WriterThis will help you come up with a short paragraph (usually 50 words or less) describing your story.

Every story has 5 basic elements

  1. Your focal character - You can sometimes have two protagonists, but even then, often the story of one character is slightly more dominant than the other.
  2. Situation - what moves the character to change, this is often what threatens your character or his goal.
  3. Objective or goal - The troubling situation your character is stuck in that forces him to act. Put another way, this is what your character desires and strives for. It could be something he wants to retain/protect or attain, which is endangered.
  4. Opponent - Your antagonist who works directly against your protagonist's objective. An antagonist who simply makes general "trouble" is not as vibrant a character as one who deliberately works against what your hero/heroine is working toward, someone who resists and fights back.
  5. Disaster - The climax of your story, the Black Moment, the point at which everything is Hopelessly Lost.

Putting these 5 elements together, you can come up with a paragraph that tells your story. Sentence one states character, situation, and objective. Sentence two is a yes/no question that asks if character can overcome opponent and disaster.

Here’s the result I got when developing my pitch for Montana Hearts, a 2010 inspirational romance I wrote for Love Inspired.

A heart transplant recipient travels to Montana to thank her donor family and falls in love with the organ donor’s widower. But does he love her for herself or because he believes his late wife’s heart beats in her chest?

That’s it. No extra details. A quick pitch that I can do in an elevator (while traveling only a floor or two).

The key is brevity. Don’t ramble. Don’t go on so long the editor (or your brother) glazes over. Hope this helps. Good luck!

What is your experience with pitching? Do you love it or hate it? Are there tips you've learned that you'd like to pass on to other writers?

~Char

Books that leave you smiling
from Love Inspired
  Big Sky Reunion, available now
  Big Sky Family, 11/2011
www.CharlotteCarter.com

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Writing a Deeper Story

By Laura Drake

ANNOUNCEMENT:
Writers in the Storm is kicking off the summer with a series of guest blogs and we are so excited!

First in our Summer Line-up is social media guru, Kristen Lamb. Not only is she the author of two best-selling books, We Are Not Alone–The Writer’s Guide to Social Media and Are You There, Blog? It’s Me, Writer , she is an amazing teacher.

You can find Kristen at http://warriorwriters.wordpress.com (or here at Writers In The Storm next Friday) but I warn you...her blogs are highly addictive!

Now - on to the subject of the day --

One of the most difficult aspects of craft I’ve struggled to master is “Show don’t tell.”  Yes, I know, this has been covered in a hundred blogs.  But I think the reason it’s discussed so often is because there’s so much to it. It’s an onion; you have to peel back layers of complexity to get to the nuances that you find in great fiction.

 

The first layer, I discovered when someone told me I was using weak verbs. Passive, ‘To be’ verbs like: was, were, has, are, etc. They add nothing to the sentence, and tell the reader not much more.

Tom wants to be a policeman.

Is better as:

Tom wants to work as a policeman.

“Work” is more active than “be.”

Piece of cake. I did a “find” for passive verbs and replaced them with active ones. I dusted my hands and put another notch in my writer-tool belt.

But wait. There was another layer below that.

I found you could use body language, or Dialogue cues to show instead of tell.

So : “I’ll have you arrested for trespass.” She said angrily.

Becomes:  “I’ll have you arrested for trespass.” She crossed her arms over her chest and wished looks really could kill.

In both, we understand that she’s angry, but the second engages the reader’s brain – they ‘see’ that the woman is mad.  It taps into an emotion everyone has experienced, so the reader feels a part of the action. As Browne and King state in Self-Editing for Fiction Writers, the first engages your intellect. The second engages your emotions.

Wow. That’s powerful. I was done.

But wait. There’s more.

There’s a phrase I heard years ago, “Don’t show me the soldier; show me the photo in his pocket.” (sorry, I can’t find who it is attributed to.) I think it’s stuck with me over the years because it embodies ‘show, don’t tell.’

You can tell us all day about the tired soldier. You can explain, describe, and make us see it.  But have him pull out a photo like this, and just stare at it, and the reader not only gets it, they feel it; the emotional punch to the gut that you so love reading.

That’s my current task; to engage the reader at a deeper level. To grab them at page one and pull them forward, following my character on the emotional roller-coaster that doesn’t release them until the end of the book.

What layers do you know that I have yet to discover?  I’d love to hear them.

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Devilish Fun...A Worldwide Book Launch Party!

by Jenny Hansen

The Man of the Week here at Writers in the Storm is author, James Rollins. His new book, The Devil Colony  will be out on Tuesday, June 21st!

For a great summary of the entire Sigma Force series, take a peek at Tiffany White's post today over on "The Ooo Factor."

The current book took James nearly two years of research to write and it looks like it's going to be amazing!

Writers in the Storm started the party early last night at our favorite Italian place with signs and books and witchy hats. Below are my favorites of the pictures we took.

 
 
 

How can you get in on the party?

  • Come hang with us on Twitter at #DevilColony.
  • Hold your own Devil-themed party and take pictures.
  • Stock enough of your favorite munchies to stay close to your computer on Tuesday.

What are we gonna do at #DevilColony?
Have a blast, of course! Socialize, hang out with James, our favorite tweeps and all the literary luminaries who happen to stop in. You know, the best-selling authors, agents, editors who want to visit with James.

FUN FACT: Did you know James is a veterinarian in real life? (A handsome guy who loves puppies...*sigh*)

What else is happening on #DevilColony besides “hanging out?”
Prizes! Not only are you there to meet, greet and Follow, you are encouraged to upload pictures of your party in progress. People will randomly be chosen for prizes, but the MOST CREATIVE pictures will make their way to a Wall of Fame over on James’ site, and can also win the big Mystery Prize.

As you know, Kristen Lamb is hosting the main party on Twitter over at #DevilColony, plus there's a Facebook page if you prefer to post your pictures there.

Are there other places to party? (Of course!)

So, are you a James Rollins fan? Do you just love books, and hanging out with other writers, in general? Will we be seeing you at the Party of the Year??

p.s. If Twitter is what's holding you back, go get signed up!

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