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November 26, 2025

How to Use Perception to Create Subtext in Deep POV

by Lisa Hall-Wilson

Want to level up your deep POV? Master subtext. K.M. Weiland calls it the black belt of fiction writing—and for good reason. When you truly inhabit a character’s internal world, you no longer need the authorial voice to summarize, explain, or justify motives. Everything the reader needs emerges from what the character notices, avoids, reacts to, and interprets.

Subtext is where the emotional truth of a scene lives. Done well, it pulls readers deeper into the character’s internal world; done poorly, it creates saggy tension and yanks them out of the immersion deep POV promises.

Deep POV strives to remove the psychic distance between the reader and the character’s lived experience. Instead of the narrator/author voice interpreting events, offering conclusions, or explaining or justifying emotions and actions, the reader instead experiences the story AS the character: through their eyes and the physical experience of the story’s emotional journey.

Become curious about the character’s perceptions, biases, assumptions, and internal processing. Let this be the only lens through which the reader experiences the story. Subtext becomes the byproduct of that exploration. When this happens, subtext stops being something you “add” to a scene and becomes something that happens organically.

If you’re wondering how to do that, let’s break it down.

1. Avoid Narrating/Summarizing Thoughts and Feelings

Real thoughts aren’t tidy paragraphs. We notice, react, jump to conclusions, get things wrong. Thoughts are fragmented, visual, and anchored in memory or emotion.

Instead of writing “The scent of lilac was heavenly,” ask: What thought or emotions does that scent evoke? A funeral? First kiss? Betrayal? Let the character’s body react—tight chest, sudden smile, clenched jaw—before the mind catches up.

This gap between the external moment and the character’s internal, often incomplete interpretation is where subtext lives. Subtext becomes a byproduct of authenticity.

2. Bias Is Subtext Fuel

What is your character’s worldview—what lens do they see the world through? Do they have a prejudice, a bias, a fear? Do they have a singular focus or goal for a scene? Let that guide what they notice, prioritize, and ignore. This is all part of subtext.

Every character sees the world through a warped lens: fear, desire, shame, pride, trauma. A distrustful character will scrutinize kindness for strings, hoard information, plan three exits. A perfectionist will notice only the mustard stain on her blouse while the room burns.

Repeat the bias across scenes. Juxtapose it against other characters’ reactions. Avoid explaining their reactions with a backstory dump (or a flashback). Let readers piece together why.

Subtext lives in the gap between what’s actually happening vs what the character thinks it means. Subtext happens in the unspoken between what’s said, and what’s understood. In real life, we use subtext every single day.

3. Priorities Become a Filter for Subtext

What a character notices—and ignores—telegraphs stakes. The teen raiding the fridge doesn’t see the new paint or smell gas because pizza is the priority.

Show the hyper-focus or the blind spot. Let the reader feel the emotional weight without a single named emotion. Instead of telling or explaining (through backstory for instance) that a character is terrified of abandonment, show their exaggerated response to a partner’s delayed text, the hyper focus on making someone happy, the physical response to a random joke, the suppressed reaction to a harsh comment. Their attention telegraphs the emotional stakes without explaining — she feared he’d leave her.

Show what the character is fixated on or misses completely and let the reader assemble the meaning.

4. The Reader Becomes the Interpreter

When you stop explaining gestures, tone, or silences, the reader steps into the vacuum. They read micro-expressions, vocal shifts, averted eyes the way they do in real life. There’s no narrator whispering, “She’s lying because her ex cheated.” There’s only raw data and the reader’s intuition.

We take in raw information and interpret all day long. There’s no great narrator in our lives or in our heads explaining what someone really meant, or that our past is hijacking our perception, or that we’re being a bit judgy but that’s to be forgiven because we didn’t get enough sleep last night.

Let your reader engage in the story and connect emotionally with the journey the character is taking.

How the point of view character feels (internal sensations, sensory information) directs their decisions and emotions. Allow room for your character to get things wrong!

5. Emotional Truth Is Rarely Simple

Deep POV works if you want to keep the emotions simplified, but subtext will have you plumbing the emotional depths of the scene and asking what ELSE is going on.

This is where you build in surprise for the reader. What’s the obvious emotion in your scene? Many times when I ask this, I often get one of these two responses: I don’t know. Or, I get broad-level emotions noted: he’s angry, she’s afraid.

Don’t label the cocktail. Show the body caught between impulses—fingers reaching then curling back, voice bright while gut knots.

Emotions serve us (generally) in three main ways: They seek to keep us safe, collect information to make decisions, and protect us from danger. Each emotion clamoring for attention believes it’s doing one of these three things. I’ve written about emotional context here. When you’re not naming emotions, the emotional truth in your scene has to reveal itself through behavior, internal sensations, tone, and context.

Why is your character feeling afraid? Be specific and particular. We can be afraid for all kind of reasons from physical threat, emotional pain, perceived loss — and the intensity of that fear is determined by the threat level and stakes. Leave room to amplify the emotions as needed.

6. Subtext Mirrors Real Life

In real conversations we don’t always say what we mean. We hint, deflect, omit, perform, stumble and stutter. Fiction should imitate this ambiguity. (Great post here from K.M. Weiland on this.) Go beyond the obvious emotions like fear, anger, and joy, and dive deeper into what Donald Maass calls Third Level Emotions. Readers connect with, identify with, more layered emotional narratives. We are steeped in ambiguous feelings, suppressed desires, and tangled internal contradictions.

Conflicting emotions and priorities make for compelling fiction: fear vs desire, hope vs guilt, longing vs caution. Show this conflict through setting, body reactions, context — not from introspective monologues — so that the reader feels instead of being told.

This means going deeper into what the character notices (and either interprets, ignores, or makes a judgement on). What does the character’s body pick up on, identify, or reveal even before the character’s thoughts catch on to? Whenever you’re tempted to write: something feels off — replace that with what sensory or setting info the character is taking in and reacting to instead.

Example:

A character glanced at the framed photo face down on the desk, doesn’t recognize the face in the photo, yet goosebumps rise. She rubs her arms, forces a laugh and goes back to the party. The unease intensifies, her hands tremble – maybe she’s going crazy. She excuses herself and leaves. Only in the car does memory click: that’s the same woman in the old newspaper clipping about the Jane-Doe murder. The reader was uneasy pages before the character could articulate the danger—pure subtext.

Deep POV gives readers access to the juxtaposition between what the character feels vs. what is said or done. That difference becomes a natural home for subtext. This is where the reader steps into the story and fills in the gap.

Deep POV trusts the reader to engage with the story and intuit what’s not being said to create emotional intimacy that’s honest and irresistibly immersive. The character’s perceptions and feelings are the only lens available.

  • Don’t explain what the character feels—show the trigger and the body’s reaction.
  • Do not translate gestures—let the character (and reader) mis/read them.
  • Don’t summarize internal conflict—let readers live the beat-by-beat conflict.
  • Don’t fill silence with narration—make the silence part of the conversation

When every word filters through the character’s perception, subtext isn’t something you manufacture. It’s what remains after you strip away every unnecessary explanation.

Looking for examples? This post got too long. Find a continuation on my blog here.

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About Lisa

Lisa Hall-Wilson is a writing teacher and award-winning writer and author. She’s the author of Method Acting For Writers: Learn Deep Point Of View Using Emotional Layers. Her blog, Beyond Basics For Writers, explores all facets of the popular writing style deep point of view and offers practical tips for writers. 

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18 comments on “How to Use Perception to Create Subtext in Deep POV”

  1. Thanks for having me! Guess I forgot to add a question at the bottom. :/ I'd love to hear how well these tips jumpstart your creativity with your WIP?

  2. I'd love to see something on when to use Deep POV. I know it's common for YA and women's fiction. I'm writing a novel with an omniscient narrator. I don't think it always makes sense there. Some scenes can be deep but not all of them. In fact deep POV that's not firs person feels weird to me but all of your examples have it. (I went to the blog--thanks for those.)

    1. Omniscient pov may be a hard sell with editors or publishers. It would be tricky to mix deep pov with omniscient since the reader only knows what the pov character knows. There’s no keeping secrets with deep pov.
      If you’re starting with omniscient, than limited third person would feel like “going deeper”.
      Deep pov remains pretty popular with romance genres and sub-genres (like Romantasy), thrillers, fantasy (excluding epic fantasy generally), YA…

      1. Yes. Omni may be a hard sell. But there is too much the reader needs to know that the character wouldn't even think about to make the story make sense. I started my first draft in first person and realized I was committing the worst sin in writing: confusing the reader. Omni allows for moving the lens in and out and reading a character's mind. So you can move way in. But it is very hard to write and keep consistent and not feel head-hoppy. It's giving me a run for my money.

  3. I love this post. I much prefer reading when the author hasn't tried to parenthetically translate everything for me, but makes me slip into the story more and let my mind do that work. I become much more involved in the story that way. I never realized that this allows the subtext to reveal itself. Thank you for this explaination.

    1. It’s like magic 🙂 lol I prefer to have to lean in and engage to understand what’s going on as well.

  4. My mainstream literary trilogy, Pride's Children, is written exactly like this - you get the story exclusively from the pov of the three main characters, one of them a chronically ill writer, from right behind the eyeballs.

    From each character (one pov per scene), you get a part of the story - and ONLY in the thoughts, direct and indirect - which must have an immediate motivation - plus the dialogue, and the character's actions as they perceive them.

    I don't use a narrator.

    I learned a lot about the mechanics from Orson Scott Card's Character and Viewpoint (IIRC) - and then it became second nature.

    One of the immediate steps in my process, right before I start the writing of a scene, is 'Become the character' - channeling the character, as it were. For this I always read the previous scene from that character to help get me into the right mindset, and keep it consistent.

    Direct internal monologue is done in italics - and kept short, and to the actual words the character might think (and in first person). Indirect monologue is the MOTIVATED stream of thoughts going through the character's head, in deep third.

    I've found it a freeing way to tell my story - from the pov of the character most affected by the scene.

    Learning and using are tricky - and then suddenly natural. I've finished and published Pride's Children: PURGATORY and NETHERWORLD, and am working on LIMBO - it's all a single story with the same characters, but broke conveniently into three pieces because Amazon couldn't publish something which will be 500K total in a single binding (about as long as GWTW).

    Because I'm chronically ill and disabled, this is taking me a long time (15, 7, and ?) years per volume - but it has been the thing that's kept me sane, and given me work since 2000.

    1. Thanks! I’ve been writing about deep pov for so very long. These deeper dives are what I consistently get requests for now.

  5. A lot of material here will be useful when I put together a 2-hour workshop scheduled for late January at a local writing center. The workshop will be about editing, but editing and revision greatly overlap. (We'll be setting up a follow-up workshop on revision in the late spring.)

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